我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
6 S8 ^  s" W5 X5 S是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

- M( x# B7 _+ a0 A- p0 v- f8 k邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
9 Z. C  ~' V) n' y8 {: m" e4 [- L- f开车铲雪  挖土栽花
+ H* Y' Q$ E+ n- W% j6 A似不识  岁月为何物

$ \! q( d0 D- j7 V( L9 V头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
& U. o! w0 T- M& I' l$ v* i如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
8 x& n) _) G' E; c. z8 S) K说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
/ k  p8 Y  F  y唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

& @. j$ J4 e9 }% SLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
' K9 Q4 h( m( ris the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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* B  |; ^1 c( _$ c, }( FNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
! X- `- e: L1 P! `" v$ H9 YShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
$ `# S5 `0 j# ^' W$ u$ Dis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
) [6 }: G+ ^% w& N0 K9 ]" D% _before driving her own car;
2 t7 \' b2 q# b- T4 h( E3 Bshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
4 \1 l$ y0 [& y* c( |# _- tas if she did not know what years mean.

3 A1 [. ?7 w, E9 RWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
# C; M! _  l$ j. nneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
. c3 ?) i, B( B. c/ Qas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
1 e4 D9 U* o8 t5 mNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
/ N5 ~0 o) l0 r' H; v: R' s+ Xinterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
2 D4 k9 h1 {1 y. g/ g+ tShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
3 W: d- c, \  W4 KWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
% y) n% n/ X8 o7 Y+ k" A* hthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
: v7 s9 g  B# r- ~2 \% M: e0 D& rthe unknown tune is extolling
9 p* ~1 Y& \0 ithe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
2 a6 F9 z. Q% E+ Z+ p/ tagain and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

7 F( [) X2 @6 F# F3 t% e从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
$ E& z4 ?1 ^  p* h( x- `另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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8 X1 o5 e+ O0 T1 u- Y2 aHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
6 z9 H2 o5 y/ i9 X) e) F真的是太像朱镕基了！
/ S! N3 {- e1 M% @hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。