我尊贵的邻居(11)

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1 `0 `& R- d6 s1 T  q! W我尊贵的邻居
& n8 g- ?1 d$ q; \' n! N9 y是我们小区  几十户
- {! |0 B! Q2 [4 a- V/ `) i唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
, _; a6 T& E, E; m/ ?白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
" _+ }9 G2 D4 |5 U似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
7 ~7 {5 Q; `- y4 C" d( ?6 ~如同女面朱熔基
# `% [. q" D: ]  l. {& W* h, _邻居的字
$ V& ?: ^/ w3 t7 ^; l$ `则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

& z+ B8 r# ~, g& N1 n$ f/ B7 J邻居酷喜中国文化
  P7 c: e( C/ m6 ^% y$ n8 K2 L说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
1 G1 r, `: t) f3 ]9 P那是从隔壁传来的
( X3 E1 t; x+ e+ H唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
& k% J1 `3 y& \+ d  n反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
( B* p% v  m2 x2 }my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
/ \; o; S) Q; Y3 i# NHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

; T, u  f" O) ~$ i7 j8 _9 m1 EShe shovels the snow on her door lane
" k& U1 i# [; g5 `before driving her own car;
4 n# z+ c% l$ x1 p  ushe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
. V9 s3 F- i5 O  t; Y7 I! @. ~as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
2 A, W0 d8 Z+ A, ]4 H# K7 dneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
7 a8 u3 |* r. K5 J6 i8 jNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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5 l4 Z! m1 Q) o8 K( \Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
* C) i0 ^  ]1 t/ |4 P2 fShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
8 D9 S. C4 A* `5 O# U  c1 o& Sfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
3 r  c, y( D/ D2 v  o5 l另外，翻译改动一处：
) x, }/ N: ?. t: F: LHer light-footed movement
2 Z5 j. A- O* w: @7 ^is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
$ H( v4 y( E7 {& l. O% \8 k5 \Her light-footed movement
5 y, a2 g0 x: }8 V2 M4 `6 pis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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$ w0 v2 E& T! V: \/ ~8 x) {3 a真的是太像朱镕基了！

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" c& V; f+ b4 K8 M% o6 j真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。