我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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) @5 w- H3 h7 F' D我尊贵的邻居
4 ~. z+ M! S0 m' w是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
. L. m* T1 j' R- }一住三十多年

3 A4 w6 A- w. `& `邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
3 ]2 `) F  D/ P# S' ]开车铲雪  挖土栽花
1 ^1 U& O0 x! R. m1 ]' E似不识  岁月为何物

9 F7 h8 F! ]" a头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
# ~' ]2 I2 |+ ?8 }9 ~如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
2 w# V# H8 W, w& X2 m2 h% }说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
% K! ]0 m' E# l8 b那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
, x1 e2 C# n1 Y9 U那不知名的曲调
5 l) @- H: g% h反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

! ~4 X* x, H8 C4 qLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

& h. B$ J, H! f# R( J, f' d1 }Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
0 P. @$ {1 _2 n. p2 L# e- \1 KHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
; Y  p" Z+ ^$ n+ hbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
  m  i" h- ?1 K) O2 b$ u. Qto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
- A4 }7 j) u2 v6 `' u- YNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
) k4 u9 Y; T; w5 k0 h5 Y/ ~She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
! R( C5 p! W3 f" KWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
6 B- c2 v; S1 P' |5 k$ y8 K) hfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
6 r7 b3 i( X2 X; \6 kthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
9 I& Z2 Z) |; B' O* R% p2 ?( nagain and again.

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+ |6 j# g) o, T* Y土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
( a$ R4 p" t8 s3 M- j1 qJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
9 k1 F$ A6 ]! O! _( D5 ~3 N3 ~7 Y另外，翻译改动一处：
, B/ ?8 e" F) E; WHer light-footed movement
1 c; z4 U5 m, J3 jis just like a flying swallow.
+ C4 d; H9 S( b3 v. ~/ h修改为：
Her light-footed movement
2 L1 p, f# Z( r! pis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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8 ~# f- f- u8 i! E1 V6 g7 a4 {: W, b真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。