我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
' C, i- o( C# D. G# G唯一的元老
# J! [0 l+ t* O+ c一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
' q9 E! Z- f/ w& K' z- u白发红颜  不见皱纹
/ F! u% `! [) t* Y- Y, ]5 R4 p' C开车铲雪  挖土栽花
. K9 E$ O' N7 ^2 Q! s似不识  岁月为何物
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, A! b; T) k& K5 v; w头顶英国文学硕士的光环
" k! g2 u! p# Y$ @2 H. ]2 l邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
3 K0 p' X* {, P+ H. F, M2 [则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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" x4 Z9 Z% m: \" R3 s邻居酷喜中国文化
! _7 |6 p1 T' O9 e1 b说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
' _1 C7 F* u/ e5 N1 |2 N* @; F那是从隔壁传来的
8 Z; Z" u4 a5 Q9 T3 \# }唯一的声响
8 j, m- m. I$ C/ D那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
$ E) s' N; Z/ ^) _8 pShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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" A' e" I) N: j* PShe shovels the snow on her door lane
! j; _2 j& i) ^# |. Nbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
1 H) w% G$ F2 e6 TNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
3 z" d* q. i4 G1 R) tinterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
6 E) `1 U3 m4 _9 y- OWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
8 x# {  u. }/ I, f1 u. J$ [that is the sole sound going into my ears
% T" F" A4 ~' d2 W/ ufrom the next side of my wall;
  ?& w) F1 n1 ]! _2 Vthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
' P4 U/ u% x; o1 @7 Zagain and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

' y2 _( a5 E: B9 Y. [+ H9 Y从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
3 Y) B" K! h$ A: s9 {Her light-footed movement
/ m  L- t. e* Fis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
6 T  k/ Q) B6 ?Her light-footed movement
1 s) l3 @+ C9 q" ~( B: Y" l. |is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


9 Z8 @" W) j6 T8 j3 B真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
: o5 u# O1 A) h# M3 J! G- k真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

) }) u3 b; B1 H6 V" ]我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。