我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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9 F- H/ w# v2 P! @  Z5 T, K# X我尊贵的邻居
+ B0 s5 z- O( r5 g  \+ H( m是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
3 t3 L4 \1 m# d一住三十多年
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3 N% C' I. F- a$ ]4 R% `# c邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

6 [# J% Y/ O& b头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
3 N% Z9 w3 K! M$ r4 s  F4 j% u- H如同女面朱熔基
& y" K/ s5 j' }# B邻居的字
' K- N/ a: B0 Q' z则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
$ i/ D9 u/ ~" R3 D+ G) G' b0 d说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
! W/ f! i+ t- t8 I* t那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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3 d  G& L' }' D- l英文版，欢迎指正：

: s/ K0 N: {2 z8 w8 A5 u% m: pLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
; y$ }, ^8 H, RHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

+ V) s' V: g  R+ D. |" EShe shovels the snow on her door lane
+ k2 K; x+ T7 ~* A" M- \) J' F4 F7 ^before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
" r0 e/ E- V* z# Pto plant flowers ---
5 F. p8 w. ^9 H: \' M5 W5 V% cas if she did not know what years mean.
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% X! n: c" l) X& x4 b; [' k4 H3 D9 iWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
' i* q, `& t& p9 W- _3 `$ Sneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
% G7 N- C& J" x  Ris so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
+ d! M* C* b6 Y" {% u" ZWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
5 j& H+ {! S# u+ hthe unknown tune is extolling
1 U' b9 T' Y4 Q6 K3 R6 \the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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* u( L# ], ?5 ^; }0 X  g) ^土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
9 e# h  t$ m3 q7 M5 o9 HHer light-footed movement
# G; \& }5 E) @: n, ~- l( s# ois just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
, M+ l( V6 ^2 Tis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。