我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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5 w9 v/ d+ G. T) r8 O我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

/ R# N6 N1 ~; E邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
( @# Z" ]. _- |5 z" `白发红颜  不见皱纹
, z  k4 l0 t, @; G6 T! D! h开车铲雪  挖土栽花
9 f8 S, t+ f* h& F7 x7 F4 ]- \! G似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
+ ~2 K2 D+ c( M3 A3 n" V邻居气宇轩昂
: y! J& I, t$ G  n3 h5 `0 D# p如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
- ^* _5 [& U5 K2 A9 w则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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- J7 b8 J% `: z" E1 W( z邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
; t% D: a+ k4 M, j8 l  X9 c3 w) o唯一的声响
) ]- E1 x7 v2 G8 @, a6 D那不知名的曲调
' P( ]/ x- D4 e反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
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, H6 W/ z) V: ~! PLiving here for more than thirty years,
6 E7 x! \- D8 e' ~my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
0 d) s' p. J  ]' [tens of townhouse condos.
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/ t% j/ G' C# I; aNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
& Z- l7 J" Y# i6 [She has white hairs and red faces.
6 G, P- |! H1 X. M, aHer light-footed movement
/ X: k& a; X5 }7 p, D9 [# s: M: Tis just like a flying swallow.
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' y5 C6 Y! m- {6 n% z) q0 v' ?She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
# y0 k1 t. Z, n! Q5 U' p. D- G# oto plant flowers ---
# B5 q  q' _& U$ m4 }6 Ras if she did not know what years mean.
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) U. y0 m% U% ^& AWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
" m! S9 q7 @1 gneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
9 S& S" _4 G5 @) j; e! u6 pthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
! D- E/ h0 b( ~4 t+ kthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

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( B* x( V  J- x土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
0 L0 i1 g6 m, W, @另外，翻译改动一处：
8 C$ g$ @3 f) T- iHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
9 k% j" S% G1 U, N4 \修改为：
Her light-footed movement
# E, q  U' r. zis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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Justing

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/ u0 w5 K: m6 Q- m& _0 Z; H  m真的是太像朱镕基了！
- u3 J: T  ?# Q/ ]. y* Thm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。