我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
9 H# V. Y7 a' p) G% ~唯一的元老
8 u% G0 K5 s6 M一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
9 k# D+ `7 W2 m$ m+ {白发红颜  不见皱纹
/ I9 f; b4 ^/ g. b开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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' {3 _8 Z# V0 U! M" f4 m头顶英国文学硕士的光环
% L+ |! n' k1 h4 T9 g邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
( y9 s9 i/ y! T邻居的字
: J8 t0 @. O9 {  j" K则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

* `/ K$ W# x+ F% L2 [5 Z& w邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
9 u4 ?% S0 y+ Z/ J$ `7 k那是从隔壁传来的
3 ], y' ?, }: F8 N$ q唯一的声响
8 o" ?7 m) H- L' k( T那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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1 u) y* @6 X* a& R英文版，欢迎指正：
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& Q& z7 B! z" b# h- uLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
& S  U$ M7 u) M) wtens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
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6 g% Q! j: X/ g, `$ V) Q/ {. uShe has white hairs and red faces.
% e6 n3 s! ]. g  M4 \4 a4 bHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
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as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
1 L* o5 \% ~, \) q4 b' ineighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
( [6 X: _. R5 Z& [+ k. }is so vigorous as to be the old trees
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4 c( j7 l$ E& C. J! cNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
' `" b7 y/ r& m; S% i% EWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
5 F% ]" u& p# M: {' L3 lthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
3 }! W' G7 G( t; uagain and again.

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9 v. A1 T0 _2 ?- q; s9 R土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
) R$ U) E' _+ O! ^" h$ L) W/ pJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
5 r, I- U( Z% ?; E' k) ~5 g9 }Her light-footed movement
6 S3 r1 P: R0 h* |8 _2 [: Sis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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5 W1 w) a. v1 K* O. J真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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! ~9 o' U/ u( }$ Y- b* i: }真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

: w' Z' `  q/ f* `% `" D我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。