我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
5 l" P2 Y- N3 T% a! z& X& _0 c8 e唯一的元老
5 i3 Y6 A! g8 w. q2 t: j6 ~3 d- i一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
% ^9 x8 @  q2 ~; d3 e1 F5 b白发红颜  不见皱纹
( W" `8 }  M2 K) B开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
9 o. v* F' N! @( Z2 w邻居气宇轩昂
( d; n/ J+ d  x- W如同女面朱熔基
9 S# I) r4 n3 N8 |9 a; Q/ @邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
6 l  w& K5 h9 y( r' l4 Z说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
8 g5 V/ i' s% W1 |# P反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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6 m/ s2 K; T" ^) L5 A& z4 t* e英文版，欢迎指正：
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! t) g* \) Q) JLiving here for more than thirty years,
5 I3 A; U; Q) i+ F8 J* D! G; J  W2 omy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
+ d; ~+ t/ x* @) ?in our community ---
+ S  K4 C! _3 z' V; D3 `tens of townhouse condos.

. L6 I2 W) |0 c0 E$ z! a: }Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
* B" K" ?" a, M) @% N+ c) Cis just like a flying swallow.

7 Y) h# x) m. s; m- z3 vShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
, f: s( I  Z( v. o1 cshe digs her back yard
1 V  v  _2 G. `1 y6 [' Tto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
/ x1 T$ d. G" u$ Q: p, }" l1 mneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
& S3 q7 t. W- O' x0 ?: e$ yas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
! P, b8 t1 ~$ ris so vigorous as to be the old trees
; v" e5 I* R0 _" l% Yinterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
2 ?' ^" w$ {3 ~that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
+ |: y, i2 D8 u+ f7 I; W" Tthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
+ r, S& T% P9 i& G3 [again and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
/ l4 ~) ^9 p3 t: ~+ r% pJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
, B8 {+ F% k; R* J9 C) _Her light-footed movement
" T* p% E( \" I/ s- D* f0 r2 ois just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

! d; K1 W; M* [$ E5 H8 W* J我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。