我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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9 i- y; g* S# W" ~- O" p& _, _/ W我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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1 |7 d' }8 |5 S. p* S2 ]头顶英国文学硕士的光环
" |2 K0 S5 \9 u7 C邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
1 V! J* W( f  g0 X说她属土龙
# G5 O7 Z7 A$ a$ p' o) k, c其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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9 U2 C& v# H- }. D' ^Living here for more than thirty years,
" N5 z8 ?- F7 Smy prestigous neighbour
3 E! X- ]3 r3 ais the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
* v( ?4 R, F$ x/ T* _. d2 X+ Ptens of townhouse condos.

2 u, Q  d" N) xNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
( \& K- |! b8 I6 y2 A" M! Amagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
9 G( o/ [# q  j# v# WHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
" t, Z2 a2 K' e4 ^1 [she digs her back yard
: n8 ?7 R. R, x2 }to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
4 O! ^* Q6 i( DNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

7 q5 U% S" S; _$ h  L' B9 ONeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
9 F" b% N! F* g$ I& hWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
- K5 s& D4 ^  _0 vthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
* u3 J' G+ n( q$ ^6 T- `Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

$ f! `, T5 Q  a9 a5 J1 B+ y8 @从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
: o& e' c4 n- R& e- C2 Zis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。