我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
8 d* s# h# M. S8 @3 z; u; D4 j是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
! Q  g& n+ x9 f+ S一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
, G4 D  l2 G0 \# f6 O; E白发红颜  不见皱纹
8 P. U( h( O+ Y# \& T, T+ X$ Z* t4 b开车铲雪  挖土栽花
+ l$ K# {/ p/ D6 k$ r似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
% H! e* ^* c! }邻居的字
. T' ^7 V# R5 x' f& Q4 \3 Y则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

# ^5 @9 k+ _' a: N邻居酷喜中国文化
- I. _" c1 s  Q说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
$ E2 \7 n+ r4 X那是从隔壁传来的
3 @2 Z! s& ?7 h1 ?3 }% g唯一的声响
3 o7 i" Q0 W. z$ k6 h+ v1 C那不知名的曲调
! G- Z5 t0 \7 R2 R3 F  s7 l  L反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
+ L8 j: Z1 Z0 h: s7 C& O. Mmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
6 D- m- b( m( K7 N$ d! |* omagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
, ^+ E  ?8 p- d- D8 _9 [Her light-footed movement
5 U3 q$ K" {  V  e3 \is just like a flying swallow.

; B. @8 u: ]+ qShe shovels the snow on her door lane
) \' t" k: Z# V! v- s* M/ tbefore driving her own car;
/ P1 q" [! w+ w0 fshe digs her back yard
9 X; L8 c3 }9 F4 Ito plant flowers ---
- G7 Z& B/ X) {1 e  `( ?as if she did not know what years mean.
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+ M( \" H5 p% V. k5 DWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
  Z2 g: Q( y0 s) e: XNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
9 U# [4 F4 z. r9 E9 n( ?( a+ iinterwined by dry vines.
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) ^( ~4 Z! W. W3 I1 z3 i  }Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
, M" D4 P  }) G8 ~; Tthat is the sole sound going into my ears
( G/ G9 t( F1 k, d' Efrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
9 Y( {0 f( D6 g* Kagain and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
9 F1 X# G$ @3 H5 qJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
# i7 P. Z4 M, o" sHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
0 }- K, Z5 x# z# ^, r, r& _is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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& T: C5 P& H4 B" z, d真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
: i* @4 H+ c0 K7 x0 [hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

9 r& v0 I) H* l  w' ?( p我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。