我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
* l, h* Z  I# g+ ^# x3 n: F是我们小区  几十户
& z  [3 ~" G# l9 V, w: u7 }9 M唯一的元老
) m* t  H, \1 N' a; p- o: ~一住三十多年

7 y* M+ O# }" p邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
9 Z3 l% j& V. m7 D' U开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

! J, f8 ~) I, f) W) Q头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
1 U4 W* o* X7 g: n如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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7 r, ~6 s2 }# w4 R6 a! V' R1 O邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
( X, N, q) L' o& ]$ e其笛声也悠扬
6 J! t% S( `* x那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
& x+ m3 d: v+ U1 d0 D8 x0 W: p反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

4 O) ?9 F! b0 i# W- p! tLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
' X2 l) d; Z% wis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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, @' H: _/ a+ }2 z8 K# DNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
- j: M7 O7 O6 N7 Rmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
2 R* I! h  b0 v$ k4 f, M. w* aHer light-footed movement
! ?' G9 T( ?/ A! S' J7 tis just like a flying swallow.

) C6 ~) J- h! e% n7 h; KShe shovels the snow on her door lane
4 b, F$ T# Y7 S0 _before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
$ [. k, Q8 U2 r: L6 Jto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

- C" x+ d  w8 h4 CWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
4 s; F, j- A  uas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

. [' V; a0 z3 K! N) uNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
2 P$ V% f' J# {! c3 jShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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( ~. e- c2 \, x+ l+ p3 s2 g: l, L/ h土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
! |- A1 ?+ Y: ?$ l1 P6 x9 A& O& d2 u3 PJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
) c0 v0 {2 p0 h7 c) r- Y+ T3 O& QHer light-footed movement
) s7 L& Q, ^7 [6 V# s6 S, iis just like a flying swallow.
( V* o& f* {  H  `修改为：
Her light-footed movement
- I; K8 ~- e+ ~* vis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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( Y  H- A4 f( c* p真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

( `+ y! E% r. i( M  S. ~8 \我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。