我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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7 O1 h- s1 w- s我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
4 P- x6 @8 |  }9 |3 Y" O唯一的元老
( ]' P  m8 o" P; A6 R" H0 R- _  U一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
2 O3 j) n) Y4 r, A" a白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
2 c0 m0 i7 {9 V- T2 R似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
2 S: q8 L* a  J邻居气宇轩昂
1 W/ \3 J! s! N0 ]+ f6 d7 [+ U1 S如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
4 O0 B, z0 U+ H7 x$ ]- ~% }则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
- G7 F* n9 d) u: e  h1 w唯一的声响
3 Z! z* Z5 n, d3 E6 [那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：

" Z/ i$ Y; T; u* B* ULiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
# n: {( D/ r3 p" i! Nin our community ---
' _1 P3 D8 v, V; p' O# f" u: _tens of townhouse condos.

7 S+ m% n$ |" Z3 J( K4 S( pNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
) b' s) b1 H- A" F: pmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
/ _9 w. G% _$ I; p3 R# yShe has white hairs and red faces.
, ]8 F" ^% }" S% S! lHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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1 a8 k  c. C1 r* l) UShe shovels the snow on her door lane
& L& _$ n/ |7 k4 y. ybefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
7 p, U2 H6 K9 Uas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
# C+ \" D$ T* kNeighbour's handwriting
; p! {8 x; M, v) f. q0 Jis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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1 L6 G- O. W' s/ j) a& S/ rNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
' b8 l' X/ X3 k7 E8 `7 EWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
+ y, w7 {5 a9 w, o+ s% Z* TJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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Her light-footed movement
3 f, A: b+ X, y, dis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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* v3 S8 }; k: G& B3 `真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
6 A/ p- }& H/ t$ Xhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。