我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
% ^8 U3 t5 s4 n/ K  h3 \/ P  X, J唯一的元老
4 e. _( z" j- z. P一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
$ Z& Q4 e# P& C8 K+ v开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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0 b( R* x7 |) g6 k头顶英国文学硕士的光环
% A' k, c) n) Y8 D( s6 |邻居气宇轩昂
" ]8 e/ @6 c. X3 f9 w% ~- S9 J如同女面朱熔基
" m; u1 K" O) U4 S* a7 _& m邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
  S$ A1 a$ G& Z6 h其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
1 L2 z( M* g4 f6 r  ~8 [5 ^% W唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
' m. j) z3 J& i2 s0 G反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
, R: I6 P) J- o0 @5 k/ _/ Zmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
: d. j4 e& j: y8 p) \magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
  y" {7 Y( R: C: }before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
1 f# l. h( I$ _to plant flowers ---
6 y2 E3 I- i) a) l7 D# Eas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
9 A$ |# W5 V' w  e( p3 gNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
6 E8 q' u1 H6 `; b/ iinterwined by dry vines.

. B. j- j+ Q( s7 S1 s0 ~Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
$ U) }2 G3 y( a1 X# [7 [) U% \She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
. a' M5 o9 ]# UWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
, H5 b; |- r0 l4 qthat is the sole sound going into my ears
5 V+ @) y7 R$ H- Y" jfrom the next side of my wall;
4 P% Y7 ]; J: V3 ]the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
% X: i& H' L. G+ L6 Bagain and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
* p: M. b4 u; i( g, ?! OJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
9 E# r* X+ b8 X" `! G另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
' z8 w6 m& Y- U' b0 r2 HHer light-footed movement
4 D) s$ F0 f  O( \5 cis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
( G8 d8 l9 _* a2 N' f! \7 s, {; q1 Ehm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

; P4 F  h' B. g8 D" @我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。