我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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9 E5 Z5 V) N" Q* e. g我尊贵的邻居
* n1 v9 A, d2 [% ~8 z4 k" a+ m  K是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
6 N" {0 [, Y5 ^9 C0 z$ G一住三十多年
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% n+ h1 D7 A$ Y/ X/ y$ W6 h0 i! j邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
# l0 v' t5 a3 w$ s( B白发红颜  不见皱纹
. \7 ]& \) V* k4 i% V$ T开车铲雪  挖土栽花
" E7 n. e3 u) f! A似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
0 N: _& I" g( l8 q6 J& |" O+ E邻居的字
8 r) p, k7 `: n. F& `则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
' ^) P8 e3 a! y& b说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
3 a& O' v% Y  Z/ s! g! C那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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( b2 y  r  T& e( Q1 W) h3 Y英文版，欢迎指正：
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! \6 K) v! O3 {, N) vLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
! t! ^# T1 M: n/ S) b. L& j+ F8 \! yis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
4 j" u, f1 z2 X! l2 ^. j9 _! ttens of townhouse condos.

! E8 G$ Q5 r( a" h9 K& ONeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
* K  }! i, j8 G6 X+ THer light-footed movement
3 t2 w% T! ~" vis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
! L9 ~' {* A, x: @before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
/ [+ T' |" C, @! X. Zis so vigorous as to be the old trees
+ {  T4 B$ S, g5 E6 G6 G! R6 winterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
) f  U  |  J3 x# t3 oWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
. |% a/ z$ S% [; ^; i4 V  v: jthat is the sole sound going into my ears
  U0 `' V5 f( K$ [5 yfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

9 [2 @: o* m  W% o9 \! Q3 q从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
! i* G$ L2 ?0 o另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
" o* j( N4 K$ z: Y& G9 ?is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。