In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

. c& [' i: h* v& g# x4 W, sIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
7 i9 \1 P, |1 t, t8 \From sunset til dawn
* @& H$ N0 o+ UThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
0 Q8 o( x: p' P! S; t- B9 y* ]You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
# M) J' z9 G* X听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
% c) s  K0 t$ m; N4 ~/ ?5 cYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
! t. l% w: _1 t" c: O) T3 v* tThrough darkness to light
9 @+ f; u+ U. z& d* kNourished with my soul
. K% [5 R; B# k8 A) j9 mDevoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

8 E. c, W* R7 Y7 h写得真好。

# k1 @! i8 a+ R) U2 W! m/ t加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

' D; U) j! H, J1 _6 H$ S五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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% r; U: s5 @. K  SSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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0 c6 x/ ?  P. _+ o2 f% x$ m1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
, o* f% ^) h% a$ [) p' [thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

4 M2 \$ V2 r: V% Z) ~0 }0 |Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

, I1 r) f3 n7 M6 W2 Y6 ~Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

有啊，有很多经典的例子。

比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
' H4 ^2 ?- N4 T, jI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
2 Z: N7 t& M- c2 o5 R6 z! NI'll be there too,
( N4 f" ]" E0 B; p0 b0 J& FSniffing it's fragrance
$ N5 t! e% J( |) c: ]) O0 fRight next to you.

Don't be sad
3 F, M. H9 k* s2 r2 V& z6 vWhen you remember me,
2 o3 O# L! ^( |" c1 T" Z: bFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
: S1 B- z) ?. ~0 |' g: JFlirting with the lighting,
! @( Q- u, a) W5 cPlaying tag with the wind,
% B; R- e. H, p8 Z( z1 [Chasing the thunder
% G$ V1 i! P- I4 h/ C, b( YTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
, I% f! F( D( x5 X+ }1 \# G, _Swimming in the sea,
1 F$ F7 f) Y4 q! fEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.