我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

' j/ F2 h' F3 i$ e; X: ]
井忘川
: V* g+ Z3 b3 ]& U5 P$ _
0 f% R$ c( W. \) W4 U4 Y6 n我尊贵的邻居
6 \' G" L7 Z) [1 G4 h6 E是我们小区  几十户
$ W& \/ N; ~1 {唯一的元老
4 {# `7 m% Q1 a7 q% E一住三十多年
1 N- L( x  r6 T) J/ Y# H* c" ]
邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
& V. S# t1 i: e5 a. D, ?. l开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
+ Z$ V. U3 v- S% E
& Y" a" C  m% E6 i# I头顶英国文学硕士的光环
1 S: T* I, a% V邻居气宇轩昂
+ i$ s- s- o8 g4 q! K如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
* K% Y  v' c- V1 F则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
" P6 N5 q0 W7 Y! m& v7 ^  }说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
" \1 o/ f1 f) d( y5 Y% @那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
) O2 i, Q2 H* J/ D  e. ?
2 }1 }! o2 q! z' Y" e6 @Living here for more than thirty years,
! E+ X, k7 y/ k  E( y- Smy prestigous neighbour
' m5 `6 t) R+ D2 k: r2 x- Lis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
$ k) D1 S1 V' r! ^
- `% m0 l! D# D2 P1 K, ENeighbour is more than eighty years old,
  p7 b1 I% Y! _' b8 m# l: D3 tmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
+ U4 W7 {. o' \& M& r& C) G( J, IShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

. t9 v4 r3 b' M7 v' uShe shovels the snow on her door lane
1 J( x8 O( G5 @1 O/ {5 Obefore driving her own car;
4 s8 p( I. U; X, }4 Y' b& Eshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
% q7 U6 p3 A; uas if she did not know what years mean.
" }+ Y6 m) k9 s% D2 _) g
With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
) C5 h' j- K  [$ XNeighbour's handwriting
  d5 f+ |: n8 b7 O. [2 Sis so vigorous as to be the old trees
# w" V  d$ b( Qinterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
+ _- i/ H' _# o* L1 c7 d6 q# o( ]- ~) ethat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
# x/ Z+ {& s7 s7 Ethe unknown tune is extolling
9 @/ q- i6 T& i+ O! G4 @2 Xthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
9 h- {6 q& t. x% _9 Y- F& e4 wagain and again.

Justing

$ G' o8 S0 Q- J土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

8 g' E7 T+ C7 |4 M6 ]+ ]6 J: P

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
# Q5 q) F: K( q/ y$ DHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
# K+ b; r* d8 K/ Q( W3 }" I4 Q; uHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


) i! \2 k& \) S7 |9 b真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
% w# Q# e/ H( i; R! ?0 M% T# M真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

- n% V9 y; S1 S. q  _我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。