我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
: `* q% l+ {1 ~) A: {是我们小区  几十户
8 J7 ~) x, k1 h$ S  P" R0 C唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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9 U# x! ?, s: V* m# J# e邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
2 [  f; q- `9 D: r, z+ G" p0 F开车铲雪  挖土栽花
* `' \" t( U* l5 V9 L# M似不识  岁月为何物
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3 I+ _7 r$ O5 j; r0 i5 o头顶英国文学硕士的光环
2 r; ^8 H- x0 Y" C4 M2 f' M邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
1 ~2 U) d, [. u邻居的字
+ o3 o/ H  Q  q7 Q6 M则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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2 |# [. }2 h' n0 s% I邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
# `& Q  h- Z9 Q! V- S其笛声也悠扬
$ F5 L$ N; e# A那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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7 K/ m& b6 m6 x, G/ x2 L; hNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
6 [2 j5 `8 V* O1 y7 JShe has white hairs and red faces.
$ H" R1 V) j$ }7 q, |* P+ hHer light-footed movement
( [$ l- o/ g$ f# }is just like a flying swallow.

4 ]6 B0 m' e2 q% i: }7 A7 r& |7 \She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
4 T$ M0 Y2 G) @- PNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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" ?6 r/ P1 F! q! @  K- G* G. tNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
+ t6 @+ f+ G" c( BWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
! `: H& n3 o% m' S6 sthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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4 @$ c7 B4 L+ ?+ E9 T+ t土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
4 O6 q) \" A7 K6 TJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
, V/ l" [, t4 y% ]" T( H/ q另外，翻译改动一处：
  j+ E% P, z3 ^9 i1 p+ o: i  T8 uHer light-footed movement
# S! N" f$ |  }3 Kis just like a flying swallow.
; B4 g0 J/ ]) }3 c修改为：
6 T4 p- U$ S5 f, S6 w- {1 T; v3 mHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

- K* u9 v8 C0 f/ a8 _我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。