我尊贵的邻居(11)

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$ v5 i" U+ @( h我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
4 K( _6 [9 ]8 Y* f开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

$ j9 _5 T+ ?" @9 u) E: N头顶英国文学硕士的光环
4 b: s+ Z. Z/ I. Q邻居气宇轩昂
! k# e% g6 e' P3 u如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
* o. l9 I9 ]; F2 g) P! s- d唯一的声响
- E$ D+ w3 [. Z那不知名的曲调
) P- z. v# I" q; `0 D; [反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
/ W3 x! H/ D: n5 U( [my prestigous neighbour
3 }3 M* N( |, K; ~* S2 J4 d0 B, wis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
& n6 L, E! Z2 l/ m) J- nmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
) r. l- `9 r5 b4 uHer light-footed movement
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6 Y& O6 d, o% Z. W1 w/ mShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
3 C, P. P- ]' a" I, mshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

( x. H5 {0 w9 eWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
' v! l' d, J+ S% pNeighbour's handwriting
# Z7 a7 z# X" P9 Ois so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
) R# O! T/ s4 |3 p* _' u, [( ^! sWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
# ?8 F9 R* ^; N6 M2 z2 K* I* K! Ufrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
& R7 L. m7 w! }; _0 y5 K) [the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
. q  w# _! ^* G) N' \* q  [% RJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
" e" m6 ~; q$ z& U$ q4 q, G另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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' l6 X- E3 T2 G0 O- h真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

' J0 P% O# j3 M. o# d1 s: k! d5 `  z9 j我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。