我尊贵的邻居(11)

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2 i+ t! k" l4 o- Z( h; D5 q我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
( L/ y3 O- J4 S' e+ K1 @/ K1 b* c  ]5 ?一住三十多年
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$ J5 Y% k  Z* C, V' }4 ]邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
; x- s+ X  c8 `* ]+ `白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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. b4 U: i) W: s4 |( K! g5 N头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
- ]* J* @! B; D  K" [则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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: l% P; V7 e3 q邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
3 T5 I7 w. U' a1 ~那不知名的曲调
7 T0 @4 Y" A/ x1 [反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

: O8 u9 X1 m1 E0 OLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
, x0 ^4 E! w7 v7 vis the only first owner of the unit properties
8 ?9 s8 _! }1 h9 iin our community ---
. W3 }5 M5 H, ~# ~tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
+ v0 y1 Z; K" e+ S' Hmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
# L3 }* p* s2 s& |$ ZShe has white hairs and red faces.
+ m0 B- M6 ?# M6 DHer light-footed movement
: v0 n# n( M$ [! m" yis just like a flying swallow.

: A: w$ N  S1 R: z; v5 LShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
$ l5 J0 _  |! M4 o3 b8 ashe digs her back yard
+ m" [! N) Y# E$ Zto plant flowers ---
' F, \, Y! o6 x4 Cas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
* ]( x! [$ F/ n2 bas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
6 o: U3 ]5 e' |4 z0 d' eNeighbour's handwriting
8 s% p  I$ z2 J8 D' yis so vigorous as to be the old trees
, v' |- m! B/ X; ninterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
, m  `6 r* @' ?" \6 sWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
4 _" g' Q/ n/ ?from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
  x9 h! B+ c" j9 C  uthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
* }5 L) j+ j( |/ f3 cagain and again.

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8 ]5 m7 v) V% d( }/ \- r( m土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

8 V) A0 Q) w' a: Y4 f& R我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。