我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

) [; z4 O+ a7 k邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
- z- L( s! s; ^) [- R白发红颜  不见皱纹
/ r1 X: T; S/ A2 y3 S# a& A开车铲雪  挖土栽花
$ c% ]* N6 J5 ~7 o- {3 b  b似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
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如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
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" U- S: k5 s* L. f' s9 }其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
; z* F% J5 U; c8 g0 c那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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in our community ---
0 U! Y! u& l/ S1 x: Ntens of townhouse condos.
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6 q# I5 \, R( VNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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$ r& I* Y( ]- X/ i9 Z# g8 z' X2 v7 H) UShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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; K+ J0 ]# c# r! ^. B) x/ p( HWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
) I) y4 U+ j: d5 Q) P/ nneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
# y3 h% l0 d* @! R0 d+ o) Zis so vigorous as to be the old trees
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/ g( ~# E9 U- f5 H6 `Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
  d) Y& `7 L7 q5 ^, t, hShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
0 h, J2 e, q; A! D! y$ wthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
5 k( |. J# E! ]& u! S( x7 Hthe unknown tune is extolling
7 _; {  O! V! o/ K' x* S3 b  C% Y9 L) Ithe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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( W4 C) X4 d% L3 i6 x" r( j" W土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
7 v" h' Z9 C7 bJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

0 M* ?- z$ B# U; ~# r6 d. u) k( V, V8 T! J从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
, @6 q) O& @, G% z5 W$ R7 l6 z另外，翻译改动一处：
! N. k+ G  u" v& f" L) SHer light-footed movement
8 O! z8 ]6 i# {; ?1 @3 M$ x) z1 Iis just like a flying swallow.
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( h, O: p- f: |) CHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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, A2 h$ F& y2 ?* E" Z7 M真的是太像朱镕基了！
$ i" x" C, J) \  K1 l4 r/ H/ Phm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。