我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
) O! {. Q  \( z% Z6 E# l是我们小区  几十户
3 Z: w) X; d; ]1 F6 R唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
7 N- V" o! X& `) L, G9 a7 I白发红颜  不见皱纹
6 G3 K9 }/ \8 m# g" Q开车铲雪  挖土栽花
3 I+ q/ E* Z' x% a似不识  岁月为何物

* J1 y1 ?1 j6 I: I( @& W头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
& G. O) }$ d; S4 B9 o6 G. w邻居的字
. S1 ?5 D6 j. f( u$ R, r7 {则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
2 Y& G: k! f9 [5 b- ?) t1 q8 n那是从隔壁传来的
4 i$ e3 v' T4 J7 u唯一的声响
) v: F8 m* _5 N7 e3 Y$ Z那不知名的曲调
$ D& T+ `$ ]9 `- X4 b4 M, @反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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$ J  L1 H2 `: T2 o% o) \4 }; F英文版，欢迎指正：

! ^& c( N- K3 l3 t2 I- ]  Z9 ]Living here for more than thirty years,
" `- G0 I8 a% K, ~my prestigous neighbour
& t8 Y6 R: {3 Yis the only first owner of the unit properties
& b' ]/ j% n+ j. `5 X" cin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
7 ?+ M0 \4 k  nHer light-footed movement
" ~6 U' l* h$ x5 \2 B& [* g4 B" zis just like a flying swallow.

$ ^- s' S% S* @* _She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
3 F* b6 i& q) K1 W' }she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
  B( i$ n7 T0 w% {4 Mas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
. r1 H/ A: _7 ~1 o8 F6 @+ s# S5 i; \neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
% d* J! f5 Q4 M/ I  R5 pas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
! W5 `+ Z8 D2 G' ^Neighbour's handwriting
, m8 o( Y& Q) a2 t: P4 ]& eis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

) u0 b7 _8 A' B4 B' `Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
: _. t& f8 F3 h. V8 M2 iWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
8 Y9 h6 Q7 ~6 qfrom the next side of my wall;
. @- m  n1 m0 @' ]' T& R, z7 ], L) rthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
$ p2 J5 n9 S* AHer light-footed movement
2 A, g1 C" c! a: m4 nis just like a flying swallow.
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# A5 H4 _2 m% v+ L- L+ xHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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- F  D: z$ G- L: R, v/ `/ E真的是太像朱镕基了！
0 q" U, A1 J2 o4 a0 \0 Nhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

6 }' Q0 V$ Q. j3 ?& R我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。