我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
8 c. M0 m, Z1 Z" d7 F# ^! n. H是我们小区  几十户
- u: _4 ^2 |' o& u5 h唯一的元老
+ e) ~4 T# ^* Q+ ^: U( B2 f一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
; C+ n% A$ g9 t9 \8 Z- k白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
3 C9 h4 G& n4 o邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
: J) F" T* E3 _; Y6 T: ~! f) l说她属土龙
9 ]& J1 f) e1 ~! X% I其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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& I1 y7 k- K( r" I  KLiving here for more than thirty years,
; o6 y# [6 ~. G& X9 h$ `) ?my prestigous neighbour
" G- }# E& b( @# Z' Ais the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
) @; y. i# T4 zHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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$ X8 ^5 C& q/ @" \* N! eShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
+ K- d# n, A- n5 wto plant flowers ---
. \2 w' f! Z7 |' A6 W8 U7 uas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
$ z. @/ u# M7 b5 j! G/ y3 oneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
. \5 [3 n% e; K# H$ `. o+ Ras if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
) U. {$ S% X2 o; i, Fis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
# T3 G) L4 O/ c' j0 bthat is the sole sound going into my ears
) R% \- i5 k$ ^6 ~; l3 dfrom the next side of my wall;
2 U: W1 }. V- dthe unknown tune is extolling
% @* U! }" a+ K9 Q* H3 Y1 Bthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

# @+ T& [- _& a8 g5 s+ K从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
3 m# Z3 b% R. Y" IHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


$ y# _% X5 L0 S6 g7 h* |' I真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。