我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
9 ^* Y# n# w& b, r7 r是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
; _) R- [0 k, v% D一住三十多年

6 r# S' @6 M3 w- j9 c7 y* Q邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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1 h2 J7 T) J5 h2 c! m3 h6 j头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
8 u5 z- N! e$ M, ]  O2 z, ]邻居的字
6 }2 t" f$ w% q则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
: F, e* d" M3 S8 \4 R其笛声也悠扬
2 t2 F# A- D! @7 s0 k3 [) ^那是从隔壁传来的
; M4 L. b8 b) e* q* ?唯一的声响
" ]4 D  r) y7 |) B/ \! S# ]+ {) E那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
& h2 i" z" M6 d, ?my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
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tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
" g# ^. ?; H7 w  _magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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" f: H/ H+ p7 j8 j5 {She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
/ x( z% j5 e7 H* c0 uas if she did not know what years mean.
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; e7 T  a( T$ b8 y6 h2 w1 x7 S  S: ^With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
; l8 d/ M1 i6 wneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
! e- D1 l, ~  ]. L) t4 `* uas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
: [: X# _3 b7 S, JNeighbour's handwriting
' P) U. w. M% e+ Z5 N" ^9 gis so vigorous as to be the old trees
7 w9 o4 I& o9 ?interwined by dry vines.
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9 g( Y2 a7 H2 A$ S+ |. ?Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
% F8 W( K! k9 l- N/ iShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
* A5 d  p( l5 DWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
/ j# f$ R5 e  Ithat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
4 S8 d. Q9 i# _5 QJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
* p9 G5 x7 `; o' Q$ Z+ vHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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Justing

6# Justing
3 U8 b8 W. a  U! [8 [0 \2 g真的是太像朱镕基了！
/ P# R; \/ t) L! ahm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。