我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
6 E  q) i3 U, ^" ~1 T是我们小区  几十户
: j, e: D8 n4 X唯一的元老
一住三十多年

# w9 @# M+ r9 {6 p2 u( m9 c邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
9 m% Q) S: v6 h  s) V+ R' ^似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
6 t! @! {5 O, A! n邻居气宇轩昂
. Z0 R( i; t4 E0 S如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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' m+ T: ^, E$ Q; r; H. [- {# j邻居酷喜中国文化
0 Q% u: @4 ]0 K, }- C说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
# l/ n8 F6 f! {唯一的声响
9 d0 o) ]  v8 B1 K: N那不知名的曲调
0 @+ [/ n' W( ]& o反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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3 I9 W, v) T* [: R+ _; u% a英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
' [4 t4 j8 |/ X7 Ptens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
) _$ v$ b1 {6 o# X1 \6 z# iShe has white hairs and red faces.
: t7 C5 |" A" aHer light-footed movement
" Z& F8 q* z! D$ S) E! B, y8 x# r$ mis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
5 q( \6 m# I( R# b" g) j8 v8 was if she did not know what years mean.

7 W9 ?: U9 g$ j2 k  SWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
4 v5 N5 Z( s  \5 K6 {# his so vigorous as to be the old trees
2 H* m" J; F4 B; j+ Z2 tinterwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
7 h9 c% L. e7 m- S, O: L" \. f" WWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
8 j- w0 _5 O- ^& Qthat is the sole sound going into my ears
- g% w$ u" j. Nfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
" q: p7 o3 T$ e' s) A2 ^the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

* V, U% E1 R. e. p8 \, k) @从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
' }9 E6 p4 G3 \' p8 r& _5 LHer light-footed movement
0 n' W; D7 V3 t& E- ~% l1 Ais just like a flying swallow.
' p$ W$ i2 V6 O( b  m修改为：
- d2 O' p- I. `* h, ^  Y1 C2 o6 m8 }5 mHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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! @* ]0 c5 R# p真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

3 P/ b* G- B9 ?! v2 ]我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。