我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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7 R1 L+ T5 `* [. N9 V2 t我尊贵的邻居
2 V: m( H1 x% T; v) i7 _- a5 ]是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

- H* H: `! _- k2 a" D3 y/ ]邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

8 R9 V3 a7 V2 c, W5 O$ V6 I6 W7 }$ d  x头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
* v$ B0 l% J9 ]; @, {; z如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
4 m( X$ G% d: A" `" t1 A. F2 Z8 o那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

; M5 S, d# ]& H( u7 A英文版，欢迎指正：

  e) I/ |$ c& p5 W- E2 cLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
  D% O* Q0 v- l/ B, nis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
- K% X  W/ J( j9 w% f3 @/ y+ |magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
) y  d7 l! q0 A7 A) K# |6 J" K- z' N! bShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
5 f5 m) x3 `3 s7 D# fis just like a flying swallow.
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6 {, `6 `5 ^3 u: uShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
7 H8 F7 a: \+ C; K; ^- Nshe digs her back yard
( D& I& w1 ~3 B6 ]& h" T/ ~to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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1 q4 H; F; b. s6 |With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
. [5 M: r- Y$ }" h( Kneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
6 y- p, D' z4 e6 s2 xis so vigorous as to be the old trees
7 n7 K( l+ q& p' U: J, L3 t# `interwined by dry vines.
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6 m) F' ?8 a! a: ~/ U6 [9 S9 v! _0 cNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
) {0 U" J; {( J3 x/ P+ @/ F9 Jthat is the sole sound going into my ears
% J6 {  [( `. d; Y3 y5 ]from the next side of my wall;
8 E% W. L$ D) t4 n5 X* g( ~the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

9 K9 i  B' @) }+ t) D1 H" O土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

5 W  n( M; v. s+ h: z! c7 ~4 L从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
6 h" [+ w8 X# y) E& h: D6 |" I4 tHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
* J) r+ m: N4 J! q& e. |hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。