我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
/ i! ?2 g! F/ W1 e是我们小区  几十户
3 I/ k! K4 R; u9 S* \$ F8 n唯一的元老
6 e% `. z' L8 U# Y$ Q9 P一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
6 P( f0 p/ S' {+ O1 u开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
6 S  j+ P; M5 L: _( c如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
1 d7 `# ?9 ~2 s5 `则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
6 u/ H/ _: J) R  a6 D% ]说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
1 @3 N0 A5 d' Z" k' X0 {* l9 }那是从隔壁传来的
0 {, P2 c  T3 e! q% T0 }. O唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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4 ]2 S& u& e' y; e0 @Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

3 U2 @8 \- Y" f- I5 e9 P* u- ^& lNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
. |6 `& _* f$ o) fShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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9 u4 i5 k; S. m4 ~3 e( QShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
% v: T. j4 y5 eshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
7 g& b5 E' Q4 `$ `( j/ F% |: h9 n0 mas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
1 F- E/ I- u6 ^( kneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
! J/ e' p, D2 d* gNeighbour's handwriting
( Y8 w1 u3 J5 H: @) X9 j% d1 ?is so vigorous as to be the old trees
5 ]$ H" p4 U% h2 r+ h7 H5 C' L! finterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
  N4 M; Q$ D$ c+ y2 a! N1 c! WShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
8 L4 o7 u# \: S0 K+ V8 `- d3 qthat is the sole sound going into my ears
9 W0 k* R7 [* k0 T$ `- o; q) Bfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
0 G7 g9 C# [# a2 ^the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
  l# X4 \4 x/ x0 a6 ^again and again.

Justing

- y+ t+ H/ t9 ]) R5 }: M( @. c1 A土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
* _% }& x" E( O5 p; IJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

" q3 o- n6 a; ^6 t- {; U2 |从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
5 z. G: ]# y) Q1 Z1 c1 A另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
; ~% |# V6 v  p: Q! p& c& R9 qis just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
( j2 E2 C7 `! K* T+ `5 @is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


; X2 }+ u) @# \& T. Z真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
5 D: ^/ r5 B5 k1 y/ c$ q% H& s% ehm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。