我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
0 Q) n3 W5 ]3 B* U1 b: ~唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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, t6 D0 }6 G. z  {邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
& n. R' S# y' W' g& v$ r如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
. _( N5 i' j2 y# o& A5 d则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
% D3 X5 d$ b, ^! z) \那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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# i* t1 R2 `8 Y( O+ i2 q; @英文版，欢迎指正：

) l) P# \5 u2 I, p& Y+ \Living here for more than thirty years,
: d7 ~2 A+ Z8 p/ k4 zmy prestigous neighbour
* ]0 ~1 v: ]3 I( F! f+ Mis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

  S/ A; V# d! l( s7 P6 X$ H: YNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
$ K* A/ }- o9 V6 c7 U  a- M7 d8 Rmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
5 n4 E% x' Z* tShe has white hairs and red faces.
4 k6 \1 A& n- j& LHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

: t7 q+ @9 s3 \8 F/ `She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
* F) p! `* s3 P2 a$ b6 N2 K, y" hshe digs her back yard
/ r0 s) s1 o5 A6 k  e/ B: {8 \to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
1 l$ Q' h, d) T  D, v! H& q- Eis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
" q" ~& L# c/ d2 w: A; [She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
& r4 q- B) O9 K3 f( C- z# m6 M. M" `that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
8 u$ t4 R, E6 U: c: P1 m7 d# c# K7 zJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

$ U2 p5 B( j' B& \# s# O从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
5 S4 W0 V+ P0 T# g( c# B8 |另外，翻译改动一处：
. ?; Z- c; b3 J+ S# THer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
6 h4 L4 g, x* M修改为：
1 E5 m8 ~/ t% d7 oHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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: P/ {  b% j) V, ^真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
  J+ ?* n) F: Q* \# }hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

  ?) P$ K. T  a' V  ~$ y我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。