我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
# l2 M! U2 b1 M& v. u0 X6 t$ U) c唯一的元老
" q1 S0 ]* m% ]0 L# s4 |0 n  ^' U0 Z一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
9 I! i' G, d- Y* f) I白发红颜  不见皱纹
$ H  u% Q/ w8 {4 o  l4 G开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

, Z  \( n# N! n头顶英国文学硕士的光环
6 [% ~) }+ u" @邻居气宇轩昂
1 G; ~' [1 ]2 h; B; g: l) G! W如同女面朱熔基
5 k: ~8 d6 N1 C" R6 k/ {邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
  }" U5 V0 n5 ^" c% {( i其笛声也悠扬
0 Q" m% a- m5 |! i那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
! }7 m( G+ p+ ?. n6 t那不知名的曲调
. [/ Z! d* x' E. H% A4 T反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
; W9 P5 R% c- d5 _- Lmy prestigous neighbour
- {% x! a- e7 M8 f7 N/ Vis the only first owner of the unit properties
2 S- i2 e- G2 _) ~$ ]) [! ]in our community ---
4 u, A- E4 r- T; ^! c: }+ q% q  ]- Stens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
6 n; |8 P9 |! J* _: y8 C. G) dmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
! N4 }: X. Q9 G6 a# ?$ ?before driving her own car;
* r3 I" ]2 T" Q5 }% v1 Sshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
7 f, \' k4 C- Qneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
9 g8 Y# _. {: E9 ~7 g7 Y" tas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
9 [/ @8 a$ N5 X+ W) f& sNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
1 P5 s! L. y0 G0 X, x5 Z+ @interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
8 r5 X- U9 E, ]She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
) G) \! F. B4 }$ xthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
5 ~  Z: O6 b1 T4 T5 ~the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
6 E( ^1 H# i: @Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
: P$ O! h, s5 k% O+ l( ]* ]- ^另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
) M- G. i1 F  j7 b8 t0 G$ wHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
6 y% F: m: Q& Fhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

. _0 F+ y8 P  @5 {我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。