我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
4 ~$ M$ w% Q8 C一住三十多年
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) p$ I+ f) N0 o( a邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
  s; \6 v. v: \白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
6 c- m5 \% Q+ v; `, Q: c% I似不识  岁月为何物

& E5 Z/ E+ F7 S0 t% h头顶英国文学硕士的光环
5 s0 {% s" q- S1 q邻居气宇轩昂
4 X) ]- n  `2 F1 }* A8 D如同女面朱熔基
& Y! i2 s1 o- N( H) e邻居的字
9 S" P: ^0 Y5 g8 b  b则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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+ B4 G/ x$ J% a; L( F8 K3 c: Z; X邻居酷喜中国文化
- G3 K' K5 E3 E# y. g  N: y7 g" n说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
: [% B* i9 g- N# w! v, w$ k那不知名的曲调
& B# Z  g, o( X  Z, J4 ~2 w反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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tens of townhouse condos.
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% R2 K' o6 ^5 a# ?- U" N% |' dNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
% v4 |$ B1 q" o+ h9 v$ ]+ ymagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
7 d1 t4 s6 O5 JShe has white hairs and red faces.
5 F# @0 h+ \0 F9 m4 w9 ?; s* iHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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" Z1 h1 z5 H5 I& d( VShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
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interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
+ O( Z" ~( f8 ^0 QWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
# Y8 n+ t" b) N5 d: n$ |: _from the next side of my wall;
/ w- J2 B! X1 Tthe unknown tune is extolling
( G4 @6 g: T7 I! S+ E+ ]the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
0 A& R/ d8 |/ g" D* N# |4 o9 r: `/ V5 eagain and again.

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$ |& Q: I. ], {' `! `: s( l土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
! g# n2 @5 o( iJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
Her light-footed movement
8 w3 a/ s7 \7 v3 l( His just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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7 {6 S+ V$ F4 v  h8 E3 u8 A1 u真的是太像朱镕基了！

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7 i$ S9 l0 H( x% {真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。