我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
1 L0 @' F) n) U; K8 q4 X是我们小区  几十户
6 A( O4 _) s+ n$ D) y/ v! Y+ v唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
! F: a/ {3 m! K白发红颜  不见皱纹
# P/ ?3 I& P" ~5 J2 K* u开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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: s- A3 K/ Y8 w. M5 A; l头顶英国文学硕士的光环
8 S* j% I/ S& e0 D1 {8 l邻居气宇轩昂
8 O. ]5 O% v" t- Q$ ?; R4 R. O3 ?如同女面朱熔基
. y2 Z* M* _! C4 x4 F1 a$ e4 i  U邻居的字
: r, Z; @# n$ z5 @& x4 u+ m! K4 K则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
9 p9 _, X% G/ P! p/ ?4 F说她属土龙
: v- L  t3 W3 o$ U4 a5 `/ L其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
( `9 F  G- P% a" a% d- J唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
( j: F3 t2 T" T# B1 X  f( U反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：

. ^. g. j" `4 hLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
5 _: d/ p: G  u3 f3 nmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
2 R8 R' l# d$ c9 lHer light-footed movement
* w0 f! v5 D1 X/ Y4 O% E& ~is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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5 i- Z/ K- s: YWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
. t. q4 `- A; {. S% R) pas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
  e! r4 c  U% o* o0 j! `interwined by dry vines.

" O6 X# M, ~9 m* L: z1 _Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
5 N+ @7 U$ X) {$ V3 x( f6 ?Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
4 l2 w" T0 M. M2 n8 [# a1 P* t; Rthat is the sole sound going into my ears
8 }' g9 ]* G0 c7 Bfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
4 t3 j: @6 z6 J6 a) |3 }' Z$ nthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

6 W! ~8 N8 X1 s! E% m% N土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
2 j+ {3 Q- t; ]3 W3 s$ T6 XJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
1 y. K0 g1 g+ T. jHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
2 U9 }/ o6 [# {% m. h真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

% B# j& M: N  j4 [/ W* Y我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。