我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
, f6 L2 m9 i1 J7 V一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
9 Z! v0 a3 e' H% A  Y% |! L开车铲雪  挖土栽花
, |. u3 L% M8 g! n8 `* i似不识  岁月为何物

6 |+ \- x' n6 k0 H) S6 U$ L: G4 _- @头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
1 u* _5 \& Y; r7 `7 N! v! X如同女面朱熔基
- A" B7 v( a7 f邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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5 _: [8 p, T9 N) d$ f" H4 s: b邻居酷喜中国文化
4 `  S8 f, B! \  Z/ _4 g说她属土龙
+ G9 P- I% M4 y! c! Z5 v. t" h其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
5 U1 d0 y7 _, Y" a/ f/ ?" U! l% c6 J那不知名的曲调
# c2 `* ]4 k" v! E' v! e反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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. q+ U+ p0 _  v9 w英文版，欢迎指正：

4 ~% @" V- _! r& l& j/ CLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
7 Z* h% c. N( o  Ais the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
2 l- h* E- A0 D+ Utens of townhouse condos.
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" _+ }" N: x; y: o+ Q% N* wNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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, c" q' G& _; i6 d# kShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
: u2 W; |, C- d8 X+ ]she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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# d( A/ o+ ~" v7 j. Q8 c7 K4 `# OWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
  H3 b1 x0 p8 hinterwined by dry vines.

' f0 A. C& k( x$ C  Q. KNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
0 l+ d4 C' ]4 C& EWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
& z2 K+ r, @- U5 n& F% V# ]8 ~* d9 Vfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
4 X% D. Y2 t  o  Fthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
- `5 t1 j$ X1 N8 Q5 f* l' jagain and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

- _9 _' M6 p( `; B# ?7 X* b2 [从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
& w% y! Y  ]0 CHer light-footed movement
4 N( Q) P1 v( dis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
- g& p4 L' H; y  a' N, \3 DHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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+ V& f4 H& l: N8 ?' j- [真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。