我尊贵的邻居(11)

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& V8 f0 ~# z3 a. Z) o- t+ L5 f( w9 b井忘川
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7 t2 D5 `4 a# j7 |' v0 @( e我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
- ]7 _% X6 ~* u5 u6 @( [( i唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
6 J& {! L1 q% [- K  Q似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
& s5 }  ^/ p8 }邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
$ |, r9 e* u( T9 @! K; h, \邻居的字
9 G% y8 ~7 j1 Y+ P( Q则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

1 a; Q. W- q5 T0 g, c! h邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
$ U- b4 d# @  I' z. ^5 l& l1 v- A那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
5 s2 G/ J1 `- |3 B, V$ n6 Lmy prestigous neighbour
+ x  M& i& _! }+ l- Wis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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; F# x/ g. a, ^1 PNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
0 q; o; c5 f  p4 |6 Gmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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$ o, g( b0 w, YShe shovels the snow on her door lane
6 g9 k: h: {7 A' |before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
5 Y- N) ]: K, S, N; j4 _3 ^is so vigorous as to be the old trees
( [3 G4 e) ?, `8 g7 t0 linterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
& \4 a3 P5 _" }* lWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
7 O0 Y$ C" x6 B# r4 ?% t7 p1 B9 _that is the sole sound going into my ears
5 H6 I4 C4 t. r/ f. ifrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
1 [0 }# ^$ G4 h3 Ragain and again.

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3 p5 `, k, n8 l3 y土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
7 n3 a9 c2 C$ r! G/ nJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
5 [) p7 r% X; L3 KHer light-footed movement
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修改为：
Her light-footed movement
! o8 `2 [2 u6 W! ]6 ois just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


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1 u6 L% f+ D7 ^- W- F真的是太像朱镕基了！
8 Y9 ?" R. P' F0 Ahm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

2 K' T+ Y4 e. P1 v$ C我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。