我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
2 [& R6 X8 Y5 n+ E+ J0 l是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
$ S1 l9 X- Q+ ]6 E$ A' L: K一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
$ M, t4 R2 ]7 r$ ^邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
* y4 t. }' W# R' b, V/ h1 e/ q则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
4 R1 u$ [5 q# t那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
! Y4 n$ g$ Z. r2 p4 Y& Z那不知名的曲调
3 [# g+ \8 f3 ?* `反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
; i6 P/ r5 c# V$ k& n4 G* imy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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+ y4 Q$ L- v$ ~. o8 w+ _2 |Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
9 f4 C7 \) B, G3 R5 mmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
9 k6 U4 Q+ A6 h# a/ z) Q% pto plant flowers ---
! n! @# f2 y8 G& W) E% h/ Was if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
# o0 j* p! W$ n3 `8 n" {6 Z: O5 K! xas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
! y0 F3 `( O; o) G& e5 }! WNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
! Q6 M9 u/ m& q; ~9 h" _She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
0 m& _! N3 ]% |: m. y, g8 MWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
  f) ]2 }$ d' ?* e0 z, A% m/ ]that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
' m0 ~9 ~1 M' ^/ r5 s& cthe unknown tune is extolling
+ Y# }0 w3 B& I* Y* B5 z" [$ Nthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
0 y. U% ^& o( p5 X6 K  Z6 |" h4 ~2 UHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。