我尊贵的邻居(11)

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/ h5 A7 \2 p- \* J$ ~: p我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
" o0 |1 |6 S  Q  Z6 g: H  {! x% x" n一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
' ]9 T" A/ m& M白发红颜  不见皱纹
4 `7 }# }' l5 e1 ^: x开车铲雪  挖土栽花
9 n9 r( d$ t$ C4 g5 C  I! G( `似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
6 R2 T+ L1 F8 I, H- Y% S如同女面朱熔基
  [9 r3 L, |' L3 \2 e9 N0 I邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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. o5 {* D0 s* @5 ~" A- h  J英文版，欢迎指正：
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5 r( |7 [' F0 e7 c; QLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
6 X. W2 P1 M' `. U! d: win our community ---
) h( o# d; E! A! H4 Z7 s, ]( ztens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
: d8 q6 M3 Q# n4 RShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
0 Y5 N& l; v" X5 d& o: |) a" e, n0 X* Ebefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
# S  H# U' d: e9 Eto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
0 G, [* g$ d- t. g  m, R* Z  L; Z5 G3 Yneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
' s$ R9 s# q- g/ z3 L4 p- |0 p" ras if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
! Y2 A# @7 X$ Y1 |1 p9 |4 RNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
# A7 `$ u4 L9 Z: }; [1 Y$ i  K6 Ginterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
/ e( I* W5 T4 EWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
9 Z8 N2 Z/ H& z4 i+ k- g1 ~1 ofrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
: ~# D% O: f* O  u6 b3 Jthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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4 ^2 R7 t/ `* Q+ Q0 S# q土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
) ~, ^. J+ ]7 A7 K3 W- T' @0 MJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
0 Q: i, U( P7 d另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
' R; f, y' {" Mis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
- D# F  _) A/ }6 I! v1 ?7 LHer light-footed movement
2 {1 m. q2 S; v/ _is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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: W) I3 l3 ^  T' D& _真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
# |* @# Y( Q6 s9 w  ^9 C1 y  [+ d真的是太像朱镕基了！
/ N: ?  _3 y/ N8 Xhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。