我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

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% _& P1 N) X& i2 C( z# l: _3 m- P是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
, v: K& m+ ]4 Z6 u- w9 r1 d- R; N一住三十多年
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3 O; t  g$ a) l$ Z1 v  |# s& h# P+ `邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
3 H8 d; X& [. L1 O+ X4 O9 s4 R7 U1 N$ O开车铲雪  挖土栽花
* x9 t. J4 ~( M5 `! T似不识  岁月为何物
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( a6 U% B! K& I$ U! s5 P8 C- E4 j头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
3 n/ S! P2 i$ V# I" g如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
# ]- {$ ~4 }! }9 I+ p则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
' w' O5 K- H4 Y唯一的声响
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反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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. t" X8 s; l0 ]( Nin our community ---
8 V: A/ ?  v0 o, P" r" B1 C) q/ dtens of townhouse condos.
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5 v5 w6 J' }4 A3 R! z8 X6 oNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
- a( q' \7 y  K! F9 \! Wis just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
) b* w4 Z& T2 Y3 t' M) A. o' Pbefore driving her own car;
3 G! e, X4 H5 hshe digs her back yard
" D0 v9 \# H* |4 Uto plant flowers ---
% V$ O+ O$ U2 U' E' G" p- `as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
( i4 B9 v4 g2 K1 ?# }( g/ k+ \interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
- e7 Z4 k1 s3 F1 Bfrom the next side of my wall;
$ W6 H7 v  H; fthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
/ j  G" {! \) ?" _Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
4 Z3 u. I' N  P$ A. r! His just like a flying swallow.
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& _) Z  ?# T! f) k  J3 s, rHer light-footed movement
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hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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; P% E2 z# M( x/ Y+ a9 }# ?真的是太像朱镕基了！
" J; ~, b5 C- y( n0 Nhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。