我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

& [  r$ c2 l2 N' |8 ^: F# |邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
9 V2 m. W& V" p" O白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
) `% P# M) _9 n4 j' N邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
: I/ E% ?# x, }邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
) @3 g' @" W- O# C2 e! B+ @( W其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
: |. o$ J( d6 C4 V3 |/ D5 l+ ~唯一的声响
! ]$ u1 [1 M* O: `! F9 n9 b) F那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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7 z7 C# r7 W' p  j. o9 K英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

4 @7 O3 @; I& j7 ~- MNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
. U' C% ?  U5 h; ^+ r) j* w! H' JHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
+ g$ a- t( e( H; J& e2 v5 }she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
# ~5 x4 \$ ]4 @  Z/ ], Qneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
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2 E1 x# v, D$ o* ?$ Kinterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
* d; }9 C) w9 }4 j( u+ W: d6 z2 l6 lWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
, r2 u* D3 N0 }0 ~7 Q, Kfrom the next side of my wall;
4 l7 Q; }' Y$ ^% p* F$ Dthe unknown tune is extolling
4 J  Z! D6 B& ]/ t8 O) J" q5 Zthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
# Z. y) S% |5 r+ ?+ Yagain and again.

Justing

% X2 }7 p$ _8 D! y土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

& d. l0 F# z, n- D0 s从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
4 ]; L4 e$ U1 R% d  W! }: u+ ^另外，翻译改动一处：
. W# H% x) I3 }" H/ u  `: EHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
/ q; }( v2 K( t" r真的是太像朱镕基了！
2 X1 @8 B$ ~' F5 Rhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

. P( Z: `3 }9 i! O- Z( v我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。