我尊贵的邻居(11)

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. h* g  U* V) W我尊贵的邻居
" n, ^9 J' q$ L" W% N是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
1 Y0 L1 K7 E' Q. e; d: K" w一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
  u, ~  W- y2 {1 m5 l! l似不识  岁月为何物

/ l/ F7 i, j$ F. D  k头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
2 v* W2 t5 s* z/ [3 g邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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! \# M0 v& A" c) @# c邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
. u: L9 \  r8 q: G1 W* h" G# g8 |那是从隔壁传来的
- E' \5 I9 W% k! L) R唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：

+ C. l/ f. Z0 jLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
7 n- X: ]2 B7 i2 H: z. ?tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
$ t( R# r% o6 h5 f6 J$ m" ymagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
7 ~4 e1 l, ?! \; S7 o6 b# mShe has white hairs and red faces.
) [1 D6 Z2 e3 }1 {- l8 n$ R, E" PHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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# e) @8 }* s! A, a) @She shovels the snow on her door lane
" P6 C: y; [0 |/ F: R9 y- g* g/ hbefore driving her own car;
3 l. T2 `$ {  |5 |/ e% |: @/ `) |she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
: _: R4 V3 d$ R, A2 @as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
8 e7 x' W0 P8 u6 l1 d- x+ Fneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
2 I" o7 S, f0 k+ E( p( |as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
) L2 D3 n3 d/ ^" f8 J; k) his so vigorous as to be the old trees
6 L+ N2 N' l4 a3 s" H1 vinterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
4 r2 ~. T1 T3 r. m% H; TShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
" ?" B0 P6 k$ Tthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
' c$ h8 V" b" M" W4 A3 D1 u! K" G  D& ?Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

; `  d! X; x( ~( n4 s3 Z  n2 G) I从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
6 ?9 q9 V( t9 g1 T9 F; X) t" L另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
" C4 l; ]9 Y2 G) M3 ^is just like a flying swallow.
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+ l; `9 m& f3 I& w9 P, hHer light-footed movement
: j/ o, o  p) h/ i* xis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
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我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。