我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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' ~) p5 j, M0 u" I6 |' V邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
* X9 N, T* Z8 o  O. ^邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
) c8 F) D" Z2 B( g邻居的字
6 y5 c2 A+ h  V  v" A% c) u( p& G则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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: U' K, Z" I$ v, V% ?( [邻居酷喜中国文化
4 p  e6 [9 b* \  f! U! J! ?说她属土龙
; _# \# W1 u/ b8 u8 w其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
  V/ H2 l% m8 Y2 c) t* r* n反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

1 d. R( p9 m  M1 a9 V/ R1 ?Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
, Y7 s# j; C, ~  q; }9 Nis the only first owner of the unit properties
8 n; y( u* s- r" Fin our community ---
% M9 g1 G8 C* c( _6 \tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
; s! A8 R6 Q9 p, t6 v0 m0 Ato plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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$ r; x$ ]0 X; t9 {  p9 n, g6 {With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
5 W! N. u  q1 |1 c. H# w- SNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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1 P' n6 b, \% W7 r5 c3 aNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
3 m; o% J- u) b2 [% iShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
4 Q9 q  }8 E! QWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
( C8 _) o3 {* x( i: G. T* _3 Kthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
3 l4 }0 n2 }+ A% e* M  bthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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$ W# Q, k+ |9 h0 M$ ?8 X/ t土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
) B* b0 a+ a/ d0 z# E- QJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
) y+ k) x2 E! THer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
  X8 O/ M, H: mis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
) e4 d) I+ Q: @$ Chm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

" k5 _* t3 ?) e, h6 B+ L我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。