我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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+ Q/ W$ X; j% @) ?3 s$ m我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
2 f, q& \. ^2 e1 k( |; s邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
6 r$ {- f. j: V! o2 P- V0 f/ }7 |说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
; ?5 Z. U1 |2 X& G) C唯一的声响
. O- F6 |8 l( p6 P7 F那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

$ r& c! R" |& r/ \英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
# V6 O2 b/ ^& |7 G% Q% `2 s3 Jmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
% i+ d8 l$ O5 u4 Y# Vmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
  M- B8 F1 d. C' ]( X. SShe has white hairs and red faces.
. L4 X' H. p* g# p- LHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
  k9 m" {' A6 O! _$ I8 i" E- z/ F6 ^she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
8 v4 J. K8 W8 x+ kas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
5 d. b( l  z1 X" b' [is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

: D- H! |: j' ^: ?: c2 c4 v/ B4 }Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
1 F% V  M: D$ c- ?/ s2 z; _: }She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
) W! h; j* t. n! Z% p2 e/ i; \- w: yfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
3 b4 x. U. W" Zagain and again.

Justing

! A! C8 E8 q; R2 m$ i6 u5 ~, F. p$ S土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
, P' p4 g0 Z* N4 Q( nJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
( W! {: I1 o. I; Y  G4 H# Q另外，翻译改动一处：
3 f* e& V& }3 A: C* q' zHer light-footed movement
7 a: E3 }" k3 ]' H1 kis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
: A) E# f# Y& B( S/ o' qis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

7 [* D3 s; P/ `) e$ X$ C/ f我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。