我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

! z' h; E$ ~% ?2 |" b( V3 Y我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
2 |, a+ E0 x: i' N# \! H唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
! t2 ]8 V* a; z" y如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
2 f5 C+ D: N0 e+ ?则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

/ C6 [0 ^: A  ]) ]  g7 z  u邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
! ^; M+ z; h  e6 r唯一的声响
% Y" {( l" |0 h' D8 M那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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0 o6 [5 ^% V$ Q2 B英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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  _/ k  Y* P! `. r; {9 X6 P5 S$ @! t  T- iNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
, z) ?' U7 ~4 E. i  r" Zmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
/ }$ V" q; D: T: aShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
2 A* E0 h" R( E4 \+ l/ ^before driving her own car;
. m/ P/ ^7 c2 u; Xshe digs her back yard
* p# e/ V/ [1 \/ ?3 ]to plant flowers ---
* E: F7 a- b. y( u% ~' v7 @as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
. D( F3 p7 ^0 s' z2 I' f+ ~neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
* P6 o$ @1 x9 P0 C9 pNeighbour's handwriting
) f1 ]1 t( A  c7 J6 c& yis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
/ G4 n* g/ M! eShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
/ b. n$ f; I9 K0 f- [, o( M/ nWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
' M: C6 e, B, lthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
8 e2 j% ?7 c* cagain and again.

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, |* J) o% b4 M土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
0 b( ^4 W) v' c2 Y* _5 r' |0 uJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

  @. G2 d# V; L+ F  f/ E. b从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
0 d+ N$ ?( N5 B+ g0 V. Jis just like a flying swallow.
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$ @$ J6 d* t6 @# l7 s: ?7 f) ]# LHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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' H0 c7 N) ]/ \, K$ ?真的是太像朱镕基了！
! o( ^3 p8 z1 P6 W7 q0 Qhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。