我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

6 T' Q9 h4 i( A) f' B邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

& {6 M! H0 n' g' |头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
3 F# L" m7 }  v如同女面朱熔基
9 P" h4 v+ i( p0 l( s  ]4 M邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
" L, K7 c# }% h; U& A: u唯一的声响
9 C% X% L9 Z1 |0 R" t) Z. U! Q那不知名的曲调
  _3 f" P9 h- v; N# O- O反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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5 ]3 @' V$ G3 W英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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in our community ---
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9 d1 j% h: M; ?1 s$ j! I: JNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
9 J, z# n3 W9 g: q* WShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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0 W# y$ J7 r! ?- VShe shovels the snow on her door lane
( }  \1 Z1 U6 L7 Kbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

0 ~9 t$ k, T$ @% l+ yWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
4 i# }0 i0 }  z4 `( ]7 O- g' _  i% Jneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
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" ^$ S. K, x* s& ]Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
" s4 [; K9 i; j. z  ]the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
' h6 s) |0 z# y6 K& d5 ^4 Sis just like a flying swallow.
2 v) K' s! i7 m7 }4 o2 r. T修改为：
2 [6 }+ P! O) O6 [: [! i& Y& w. aHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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( {" a; d3 m1 R真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

$ D, k% ~% O/ u4 r- _6 M1 q9 ~我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。