我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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9 e2 T' c3 c; o5 @. Q9 L/ J我尊贵的邻居
8 S, F8 x7 N. D  k* U( V是我们小区  几十户
# h: z4 ?3 n$ D! T: ]& m! U- t9 \唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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  U8 l) V- ~& C# q* @1 `邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
+ B/ D" v9 H9 R% l邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
/ ]& A1 H3 l* e邻居的字
5 A" o9 t4 x8 v* ^则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
( T* L  R" ?+ i5 }2 H4 R3 v说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
( q) Z0 ^+ _, y+ k那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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1 h5 K/ T, b$ X英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
5 ]. w1 `8 g% T. G! R' Bmy prestigous neighbour
6 o# R1 F3 p4 g, [% Tis the only first owner of the unit properties
' z  _% ?$ S# ?. |2 Yin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
" a( \- }3 M/ Y: p  x& w0 K  pHer light-footed movement
( X6 c5 g; Z6 g+ \# G. Zis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
; q4 n4 {7 \) y8 ^before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
2 I4 ~* s+ F, }& @& \to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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6 U: z: s5 w2 t2 X" [/ xWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
3 \( d4 X' d) l8 k0 y2 k& Uas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
$ e. ^3 b9 _+ tis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

3 q3 O1 l- m) b+ vNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
4 _3 l+ Y2 B$ vthat is the sole sound going into my ears
. H# \/ N- [' Xfrom the next side of my wall;
7 I3 x% @7 ^5 c5 y# j  F: a2 nthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
! a" ~$ m  a" o; s; R6 q: Vagain and again.

Justing

; v7 O3 M& I2 B8 Y1 G) z土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
/ T5 A& l' O. G) _另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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6 y! _. s( K, tHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
; h" w  l- H. X" e& h真的是太像朱镕基了！
$ Y* m3 E- x) b- khm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。