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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart0 W0 h. b7 Z7 ^# X
You planted a tree
% u- j" _, ]1 E% ]From sunset til dawn# r; ~2 h1 n/ r$ E; m
Through darkness to light
$ A. M$ A1 r  a2 N1 o1 J# cNourished with my soul
/ V  Z. J# D9 K6 eDevoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life, J. F/ t% X' o9 q6 n) Z
You planted a dream
' ~" _/ y& K# B! q. c( kShould the sky fall down on me
  C, M+ C$ }  C+ R' W( z7 {& bMay promises fade in the sea8 {4 W; A+ }3 s/ O: {6 k
Sewing back every broken pieces6 r) x0 G& j; R
Bursting the love out of me' l# R' U+ q8 c: n" F

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
6 u% t  X8 Y: A1 Y* F听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!  ~5 l8 U) Y' x! ?8 ^( F. D

0 I! O1 x1 f6 k2 bIn the garden of my heart
5 O3 r" E) y, OYou planted a tree+ y6 {4 f$ N7 o6 h
From sunset til dawn
7 v* T) K- v5 H# wThrough darkness to light6 @( J5 M& O' [" h+ e2 O
Nourished with my soul1 q) a- }) m, r( `& }4 v$ Y+ I. {
Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?# U: l: l2 E9 n4 @  r- p- D

3 Z( c6 P; i) y8 m1 A' U写得真好。: M) L  R1 m1 f& ?4 P5 g5 s8 o5 V

8 s+ g* D1 i+ m加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
4 e, U$ N9 J' N. Y5 F9 X& c. u  o眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
6 {0 b6 ?/ h" J7 X写得真好。* u- S% D( z/ ~5 y- ?4 D! Y  u( V- S: N
加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表7 H& J1 J) C/ H
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

$ f# ~8 q2 O. p" {五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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  d9 I8 f1 r) h& hSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
' I3 O" M! x# s* hShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.' j; p2 i- o$ B3 a

( N0 A3 Y2 s; e- O' HSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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- K  q3 ?2 X- ~2 o4 m& f; m8 UThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.3 l/ J+ r% s% ~5 `4 ~

! Y8 k( m% D# z9 I, [5 V( S  _5 x1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".* y2 q9 i, g6 p. K: n
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
. R! i( L0 t8 T8 Nthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表  W9 `- Y3 r$ |" \: m  G
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊,有很多经典的例子。/ l. d4 m' Y) G# f+ {: u8 w
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》8 d# T% e% Y' Z6 n$ p  T

6 {( P! _) z! E! b/ ]7 vDon't weep at my grave
3 P* {6 \: h$ [* ^- f6 sFor I am not there,
' _1 F  v0 N5 a/ d/ {- o+ iI've a date with a butterfly
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If I'm missed, find a flower,
: x( a3 I# {! |0 z5 @I'll be there too,& t# Z  x" c5 f% M
Sniffing it's fragrance& \' Y( B* X9 C1 w' F; G) Z
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+ V' V6 U; t' t5 i7 ?0 TDon't be sad
: H/ R' ^0 g9 Q. I$ e, dWhen you remember me,
5 }' h; E6 f0 ?& g9 xFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
& w6 |4 S* T, G9 \& q7 c' m- ~. gWild and free,
( u6 h- w% _" V* JFlirting with the lighting,
8 j9 J8 A2 |  [, XPlaying tag with the wind,  \" z# h1 Y8 z: ~
Chasing the thunder
9 y0 k/ p) n" u7 W( @& JTime and again,
1 c  W$ ?0 |6 d2 I4 I2 \) O9 [6 ^Soaring with the eagle,
2 O9 z1 l9 J' X/ f5 H& x6 a. hSwimming in the sea,0 N7 O# @3 |6 @# z. |4 R
Enjoying all of nature
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