我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
  i% |! x6 I: R7 e9 E' \" D是我们小区  几十户
) b$ }+ s' j' n7 }唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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3 K7 {0 X( l. `邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
* j4 Y/ Q" R' X! B' U/ k' _6 B白发红颜  不见皱纹
' z3 G* x1 k3 }; [  V% ?3 c开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

! p( m0 J: B, ~4 n* Z& ~! ~头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
6 O( z& H0 T1 N( C1 |则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
& W  V9 X8 C' a: a! O1 E9 H其笛声也悠扬
: H' t7 G( h& O8 M) E% ?7 h- I那是从隔壁传来的
+ q0 }1 X% `5 ]" ~  H唯一的声响
3 Q% S8 C5 g& A$ E& g7 T& a% l+ x那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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9 [* [. v, a& H! T, V6 W. B& d* d英文版，欢迎指正：
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6 \' a" V- k7 Z% u8 _* KLiving here for more than thirty years,
  R; W* s( d# ^4 }, cmy prestigous neighbour
$ M" `- w0 {7 @* gis the only first owner of the unit properties
$ E" H* B* r! n- M; kin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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) ~- g- ?% C2 ]/ k) x& R" DNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
5 W% V. Z& j7 R' b/ V3 \1 Hmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
9 y6 q$ g: j& ^; |+ x7 gHer light-footed movement
. y( A0 v4 l4 Lis just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
9 e& C7 c& A* T9 x) e& Z! }she digs her back yard
" f8 l0 G1 c% b- Dto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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# R, E8 z/ h5 M/ t4 |With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
/ z' Z! C# h' f. N' @, Pneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
0 s  L0 L0 s, b" ?3 J2 N& R+ u( h' Xas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
- M6 S6 t! V; H0 N' jNeighbour's handwriting
, f1 T% {% V% o$ |is so vigorous as to be the old trees
6 |* J. ~( I" E$ T) A. g4 ?: zinterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
( V. I+ h+ X8 d8 G8 h& M0 pWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
( l2 I- g5 A. O  K$ Z- A另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
0 G  v6 s" Z# p6 d1 ~4 k% Eis just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
! O9 `# n, r- T/ z" a0 bis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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: }3 [! S3 Z: l) T; y真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。