我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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! P7 D7 N: x/ H8 ?我尊贵的邻居
2 y7 H8 N! y) c  ^2 |是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

4 G) r! H+ X% w% y: m邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
1 U- j! P' R; _- t' ]9 K似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
6 o' Y* P, W# z! \1 g* [  ?邻居气宇轩昂
8 N$ o; \( Y+ v  b, `. U如同女面朱熔基
9 J' L" j) X5 r9 f7 `- k8 Q5 G邻居的字
  M: ]4 W4 g0 X则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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6 M$ F5 C/ d7 u5 I  J邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
1 `" F. a/ A) o0 i5 e+ ^那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
/ A1 c' b) J1 F" w那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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; S: a# q- I9 l1 m% _8 hLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
( t8 Y- T; l2 R) H4 r3 L6 V; Ois the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

5 W: ^: D; d# Z. Y. \/ ?3 _Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
( w9 P9 s' A" n& x1 }1 [, GShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
, F1 t% H, r+ U1 Y6 w: Wis just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
0 ?. s3 E: G- s2 v0 i- b, g7 abefore driving her own car;
% k: ?# }1 Q% l6 v- ^6 Zshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
2 ^! G) W' Z1 q! M1 Gas if she did not know what years mean.
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% m$ d2 K' q/ ^/ S6 J; u% ~With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
; R+ S, V4 ?1 z* _8 [% R( N+ |3 x1 fas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
- `4 E1 i" H% j  }- O( p- E: T; Eis so vigorous as to be the old trees
- w+ O$ A# Y0 a& {6 K1 @4 g/ Yinterwined by dry vines.
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2 y  y  L$ X* NNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
  \/ j9 @  f7 ]1 C# k, NWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
' w. }5 u4 f1 p# d' xthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
  L" v1 k# z+ T% g; k  P3 uagain and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
5 I7 l+ U0 ]  F: l6 w% `) ^+ ~Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

$ e) L5 }* K$ c% y* L2 C+ ?从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
9 l/ x* b5 ?$ e. Y$ B% K; `4 [: Z# sis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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  Q- G% [6 `. S. n3 H) p真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
' I6 K9 r: Z, l2 ahm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。