我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

/ x! t) k% K4 a! }我尊贵的邻居
, v6 l9 f/ l0 a是我们小区  几十户
" b, J; H% c# _1 h3 ^7 U/ {唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
# q( a" Z, {" ?3 }) Y0 d( ~( F白发红颜  不见皱纹
) w% x& t  p) y5 y" e+ [开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

% _/ W6 j. G. L% [7 x头顶英国文学硕士的光环
- Y( y7 y: w) @8 w+ a邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
( f' o! U% ~# a则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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( |4 T& o0 w' j. M4 C, d8 `邻居酷喜中国文化
8 \" j2 O% K- H, k7 O# t说她属土龙
) f5 l# Y2 ?* C: d: b其笛声也悠扬
6 a9 M* T/ ^  o+ Y7 b9 k那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
5 C8 a. V- c$ H2 j. E那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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! ^$ |( ?2 S7 J5 l6 e) X2 {英文版，欢迎指正：

3 t6 t# K0 {6 nLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
# d( ?$ y% ]: N6 N7 lin our community ---
+ I8 j, A6 W- }$ a1 K# xtens of townhouse condos.
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% d0 s7 R; i" A. @Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
7 T/ p9 e  m3 v% f: G4 X+ X" |1 Bmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
8 P8 b8 P3 ?& O$ z3 kshe digs her back yard
. z7 s* ?7 s7 `2 Nto plant flowers ---
: Y  i# f* C! pas if she did not know what years mean.
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, O& B- e0 y5 p) Q. R2 XWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
% L6 w. }) A5 x4 f* uneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
' u$ ^7 q$ {  h/ X  P- A7 \* xNeighbour's handwriting
& ~& W  m; O, h8 O9 a3 n2 dis so vigorous as to be the old trees
' I% B! n5 L4 ?5 Vinterwined by dry vines.
4 l% o5 G- [( i3 F- @
Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
: s  m, p, X5 }6 NWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
) W# _5 s9 W9 q3 k' Tthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
! s* i6 k7 z7 U1 S. w" ithe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

5 V# O5 q: j! e3 a& h6 U7 T4 ^土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
$ D6 u4 A  y: nJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
! t0 e; e7 F. O+ r/ uHer light-footed movement
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# o! T: J7 V, w3 E3 b. g修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。