我尊贵的邻居(11)

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3 q) A4 t, C# A7 j8 O8 S我尊贵的邻居
: ~: i; v% t/ G' U( t/ G是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

0 V6 h' G. Z- f9 B8 c3 b9 x邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
' }6 u2 n  F  C4 F* P+ T7 l, P* X/ @白发红颜  不见皱纹
; X0 B$ {2 t1 [: a3 _开车铲雪  挖土栽花
) i9 J6 M& x1 R  q似不识  岁月为何物
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- k3 L: u. _  M, y  U头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
  H+ b" c! _1 t4 G: U# o( t如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
: s: g4 h. I6 g+ g则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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! N, Q( ?' E$ ]8 Q7 K$ L, ^' G% [邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
. L2 r- w" E9 u. K其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
( K/ _! J& g0 W* S9 ]反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
( j) A; ^$ M7 A) Ois the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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; z) [2 K3 F6 MNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
8 J. r; K# Y$ u( Q. xShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

8 `6 Z& d' v5 {. o0 k3 e1 J, x3 tShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

0 f) \0 c/ z/ Y/ LWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
3 l. o1 X9 X) f6 D5 k; }: g+ ~is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

% _" u- i$ g1 ANeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
* {- B' v+ c9 O7 z' C) RShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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  S3 ~! p: o* u: L" l1 J1 Y土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
9 ~) K# ~* Q$ U( Y" TJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

) N8 n  K% x* A, p0 v' A! C) }从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
; [: K; L+ P( M, o" F4 D" {. MHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
8 A, d( d' Q! HHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
1 O5 O1 g: G; O" I' j7 M, k& {hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。