我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川

4 ^# I6 n( \' _1 l+ b' o, \2 `我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
7 V, P6 D2 L+ H( ~+ A# Q. i唯一的元老
) N' f* W. }3 r4 X一住三十多年

! e! |# ]& \: g6 _. X' g5 g6 C2 k4 d邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
6 X5 M- e4 |  B; [: E/ |2 }开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

! R  j- j; [5 M3 O$ z头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
! L( t( T: ^9 \, g2 L/ h如同女面朱熔基
# i" N6 z) I& x9 {邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

! }8 t( b9 U) ]* A邻居酷喜中国文化
" M* o: c: j* _, v) c说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
7 C: _4 V. r; T3 a" `3 _) d1 w唯一的声响
4 r  ^9 j0 }" T6 ^/ }那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
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  I: b) ~+ n3 p3 ]: P' z0 BLiving here for more than thirty years,
0 f& o4 X; d0 {my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
9 ^  r- t! N6 ?6 itens of townhouse condos.

; K. J% h: H6 i4 \' k* eNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
/ m! \& `: B) X8 vmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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  t* F0 N' @+ r2 _) S* nShe shovels the snow on her door lane
3 J  w$ d+ j( T, Fbefore driving her own car;
5 E& r. x1 a, s3 P; fshe digs her back yard
" M8 f5 g- x% G: E9 Bto plant flowers ---
" @1 @  O( h% ?' Q  D# Pas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
. z6 L) W7 a( @9 t% q' f! v: CShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
. K5 M$ r* d  a* S* eWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
5 V8 R: b& ~% P' Z1 z: v  rfrom the next side of my wall;
, D& K7 w/ r- v7 p3 z2 y1 ethe unknown tune is extolling
' W/ @  Z' L, R* C! Vthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
" v. ]( g' O$ {Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

" A. F. s" H& @; x  g从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
7 X9 \) V: h2 LHer light-footed movement
) N6 k) Y& X8 A* \& M/ jis just like a flying swallow.
5 v4 h! t( r/ m- n修改为：
Her light-footed movement
. i6 i/ J" I; w- h4 Eis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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6# Justing
: L' L, O+ ?: z# A" }真的是太像朱镕基了！
' F* V( X3 x8 e7 c9 P# s$ C. w  i4 ahm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

% L9 B7 O/ \) J我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。