我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
4 R6 l9 _. B$ N  n. c' Z是我们小区  几十户
# W3 o: ]! M+ s$ x唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
6 {0 o3 {0 @3 j4 L) D  [开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

8 V2 O" t& |* }9 f+ G头顶英国文学硕士的光环
0 h2 e2 \$ o* }2 E! G* R0 D8 A邻居气宇轩昂
! K3 Z  E& N7 T% l" E3 c. u  ~如同女面朱熔基
9 M6 A0 k) N' t邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
# b% `$ b) E8 G; `: R1 c唯一的声响
2 B; T4 g1 w# X4 T4 m. x( \3 ?那不知名的曲调
7 M4 b9 N: |( r反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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Living here for more than thirty years,
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is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
% i  {3 \9 p. S0 D7 `tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
/ i) l. U3 X# S: o, i& S& Z% c5 IHer light-footed movement
5 K$ |3 y% ?( N5 ^( i/ O% pis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
/ B2 H7 d$ }$ F, o& o$ n5 {7 oshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
, g2 p. N) G+ r0 was if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
3 k9 @5 l4 m. j& |( u, H) m3 dneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
7 Y% i5 V) q  s) Y$ kis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
8 r/ f; X# a' q2 f1 l- QShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
( e9 c% b& _# y* t( bWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
$ S" t5 q9 E1 I# j- Z6 g3 Ifrom the next side of my wall;
5 l$ J/ J- M6 b0 W- bthe unknown tune is extolling
$ _8 a: o& T  `) X1 C8 rthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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, Z$ H$ @- h/ z8 z+ x土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
' {8 L3 ^9 }) i' d; \* x' CJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
) _2 R0 A1 c: ^" l* q另外，翻译改动一处：
8 x0 w# E! e7 BHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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2 n/ U, S' K0 B真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
# H5 j, M4 C: s; x真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。