我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
' o# H: B8 Z$ c8 F是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
! H; ?+ j, M9 s一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
% S- Z/ h, H  b, v7 r邻居的字
4 W2 r9 x3 x8 ]- w( ^" m: b则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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2 s  v" v9 N- G% Z2 m邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
0 R9 |) C; [" X8 p# d# D5 P- Z其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
8 f( e9 {4 H# Z6 R! U$ x- d" W) g唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
- ^: L5 v: q' W' L2 O& k反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
1 F/ g  D9 D# p9 A& ^' X( nShe has white hairs and red faces.
+ K/ e* Y, |$ w/ SHer light-footed movement
9 ?4 x9 Q6 K, j* @6 ~" T. q/ C( bis just like a flying swallow.
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) n  B. M" g; W) I+ R# M* FShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
6 b$ v! u' V2 z8 t# @1 n5 O: v, [to plant flowers ---
0 l* R8 V8 X2 k" \& X5 Xas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
: y2 [2 K  S& JShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
( C/ P- Z, F" ]5 Y+ z  XWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
( H  V* N" N- n' U; q8 E. Lfrom the next side of my wall;
; S, \* B0 U7 Y6 G1 hthe unknown tune is extolling
- r8 c* R3 L0 n8 Z' W/ B$ |the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
9 L8 f. T) w; K0 ?& R3 o/ |; kJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
, v! D+ _- ]. S3 \1 x, XHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
/ I/ Q5 d5 n7 B9 FHer light-footed movement
3 f. ?& g* U; fis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
5 Y% Q! V8 s4 |+ `hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

2 \9 c2 [! F; V4 q( m4 H4 V我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。