我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川

8 ?. A' }( x% v我尊贵的邻居
" e/ F0 i5 j) L7 n, Y* N! W是我们小区  几十户
" I* U6 l1 H+ \唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
2 w- {' s: D- E% m1 N* R5 A白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

8 Z9 [9 P7 F3 Y头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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& |4 _- x1 c( H+ V8 Z( |邻居酷喜中国文化
! y" z3 T' U% P9 P说她属土龙
- N  D/ W  @7 T( b$ r& z其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
& e4 O' }6 u$ `  C# \唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
5 t- j5 f( i/ X/ B& ^is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
  B3 ^' V/ S! p( t8 ttens of townhouse condos.
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) m% K: W9 V: PNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
5 v2 F1 ~1 |7 f1 i, lHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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5 ~+ H! [" Q3 F8 i. c2 XShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
. a% ?) Y- c& V* n* k6 cto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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8 q$ {0 i. w: ~4 n- x# UWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
$ ~7 T# T* {4 @9 s4 tas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
# V5 K" E2 z9 J# H5 s7 xNeighbour's handwriting
0 ~' v% @# i0 Nis so vigorous as to be the old trees
+ @* Y; `( X9 ?interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
) X$ R( A: T! O- E5 p% f# a6 sShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
' ?# v. y, ?; e8 b# y- O1 jWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
" u) z- z) }3 u5 v! \; }1 x- bthat is the sole sound going into my ears
+ ~+ V/ c2 Y8 \9 m" U1 ^7 i4 |from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
" o5 k4 h+ O+ S' ]' @: Gthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
& W5 g2 c: i0 m- y1 oJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
, n! b9 E  W* mHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
  l, B3 e5 \. Q4 q" vis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
: ?& O% o8 r9 T5 v* b真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。