我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
7 h& F8 O# J$ I% ^6 c( M* n; B. [是我们小区  几十户
2 d9 ]2 X4 k4 v6 i0 I) ?* z唯一的元老
, l8 D( }, C1 a, a( o一住三十多年
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+ }) P5 W: ?) O: Q' w邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
6 e1 Q1 r: i3 R7 j4 o白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
/ U! _4 f( m: B. R邻居的字
: X9 G1 s+ z: h9 ]则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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7 ^, p3 u* D2 W2 w邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

# l" @+ E. n  E9 W! r* ZNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
) ?2 \1 P1 R8 }" B( Y) Vis just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
5 M1 [( _: T3 q( h0 J5 A) j- lshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
- }! T/ g! k- G) w: ?& yas if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
# \: N) b/ v0 T: o* g% @neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
9 J, Q) [1 r, M* V) \7 O" o! yas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
5 e4 |0 t' T6 his so vigorous as to be the old trees
0 r% O# U- R8 g/ F7 f8 \' B- uinterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
! M7 {* \% c7 R7 ^- SShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
: I# x( t% c: L3 Bfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
$ {- Q5 @6 }. q' D' r0 fagain and again.

Justing

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8 X% ~$ j( A' ?3 f4 Z" Q2 ~# i, x土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
6 j0 w2 F' n" O4 a7 w; [! e. jJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

. _8 K) [2 p$ g7 p# [从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
+ W7 J! O0 z! p: {: N: L6 n+ v$ h4 jHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
1 b" f& I. L. V- Sis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


; U* N& P- a8 c  y真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。