我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
) ^8 s/ T9 X' g是我们小区  几十户
0 s% W/ _2 e- @2 k唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
1 L- q- N" z5 s0 V白发红颜  不见皱纹
9 u: \0 v( X4 {) Y开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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8 q7 k: i) f0 e6 [/ t% f% K# P0 R5 [头顶英国文学硕士的光环
8 {7 e6 m* O* S- e( Z6 x7 E邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
, j5 {6 `, Q5 ^4 ]则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
$ I5 S7 e4 g& V9 ?- Z( t其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
; Z( R2 X& ~5 @7 T' S5 t' T唯一的声响
2 R3 y& a9 Z& T7 D- T那不知名的曲调
# C+ d; d# d. M. t反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
4 ]$ p8 ]) Z) v( h) ^tens of townhouse condos.

! i/ t/ b9 v, G% F, u1 q2 E' pNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
  K; W" s" x6 V+ N0 j6 amagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
& i$ X" }( X! c  hShe has white hairs and red faces.
) M! ~. P3 ~3 J% {Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

  K6 z6 i% X2 s" A9 M. zShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
1 \- E. j6 B7 h6 _* a9 y" Xshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
5 O  S. [: X/ t: N1 N6 c% d/ rneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
% i$ U, R: R& B. LNeighbour's handwriting
0 L$ J0 G) r/ }is so vigorous as to be the old trees
& \/ @" S9 l3 V  P4 ?. L# u& H. Binterwined by dry vines.

; S' L8 B; f1 u" y5 k* @Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
! |. b1 V2 P+ Z4 u- t: z) h& FWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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# s& J9 j4 p' d; Q* @土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
+ q. J& H' Q/ lJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
# T8 A5 ?6 z2 a7 j  y. ?  bHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
# D; L# D' h. `4 ^hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

! i7 s2 B/ F; ^9 C" a1 b9 ~9 ^我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。