我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
% l$ b- ?; g  j( P是我们小区  几十户
5 \2 P/ ~2 q0 b唯一的元老
; A" Z5 ^4 q( E6 b' _一住三十多年

3 O  i6 |) v0 g% S邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
: m$ X# L4 V* B+ f* E$ D% e3 ?白发红颜  不见皱纹
7 i7 ]) s1 r7 |9 [3 k4 m开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
3 ^. r) [6 D/ [6 {* |' |, m! G7 \0 Q邻居气宇轩昂
1 m0 y  r- C3 f5 o如同女面朱熔基
, d+ y. ?* y1 {  c" C3 O) m) t9 v邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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* W  o6 d  x: g邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
: W6 X3 j+ ~* i2 [  A3 t+ N! b那是从隔壁传来的
1 r7 T! }& T; d& X, G& K: o8 B唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
7 ?6 f7 C/ Y0 `9 T8 i  P6 \+ nis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
* Q. i  C* K8 ]6 \& r% T. Itens of townhouse condos.

2 v. h6 c# E% A- ]5 FNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
9 ~1 n9 ]) U3 w5 K* Ymagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
4 Y# V  B' H- ~5 g* Y  eShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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4 F6 v/ }: ]. T& F& tShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
2 \4 D. U4 H8 U  Ishe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

" n. V1 C! T3 }1 t. f4 wWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
2 k' Y) S$ d* mneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
* d0 p1 c$ r1 [* h$ K3 S# y/ das if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
% K. _# V; S# g* ?) {is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

1 `  S) }3 X" Q* S% {, oNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
9 C4 Z# w) K, C& u2 _; S( LWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
/ \$ X- i7 ?' T8 D+ J4 m1 }9 othat is the sole sound going into my ears
% j7 N8 P" B0 l  o  ^0 j3 nfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
# {- c+ L6 j0 {# l0 C7 K1 Lthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

3 H; J9 F* y( x2 C8 b0 V土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

9 z1 H, }3 K5 e% |从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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3 N8 Z, K& u# `: M# QHer light-footed movement
  W  u9 C+ O- U4 Y( c1 j0 b1 }  fis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


6 ]8 b% j5 a9 F, e' ^真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
* j/ _; v- D- M" s/ f" qhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。