我尊贵的邻居(11)

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! j- f- o5 {! T+ N4 T8 T我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
) }. N4 }; r0 u& K& ]0 |白发红颜  不见皱纹
1 o/ d, M0 E0 @. [开车铲雪  挖土栽花
8 }) ~- c: g) r9 @5 `0 j& a& l似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
# X* Z2 v: h6 ]/ c/ p( j/ P! H如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
5 C) {& L5 H; O则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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- P8 C  }2 G7 W邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
, _! D+ O  N( c0 v( @5 j+ e其笛声也悠扬
5 Y' b" H9 e: Q) P( O, l' `/ Z那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
! u# m& P" G, B9 Q% u- i( Q: P2 X那不知名的曲调
( q9 q6 ~. Q) t+ y0 T反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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0 y9 N, _% r/ w( s* [0 t0 S2 fLiving here for more than thirty years,
- S5 u! q5 o% x! Zmy prestigous neighbour
" P( G" t6 W4 pis the only first owner of the unit properties
' B1 T' m9 w6 O& N) S* A* X5 p6 k/ _in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
$ }9 g, V4 S9 @She has white hairs and red faces.
6 a0 l" c& `1 v, A4 iHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
/ ~# H$ ]7 ]1 H1 n$ g4 y2 x$ Y- Ineighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
) X8 x# a7 E3 f* l# uNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
) _$ t0 A- n9 N2 o5 qWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
+ l4 |+ _1 a* N$ l* d# s4 u/ B  l4 qJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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0 C" q$ g$ p2 r7 L! A5 x9 L真的是太像朱镕基了！
4 c* ]9 {/ Z- Q2 Y( ehm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。