我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
: s. B/ o# D/ c) l' I4 T% O" Z, J是我们小区  几十户
3 b0 }/ Y4 G& n' `. X唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
" o& h9 A/ s7 n( L0 ^白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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0 m  M% `; L1 v6 L$ S0 T% @头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
' _  f; Z6 e. a$ M+ M邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
- q* b& g) f; K' {( f1 j其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
- S; q2 p2 W: z6 z2 A7 ^反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
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& s" s( E7 t+ |0 ~tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
$ Z7 V2 x+ c: t3 V6 m3 ?6 omagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
( P! l2 r' k, a- |+ j! gShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

; R) R* A* C8 Z1 C; E6 O4 u1 `She shovels the snow on her door lane
: s2 Q  n! J! p3 }8 L: |+ b) F. Ubefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
0 E: ~0 ^- p- c  v9 gto plant flowers ---
+ b: b& M' R- x8 h3 S; Ias if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
. E' p; D' ~9 I5 p) Uneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
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interwined by dry vines.
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: O) {* Z4 ]; q9 _  @, q8 W( q8 W+ E6 DNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
* }' J! w$ F  S6 x' w- ]She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
1 U! _9 i) K( ^! Z9 F' E$ ^Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
, x6 q2 X. y5 I3 d* {that is the sole sound going into my ears
" q9 D! @. g9 U: L( m# lfrom the next side of my wall;
8 F, Q& |. Q7 B" rthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

# E- [0 O* ~0 a: o从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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4 B, E8 r2 ]/ ]' M$ xHer light-footed movement
' c  [6 _2 l2 Z& l  I) }is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
3 ^' ]: \6 W% y# |& @5 ohm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。