我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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* E/ |0 g$ t6 |4 t我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
6 H) L, s+ Y* r5 W唯一的元老
- {# a# t' J* E. Z一住三十多年

9 @" y1 |5 ~! n& O7 t  u6 [邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
8 }% H+ Y9 _$ e8 q% I. ~3 k" P开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
* s: S- Y8 _5 y: d5 ?9 V  n邻居气宇轩昂
; k* c+ t5 j: I3 z0 ^如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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0 q" }/ H0 F, o) `: ELiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
2 ]: z) |0 L7 I) x. N/ H: `is the only first owner of the unit properties
4 ]6 ~; [/ A" V. Y& d* Q' M% n8 Oin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
; ]+ F5 K" Q& c# Z- U: Yis just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
$ ?$ I' C) h5 lbefore driving her own car;
, J& a" }8 s1 Ashe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
. x: e# H- `: m2 ^9 n3 J! E' v$ f' ]as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
7 F& G/ P% ~& ?as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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9 z% b, v. S1 a6 ^" T3 _Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
$ i8 m" q( A; J. ^- FWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
/ P$ E& ]5 O! x( C# x# S# ]the unknown tune is extolling
" U8 }, m: Q5 L( ~7 n# ^6 Cthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
9 k) w9 @/ m5 ~1 gagain and again.

Justing

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3 e. L* u7 Z$ n8 p& A# o4 k" C土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

* L( K. j5 h  p/ b# Y$ Q0 A: ^从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
3 X" R, w! ~% P" F另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
3 Y& X0 K7 c$ X& aHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

! B4 s: V4 Z9 ^: I# s我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。