我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

" b- r% k) I' K% z! E5 H我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
& W/ F" O1 J3 P4 w  i0 {. ?0 U唯一的元老
) R$ R- c1 d( d6 M& @8 ?( H* [  h一住三十多年

# U* v- m  [* R' k6 h; @邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
6 ], m* t  n8 k, r+ M" t3 C- \3 H白发红颜  不见皱纹
/ a' b6 `0 h* g4 p3 b6 g8 o; K开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

: X2 ^+ L1 L, p5 |1 v头顶英国文学硕士的光环
6 {6 E& y" j& V: G2 _! y+ ?3 q邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
/ Q7 v$ M* W# n" y  s3 }6 @邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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  t0 s2 U% X8 _邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
6 y# Z- D$ P# z, n其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
: p( x! e- r* }; Z唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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4 P2 q" P+ \# y' [" mLiving here for more than thirty years,
2 F' `  [6 s, L; N0 o7 b4 g* I" |* mmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
5 o7 r4 F, W8 j; ~% g1 EHer light-footed movement
/ a# L* q; J/ Y2 d: {" U6 r% vis just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
9 ~- d: h& j7 c, c2 n. g6 B! \* ?she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

3 Z, }' }: t" h% M& |3 b$ CWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
1 A9 M0 q' D2 C2 C( L' {is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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. ^& W; R% G- V; LNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
( s! d1 S6 B) }6 U+ s  mShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
+ W8 p! `% |/ l/ ~! s6 uthat is the sole sound going into my ears
& X8 W6 K6 d0 S! }/ Ffrom the next side of my wall;
0 U: H/ D9 J- u! n- Xthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
3 D+ b# r; b# yagain and again.

Justing

" ]5 v4 ]+ Z: x# C+ P/ |5 p; @9 `土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

# W" O! ^4 Y% {" ^. ]+ A从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
+ U, H+ T' [! L: B另外，翻译改动一处：
' r# D2 m& D+ z, S9 t4 wHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
4 c  x3 F. ^( ^3 k修改为：
" f3 C4 e$ G5 s# e3 r3 s) YHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。