我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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/ t' L4 M+ x  q  ~/ B" k邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
! Y3 w! S; Z% c9 \+ M$ o似不识  岁月为何物
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$ u  X: E! \, I; H$ J! |6 P头顶英国文学硕士的光环
  ^& S1 B$ m( r邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
7 N4 o$ d9 T- U2 l% s* [9 P则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

$ O3 W. Q8 N/ s$ q2 m2 {) [; J5 O$ R邻居酷喜中国文化
2 P" S( Y& E% v说她属土龙
1 t+ B9 ^$ d0 y' c0 h& V6 f8 C! \+ ^其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
6 D: x% `/ K2 [* E, E唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
$ ?1 Z2 i$ Z/ U) Z' W$ x; |反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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5 l- {8 E/ k* m, JLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
3 }2 {1 Q2 l, n' j5 }in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
' ?3 X0 K6 j+ C/ ~- Y6 Cmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
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" p/ p# ^2 S: d" S* X* }She shovels the snow on her door lane
6 N) s# F, a9 T9 l; y; ?% M5 @before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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* P$ N% p3 T- g/ Z* ~With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
6 U9 Z8 C2 y, a3 e) INeighbour's handwriting
0 s: E$ _. p; h7 \- _) ~/ |1 ]is so vigorous as to be the old trees
/ a  y+ O( k/ D7 Ainterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
( W6 J- P2 y" I2 K( ~2 y0 XWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
$ W' C5 m% ~( A, v' T( Ythat is the sole sound going into my ears
4 m8 E2 D. s/ K0 p( mfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
: s0 m$ q# }  k8 I; D" ]2 c! ^  oJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
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is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
) N& M7 @& c2 J6 L/ }. V" _3 u真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

* D4 e+ Z1 v; c! M/ P我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。