我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
$ q% t6 }. C# _* Z唯一的元老
1 u9 z2 c: D3 h一住三十多年

+ @& e  \3 B/ h2 O! @邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
4 P+ f9 s6 S2 [% G' I9 @如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
' U6 f  x3 c9 R! y+ W说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
6 Y# U; q" S3 E" U# y唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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Living here for more than thirty years,
5 [" }* m4 O; zmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
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tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
( z# o, Q( l/ B# v( C% z+ @, _She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
9 r& O- B  }7 ?1 j9 @she digs her back yard
4 K6 J$ z' t& Oto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
2 a3 [: W+ v' T" Rneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
* B' E4 F  Q- _! ias if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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" Z( R( X: C/ a, r$ YNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
6 _' Y! e. G, l8 A/ p! EWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
% u# d* K5 V, Fthe unknown tune is extolling
" [5 z: |8 G6 ?/ `) d% Ithe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
) w: ?5 Y. E$ F% uagain and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
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4 m- N, [$ J2 J/ l- b* \" _3 C3 ^6 u8 i从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
$ o! M' F8 u1 fHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
- M0 P5 `% o" N0 T" }is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

( ~1 `) _  i! n' K我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。