我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
8 d7 u+ y6 H# \5 P, }唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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2 w% j7 Y" X/ [3 g. S2 C/ J0 H头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
2 O1 B7 H; K" w" p( W如同女面朱熔基
3 s5 S4 d3 l" V7 M. ]- |邻居的字
, _- M/ k3 g# u! k% `) T则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
8 P! e- A/ [1 t  ^: ^! N* K5 z4 Z( h说她属土龙
, h1 M7 k$ @! a; P% e5 g8 ~: g其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
$ J8 o! L- x4 M- A& P) \唯一的声响
) ?9 R& W: W& p1 V( }% @) T5 H那不知名的曲调
9 d9 x0 W9 l+ E' S4 o9 Q反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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+ c: J0 e2 S1 b, ^/ }+ m% D' b英文版，欢迎指正：
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" \; o+ a5 ?  [* V: C( V% u, ?+ fLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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in our community ---
$ D' I% w6 y% R- j- b& [tens of townhouse condos.
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1 l. b# r0 C  vNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
! a7 A+ j1 A0 F  ?She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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$ A7 ?, V8 G% zWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
/ y' G2 `+ {  P$ ~0 _$ wNeighbour's handwriting
2 y/ ^" \# F$ B1 H/ ~0 his so vigorous as to be the old trees
4 S, g) x& {& L2 \, Vinterwined by dry vines.
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" P# C- F( t1 |( i7 hNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
1 d! d5 C5 j7 z  d" I* w* zfrom the next side of my wall;
* P; y+ i" a- l/ N, Jthe unknown tune is extolling
# f5 J0 H, k+ k" }, ^the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
0 X: h# z* h" H, aagain and again.

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# \/ _8 D# D  ]# ?2 Z土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
# ^3 I! a5 K% u. k% AJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

( s# B& c/ p2 q从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
( q5 l9 I; u' `' C0 K/ z4 I另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
" ~! X& i( j3 J. Z9 U9 Fis just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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& G7 |6 }9 {) c* E# O$ L真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

3 k2 O  |+ p$ ^* r% \: Z我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。