我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
: Y7 U/ X( }" M! b& d是我们小区  几十户
6 Q9 D1 ?" R- y' I2 f) F  u唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
$ q( |! I. w$ i8 s白发红颜  不见皱纹
) y$ @2 A( v5 N( R开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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( E8 H1 \6 ~8 P. M* s头顶英国文学硕士的光环
% i3 {3 @# ~8 E& @, h/ l4 {邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
0 h. H0 u3 J  g* ]7 n邻居的字
$ y6 K- @5 E3 Y' Y1 t3 r' W, v则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
$ G' W+ Y6 u3 v说她属土龙
3 K! k9 Z+ G& ~" G' ^) y其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
/ K, H# Z- ^% X5 u* A唯一的声响
" [" [4 n: a# X' \8 T那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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9 y+ c0 S! P  tLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
: v* `3 ~% K; n" {: Nis the only first owner of the unit properties
" }  [# N% q9 M' `- z& C0 \9 Rin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
3 n- I% A( |* lShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
; J7 d- A- R0 Fis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
/ ^3 S& T5 L, f7 f3 d$ qto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

* t, K1 v) ]' C* GWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
  l! W/ f  t; m" gNeighbour's handwriting
8 v1 l- X4 u, d7 E3 his so vigorous as to be the old trees
' G6 x% B1 ?4 Y. r7 |4 Ainterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
7 }3 u2 [1 _. Q9 Z$ o# DShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
1 ?/ K5 P& _) E7 b) x6 pWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
6 J: v! s  \+ H# l, fthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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6 @7 c8 m- s4 B/ T6 F# A1 r. @土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
! r! ~- \! C0 k* z: |: wJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
) p  L# N  }! D+ Y* Z另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
7 J" z# q3 i" Sis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
. ~; W( M/ p- m" Z# [! Hhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

# N/ ~$ I+ l/ K% l我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。