我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
7 ?2 `2 T+ ?3 _" s一住三十多年
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; o1 q7 Y9 ?- G2 _- Z: S邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
  [; `6 H4 s6 U! b9 v开车铲雪  挖土栽花
) s0 L3 d/ ~2 ~% ^2 Y似不识  岁月为何物
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- H6 \9 b2 E+ R) z头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
  h' `) j* [  e如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
8 t5 {4 Q% O1 A9 n8 V! t5 S说她属土龙
( C, i! ^  N3 P其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
$ T* I# B! o3 a% {* N- @那不知名的曲调
- W0 V  B  L, S4 H: i/ U反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

% |* v! [/ d4 f- M% A英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
) B. S# |7 {7 N) s7 amy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
/ l1 Q; Q# o+ o  Ztens of townhouse condos.
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* S+ J/ g; p: vNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
$ Z2 |; O, @- ?. ]magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
" N8 ~# `1 s( p9 J0 x7 O0 v, V9 BShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
# P# f5 q" B/ T3 y9 Wis just like a flying swallow.
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9 H, h. _. ^/ p2 f: H  hShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

. B7 Z2 e  v3 `& j9 ~With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
- B; f2 w( ^* ?* Z1 w* W, Nis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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  T0 F4 O- x' _0 ]3 n6 C! }' _- SNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
2 _& A; ^) b8 Y* L: S  ]She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
6 n0 u: ^, X4 W4 z+ o4 cthat is the sole sound going into my ears
% D8 T- p) }4 efrom the next side of my wall;
1 l3 H( H6 u" ^  _7 n  Ithe unknown tune is extolling
/ v1 Y4 n; r' D. t- f0 L: c/ O; Fthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
- d( R! {- s8 t* uagain and again.

Justing

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# P* W: ]" S" a土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
' V& y6 {' ]: ~3 S( s另外，翻译改动一处：
3 S6 l! W- D# T* ]7 u* RHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
/ g$ Y# _) y5 l. j5 S3 ?修改为：
" X1 l! K7 Z5 o* d7 e+ k' WHer light-footed movement
; H; ^) Z( X5 i9 Y" O2 ]; T% p) S0 }is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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! H1 d5 ]0 a9 k) K; K- O真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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" ~9 v! j+ k" k0 t- @% `真的是太像朱镕基了！
4 t4 s/ [% l' z5 P& ~' ^hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。