我尊贵的邻居(11)

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$ S& g% x+ o3 K& m, b9 B) W我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
% U- n+ X) o1 k唯一的元老
4 [1 x+ Q) `. N! x5 V' m0 I' c) Y一住三十多年
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! a. ~0 J3 J5 Q邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
* i/ i7 }( F! Z' ?白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
9 T0 Z0 u4 J4 z: _6 f# U  B0 M邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
( c/ I$ G1 }% y' N邻居的字
3 h) q0 A* j3 f+ o则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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0 |( J8 H" E9 U( ~& m; ?- c邻居酷喜中国文化
! x; t# I( s0 P: [说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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* G' o$ |* O; Y2 O4 Y% O$ E/ W& kLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
, k/ Y0 a- l2 P, ^2 k. ^is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
  H, `* d" U' i3 r5 f& m8 mtens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
! h! Z( `/ \5 `. y: ~7 Q& j+ }% }Her light-footed movement
. U7 V5 L& C4 I. Uis just like a flying swallow.

2 k) E& g! X- M7 k" }) ^: V$ [! nShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
+ |7 O# j: w! f& f7 x- ^4 Gshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
7 X  E- z- T( A9 ?as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
% k* a3 ?; I# x% w. w# gneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
: U- P. y+ S' F! H0 v7 RNeighbour's handwriting
6 ^1 [0 L$ S  }0 Cis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

3 |* d* V0 @( o$ KNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
  e5 T+ I; v) {5 _* LShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
4 ]( F6 b" d7 S2 I& vfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
6 a2 E( f. f( q$ n( ~; dagain and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
  v" W1 S5 t+ {( |# F, wJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
2 t9 s+ K$ l; V$ A  T3 Q另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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  w# j2 t, E, H8 z- W; V0 `7 e& v1 AHer light-footed movement
; _" r! q) a! v- o* jis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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/ |' Y6 \, V, D' m- L- Z% a" L5 N. b真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
+ U# \4 ~- q/ q, A  \4 ~; G7 ehm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。