我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
& O8 v* |1 \1 \唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
3 ^+ L  O) t$ l+ z4 @$ B& f& t6 t白发红颜  不见皱纹
" U3 j, }& A- c/ d! Z开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
" L, ~5 q* d; V9 ]4 x5 j, M邻居的字
/ D8 n% ?' E7 U0 `' w1 Q* x' u则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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1 u6 s- G4 c5 A: k5 v2 i  {邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
7 N+ ~" W; w. [) B# \/ ?) O/ a那是从隔壁传来的
1 ^& G! ]8 K/ D: R; I4 b唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
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5 n; u+ X0 y. [Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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in our community ---
0 S1 u! f6 G5 s5 P9 \: V% T. xtens of townhouse condos.
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, L, F5 k. V& I/ S8 P$ @Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
  F+ P  F) o" E! D" pmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
4 J! A" Q, C; H, b! T  B8 Y) ~; M2 gShe has white hairs and red faces.
$ I  r8 I6 u$ V& C% [8 ]5 cHer light-footed movement
5 e# m9 }+ Q8 Q# c1 r* n) j" f8 g0 iis just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
6 P7 |7 r7 U1 M$ \" Obefore driving her own car;
$ ]6 P/ x$ q' }7 z, n- _, v) }8 cshe digs her back yard
+ t' t5 {; T% n4 wto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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$ \4 P) w( r* ]( XNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

9 t; A4 q: X( \, G3 i土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
+ t2 y2 D* T6 K' S另外，翻译改动一处：
: Q$ [2 T4 `( H, \2 b2 vHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
& H+ h& _- [* K& e# sHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。