我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
+ i& ]6 i: H- U* e, f' [) W是我们小区  几十户
! y0 e) w6 o- q唯一的元老
# P6 G. \) a$ r6 h- x* n$ Q) R一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
3 q' Y) H6 x  O' Y* a! P白发红颜  不见皱纹
  Y- L& X" U" r' o5 W5 x0 H- P开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

. p% Q, i2 K, v头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
' t0 W1 ~6 n( W8 W7 A2 x0 e( w其笛声也悠扬
) o$ `+ \+ b! k) o% U那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
9 i9 e0 E( S8 |8 P  }; p; x9 a那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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4 N" v7 j* d- M英文版，欢迎指正：
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" R. \/ o4 @7 u# z& nLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
- ?  I( v+ w- ois the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
4 d0 y+ A$ d' h+ \0 _tens of townhouse condos.

- ?3 n4 A* M4 z- \1 UNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
/ k; h+ O8 N7 P, A& U, f# cmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
6 q# U. l0 w9 a: g1 w" v9 eShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
% V/ a9 x. u9 k2 i* @8 L; f( i& Tis just like a flying swallow.
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5 Q" M- s5 O4 d4 A, `8 S; L  UShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
" |4 w+ X! O2 c: Das if she did not know what years mean.
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! Q, j# }) r8 k: T" u$ ZWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
5 a# t& i- _2 ANeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
" O4 {) f4 X: `) Hinterwined by dry vines.
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/ `4 m/ V) a3 \Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
6 x1 i  D( ]0 m  c  Y# S" bWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
; b! o% g+ J" ?% N! c# U( xthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
4 U, o' x5 V) I6 H. N3 j  ithe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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. I& ^' A' c. o6 t5 D土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
# H0 Y# I& l$ r1 ~1 RJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

( B; g8 A9 ]4 X1 t从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
6 Y- x3 _8 u  {  g2 O8 b另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
  k' Q1 J1 k" o3 jHer light-footed movement
) M; I5 F1 O) o) ^: ^, n3 [  mis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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9 V4 F5 H( ?( {, K真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。