我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
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* \0 R# `2 \/ B5 w/ j唯一的元老
一住三十多年

# E( X8 U/ ^8 O+ J5 U* S- S8 `邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
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邻居酷喜中国文化
; D, \2 ~( X4 J! \" r7 N5 [说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
' q9 r1 u; v4 j8 v# I2 E那不知名的曲调
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Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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in our community ---
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
" |2 ~" Y. n2 ]1 tHer light-footed movement
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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5 \- h1 T" X" F6 B+ k2 c, y6 H- AWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
- d( |" F2 O3 R/ Gneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
) [5 d  h0 K, h7 ~She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
$ K6 h7 [! R! E" A3 @- r0 I* i" bthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

  N) X8 p3 \6 \! M* S* _从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
8 r. p9 w: M5 X& q- |; EHer light-footed movement
' s4 ]; s/ }# Y( o7 L* p* ris just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。