我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
' L, h1 X- Q+ E0 `. z是我们小区  几十户
5 \% p3 ?' q" k' n7 H5 N唯一的元老
一住三十多年

! ], _- W& d2 h) T% W邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
, Z# U! Z+ A( b  E白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
) p5 f: I* U8 m- r' P/ o似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
* ~, x- W  W+ C9 d; R如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
/ S4 g# a8 n+ e- G说她属土龙
) w7 ]; U9 p/ n$ x7 k; _其笛声也悠扬
7 f* D) M7 a7 t) ~( x那是从隔壁传来的
+ J* W, W% `* m  p# r0 C) H" q唯一的声响
8 H& t. ^$ q5 t% Z, U% p8 e1 A那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

1 Y) j3 T: j' N; zLiving here for more than thirty years,
- A+ D) F3 ?3 E! U+ Q$ c) Rmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
3 p( [8 x2 d$ g% D) V! Min our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

' H% k) E* w5 A' o& mNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
! v9 R6 {9 y. M) l+ yShe has white hairs and red faces.
) u$ F8 q, l8 j% s7 OHer light-footed movement
) ^. i5 T& k8 @/ m; }% Z$ r! x; mis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
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she digs her back yard
) T: Z6 {0 w: ]0 }to plant flowers ---
' ~' o* v* A1 n* w+ N% V) G: \) v) Las if she did not know what years mean.
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1 J. i1 P9 }% i$ t# NWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
8 }1 [/ Y, p( l0 m& V9 f: qinterwined by dry vines.

* Y! D  ?2 e9 z+ B- aNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
0 v, `9 v+ F2 E2 b% m. ]from the next side of my wall;
" h7 }: Q: c; V! ]2 dthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
1 [0 G. w# b6 ?- Z/ m, h1 |/ x' Lagain and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
" x4 P, z- y9 s5 z1 wJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

) m( l- i) c* `+ q3 i从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
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Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
4 g7 G+ k' A: f+ K5 K4 PHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
, K8 ^. F- ^' ^  [hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。