我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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是我们小区  几十户
9 ^* y  x; U; M/ {唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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3 k* w8 D1 b: o7 U4 Z0 i1 u邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
0 T1 e9 A, a- A% Q似不识  岁月为何物
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* I* W; t2 r, v头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
- p" p# a( p4 a则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
9 X" x6 t# _( ^  `. q2 \其笛声也悠扬
- ?, w9 o; y; ~3 o9 c0 p7 n那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
: [6 Q+ @" N4 W2 ]7 }0 V6 ]那不知名的曲调
+ Q, C7 |6 J5 ~1 G$ q7 {3 ?- v# A反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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( y4 h, @/ Z9 q" k  E  S1 ]英文版，欢迎指正：

+ ?' s8 b4 k$ _8 aLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

" x- I- A; h* \% v6 k6 g$ bNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
" D/ N6 F5 a6 J/ tmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
5 H1 C! a2 o% r! Y3 M: _& cShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
; d. X- E" Z$ v# ~7 }: L; kbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
3 a) a3 ~  c/ l) X0 [* eneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
0 i" R, R+ D$ T3 Uinterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
+ g& F8 P/ Y2 f; f' i7 Q" dShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
9 [. u) S- g/ e! _8 Vfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
- a9 u+ J$ w& [/ ]$ U3 {8 m  P6 Gthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
* O# A/ @4 k" V9 X4 MJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

, ]$ X4 V/ q) x/ @' X从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
" v- {1 D( l; J$ h; W另外，翻译改动一处：
3 H" N" d- I% {- U" y& o; B! LHer light-footed movement
& ^. }. F: S5 l+ Cis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。