我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
% ~7 ]+ [! b+ Y; @8 W8 _是我们小区  几十户
7 w0 {- n+ }) }) [唯一的元老
一住三十多年

: x( X5 C- X# a/ B$ q' H  g邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
* {( t# e, {& N$ s- E/ g' s2 [似不识  岁月为何物
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; R8 B# `# Q. m& t* z  t头顶英国文学硕士的光环
+ Q; H* d. \. b邻居气宇轩昂
- H: p; S- |, b+ [8 Q+ q如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
/ D4 ^2 w; o0 U1 j6 v则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

: n* ^9 Y+ `2 Y! @! `邻居酷喜中国文化
% A# B6 A6 t8 `4 M$ o! a; r说她属土龙
/ N. i1 q5 c( O& a/ }' W4 ]" C' @其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

8 t8 e1 A+ |6 O1 @: I英文版，欢迎指正：

  j$ P3 X4 j: h' I5 dLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
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tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
9 V- ~1 y$ ^1 ]6 }7 _before driving her own car;
; T' g7 q3 ^) S9 oshe digs her back yard
9 D4 d+ U4 P  e+ ?2 sto plant flowers ---
7 x' P% R4 {# ?as if she did not know what years mean.

& y: V& e9 @5 T, t& r: Y2 wWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
( w+ k' p" }9 }7 v. b) S% Has if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
8 c# V# H8 L0 M  C9 qNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
. ]0 N5 p1 a9 n9 E+ O' jinterwined by dry vines.
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) k5 |9 H- n* W: |! {# v. qNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
# |$ X6 W, J# s7 |# J/ O% {" @Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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. x; }! \  h- ^; S" S) @' ~土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

$ M* _: t5 q! r; a从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
3 C: R5 g- v: K8 S( UHer light-footed movement
% h' Y4 f4 m* t  P3 j  Q  wis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

# V9 p8 M: _3 {我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。