我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
6 m6 A, T4 R, E4 c2 B4 @2 f: ~是我们小区  几十户
6 Z- C$ Y) L$ ~  k) T: `唯一的元老
$ d. C) A& T! j1 ^& @+ F- ]. W+ h6 K一住三十多年
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  W5 {9 ], L- E/ G- A9 X6 f( p! m$ g邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
: D, b3 o6 b& ?9 R8 w) \( }白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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; T, H3 a, G; k) b+ I头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
% ^( W( E$ R( H$ h+ v如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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& H3 w3 C1 Y1 D' c7 ?0 [; G/ L' y: i! B邻居酷喜中国文化
; r8 s  ^3 n2 |' A1 n说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
8 e; [9 L, I$ M5 D反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
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- v2 v' @$ ^- z5 z" W- otens of townhouse condos.

9 \/ Y2 q, n6 vNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
( l" e" t2 A7 M1 x( q' HHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

$ a5 Z3 B, G7 G; {: H6 _. tShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
1 D, F$ B- x: l7 f( W, W  m1 T1 ato plant flowers ---
: M% a) ~4 a, F2 v" Das if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
! L  m( }+ ^4 f6 F6 `( Wis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
1 _0 z! v3 P: I% h& ?Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
6 U2 n: c' r  b8 Y% Xfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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. O9 ^4 _% p% _  q. n土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

+ P+ f( H3 M; G从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
' B7 u% B+ l7 E6 `- b: `( b1 g& ]另外，翻译改动一处：
9 F/ [3 U# }8 D9 o7 BHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
2 p( l+ k. H. {Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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8 e1 j5 N; G% G5 k真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

$ H! ^4 R; \, @$ Y8 Z1 b我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。