我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川

8 V7 S% H8 Q  _0 r2 s- Y/ |我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
4 W8 e! m. i: l% l% Q# y4 i一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
. [$ t) t& e  m8 c7 E$ o白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
" R* O* y8 p  Y! m; O8 I似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
8 S, `1 _7 a  `7 g- E/ D& `! L邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
# Z! y1 a8 o( M) T& k则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
+ d" R: m4 ]/ L9 T/ ?( V3 F唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
1 X. [4 _2 d2 r4 y. i" z反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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9 a, I% d  u0 _1 ILiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
/ {6 t  E$ C7 ?& ~" L! B% E2 C- u6 yis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
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/ |0 w3 T) a3 @. vNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
6 T* q" T6 M+ E4 Q1 EShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
4 Q# y# N+ Z  a: e$ O" iis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
9 g& d! G: Z: Gbefore driving her own car;
+ z$ f6 d" h5 C1 D" t5 f0 t6 Xshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
* B& `8 v. }- y2 d" |neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
; U) @+ ?" |9 K$ c) l3 m8 Las if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
9 J& V* Q- ~: y- b: BNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
. D3 @6 H$ O( ]# l0 v! }She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
9 a1 L4 s/ j. y' q; b- O/ `that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
* T7 n) ]4 ]; k$ T# zthe unknown tune is extolling
7 ?, ?% \9 a2 F  s' Ethe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
3 W! f/ c5 r6 x& {, X$ L7 e1 tagain and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

- F& X6 _& P9 S/ j; G从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
/ k' s3 n; a' D; a另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
5 P( Z* M; D$ B5 Z1 kHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

! x3 F0 w# Y1 z3 u6 A' b6 }我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。