我尊贵的邻居(11)

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2 }  |3 ~2 q4 O9 f  B' v! U我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
8 d4 w1 B3 V/ P! ?唯一的元老
一住三十多年

$ i- e+ q8 Z7 r7 \+ v邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
. r& z6 L- F! E. g/ a白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
5 i# Z+ }6 n$ S! T; m; p, \* E似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
- }5 I3 P  t/ \: I/ a9 _! @如同女面朱熔基
' z4 U: ^# r  R" n( M) p邻居的字
$ E  T; f& H" j) j* f( P则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
0 J- O8 M2 ~; s/ f说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
! z. V$ q& m3 N6 P$ A7 [反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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, T. K( S5 Y+ M$ X3 G" c* I英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
1 T$ {0 n/ G, o8 U% \; \is the only first owner of the unit properties
1 K8 Y- v, \& z3 E$ y- y1 s* C1 Yin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
1 O" z% u2 X4 I' XShe has white hairs and red faces.
3 I* o" q4 L* @5 i  `Her light-footed movement
( l7 h5 P1 {4 Q5 x; ]# Cis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
! U1 p) K6 F. ^( U4 `. S. z! ?0 |before driving her own car;
$ F; |6 j$ Q3 ^6 r$ Mshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

! c/ w6 E# @( B& |With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
6 w& K: Z) ?8 `0 g( M8 ~0 t, i" pNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

+ Q0 D3 k5 {, K$ y+ j' HNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
/ M$ A) P( G! N, @/ k8 FWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
5 E9 `0 F* n7 O; y& J9 ^the unknown tune is extolling
' [$ t2 s. W1 S3 `: [5 j# O2 cthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
% O/ q3 {% K$ N! f3 yJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
/ H) N: r% `0 c; I: PHer light-footed movement
/ t6 ^7 A( E& I7 k# }is just like a flying swallow.
2 X# N4 j& h" X7 A. O, O( X修改为：
Her light-footed movement
/ `0 k4 h! `6 p$ {is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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9 j4 I% a* z4 B* y) k* }% ?2 v真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

& m& T1 M- W) o8 q. [我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。