我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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# W6 H" y; U& ~, W我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
0 `# x: k! O1 ?; D# @一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
) U$ z* e) y* L0 ?5 H白发红颜  不见皱纹
! B' E4 l7 `3 @. v  G! z6 t开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
+ P6 O4 s5 ^0 Q& [1 f邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
. t4 W. R% Y! a! @% @则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

3 C- p9 ^; }, }. `9 S邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
) B/ I, w6 K8 B% J; ^其笛声也悠扬
) B3 N% z8 z0 Q那是从隔壁传来的
& N) h* B9 x0 b+ }唯一的声响
5 Z7 c% E# ^, J# [  R那不知名的曲调
9 E- V) X& y+ n* }反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

/ U# D& s$ n8 ^, x) u: Q英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
' V% j% b+ d" k  d& }. e3 emy prestigous neighbour
: e( V9 `. n6 g. a; P/ l5 kis the only first owner of the unit properties
, s1 v! [, Y" ^" g: B; ]in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

; q5 B$ T7 _1 T6 D! Y9 u7 RNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
/ T3 e3 n; d6 s1 {1 s  A4 G( dmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
0 Q* n" `* P. q& |She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
7 O! }) U0 L! v" qis just like a flying swallow.

, b" F! L( U9 W6 G8 ^* s7 u# VShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
  g' H) p& _& e& jshe digs her back yard
0 b2 E/ N1 ]# M+ Hto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
. M; `6 t+ f. ^2 d' k! rneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
  D7 u, T: _/ B2 R/ x: SNeighbour's handwriting
0 p6 ]+ |  e/ k1 dis so vigorous as to be the old trees
9 Y5 ]% b. O' U  {7 J1 ~  jinterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
1 _$ e) H. S; w% r1 OShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
: G" i+ B1 H5 e# ]; Jfrom the next side of my wall;
$ m8 M6 H& h) G* Q: y  T+ Athe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
& S: m6 h0 ?' \again and again.

Justing

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$ |  S3 {; q7 D( Z' V$ U- s) @土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
7 N& g9 E$ i$ D5 Q% CJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
3 J( H% Q# o' D另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
3 E" |4 T" Y7 _is just like a flying swallow.
, {6 P3 J. [# c* U0 _修改为：
/ _4 k% q  {/ S* w" D$ w, k- FHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
! E- W8 F+ Z& w  Q5 q* Zhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。