我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
& b6 H$ z; u9 |7 p' }唯一的元老
  [; Q3 I: q. \* D一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
: V" G) ^7 r1 L4 H" B1 x4 w; }似不识  岁月为何物

! R+ C+ c6 B$ l' t+ Z. s头顶英国文学硕士的光环
1 E0 Z  k9 y/ ?2 @& T6 T邻居气宇轩昂
: C+ \& d8 |2 B如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
8 w1 R1 p3 j' L* L; t其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
4 e, }" i/ g( D' D# C! e唯一的声响
' @6 L/ [$ c. \2 \1 O( O0 m0 A0 k4 K那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

) f! C  s5 J# C9 Z7 u* H- L  KLiving here for more than thirty years,
! T+ f$ G* D9 c4 @my prestigous neighbour
% a! |* `8 X. A% F/ Cis the only first owner of the unit properties
8 ?+ ~* x# E+ E! W8 c! [9 ?in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
" e! X" G: o  F8 t" w8 V0 HShe has white hairs and red faces.
7 H* T, p- j& `7 C2 q. ?/ gHer light-footed movement
& F8 M0 W2 A, d. O/ q% N0 R5 u" w2 Ais just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
" _! o; w2 I: nbefore driving her own car;
  @( |& B; F; o5 m: h/ O6 I2 |she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
9 o  _# h+ i8 [! A! pneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
6 K$ U' U. O  \- F5 t. r7 Hinterwined by dry vines.

0 \6 h+ f1 V" E+ PNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
3 z! [, O# N% ]/ E* t+ V) Y- \Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
, m$ k) s8 W; K/ U( m) z; N/ Vfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
! ^0 e/ I  L' `8 H& ?5 Dthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
+ F# q& O+ u+ I8 ^+ N; ZHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
' t3 N/ k7 ~9 g/ X真的是太像朱镕基了！
" v. O1 B$ f, i0 |- l! Jhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

. w# j$ B: K- M3 K- K. T6 w; I* p我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。