我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
7 g$ @. z/ x2 R# E7 ?. B5 @$ u5 ?5 s3 Z是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
' r4 y" E. L5 A0 ^. {6 h9 u3 R$ E0 L一住三十多年
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" s1 [2 Z' y& x, s/ A邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
# s! W+ K& d/ ]$ j1 {: L. V8 _; Q( C开车铲雪  挖土栽花
4 m0 j# I) c$ A. |! G# ]; ^似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
  |* f1 z2 J9 X+ z  O, o) \# [如同女面朱熔基
; X; i/ g5 Z, I, A邻居的字
) |4 e2 R! {- G9 ]" i! ^则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
' n6 S2 N+ S# e% d1 t说她属土龙
: F. t4 r& f$ b0 v' L* d其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
4 ^7 Y: ?) Y0 Y! V1 f6 Wmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
2 ^6 ]9 A# E9 W7 Vin our community ---
9 \! j1 m" a; N5 d/ {* Btens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
+ y1 _* `  j# Zmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
" ^, h* ?8 }" X; o  K) HShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
5 E$ C# c0 @" K+ R9 t5 B3 Jas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
8 Q7 S; [2 A" B" w2 ]7 C9 j$ jNeighbour's handwriting
5 b8 u$ ^9 M' v; ~is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
2 u: h' Y2 r) t0 l" P( V8 Zthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
% T2 J; f7 A% \3 z) \/ n4 oHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
. r5 b; n5 ?& K2 Q# V, f修改为：
! U& D# U* ]& N- zHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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3 ~2 }5 j. @9 z! N, \真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
5 u8 \2 n; z" i: _真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

$ h! ]" i( A/ G/ K0 M/ D我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。