我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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8 r6 i# Z9 w3 Q' v我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
6 }# T2 p( a' F9 @/ N# l唯一的元老
! V) u$ h' c4 s) G! @一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
9 [( g5 z) C9 t5 B开车铲雪  挖土栽花
6 {; P: S8 |' {似不识  岁月为何物
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8 b) C+ g. n. O1 \& h头顶英国文学硕士的光环
% `* \6 k6 V% M# F7 h9 @) r6 c邻居气宇轩昂
! S8 D4 D: O& \0 T) c! T$ C8 f如同女面朱熔基
$ ]+ Z+ Y1 F9 R) ^7 I$ Y邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

9 ]! Y" ~) Q% z6 C邻居酷喜中国文化
% x( H% G1 M* K& |6 h9 q说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
0 O, P  F6 u+ @; E: ~" q2 v那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
, r4 j( f. b- T1 X$ lis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
$ t% Y9 Z! C. m: qtens of townhouse condos.
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7 o9 o+ d7 U0 o+ F9 U! Q  {9 VNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
! L2 g" A5 ~. y' ]9 kmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
: e" H0 |- ^# F) p6 BHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

9 |: S! ]6 U. e& f. A3 N2 nShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
8 S) A, ?; t& h4 j3 h1 O- x0 E0 Rto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
) f& X$ x. b& X0 N. E7 uNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
" l$ `: H* E* ]6 i( }. s  Xinterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
3 l4 I# S' o& ]+ P) A/ Fthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

' G( R! B# \8 a5 o& X9 d" B土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
0 U/ n, O% w' z, w. IJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
+ i, n& G3 q! y$ Z6 i- e) E  zHer light-footed movement
8 b$ X/ q* M5 W" m0 M" Nis just like a flying swallow.
& V& ^5 M) p4 g. E  Y修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。