我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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, x) C& t4 l) C/ `  Z0 p我尊贵的邻居
! p  U$ e' a9 u6 w1 W是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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6 f1 I3 {  s; c9 c, t& c4 G. D邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
# d4 D" t" }5 }0 e5 l. X! t白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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' q4 b' S' ~& E( Z头顶英国文学硕士的光环
) w) G/ n4 I8 V" A$ J) @邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
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7 Y; C- K8 \8 I( {6 @, w邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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# s3 G2 |1 ^9 C- W4 F. y英文版，欢迎指正：

: I3 J6 a% Q/ C4 H9 H# A( }5 _' ?Living here for more than thirty years,
) `0 w( l; Q6 x  n/ Z, S+ v* Pmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
  O0 |7 d/ \$ T+ J, d6 p) Z+ KShe has white hairs and red faces.
8 d# C7 A- N4 B0 c2 \1 D! w: s+ THer light-footed movement
  _5 O$ @! ?; U2 }1 ~is just like a flying swallow.
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4 K" d) N; ]% v) R9 VShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
& x. W- p  H/ c) Pneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
' d7 |* _1 E. C" {2 E7 u$ E9 a  R9 G% zthat is the sole sound going into my ears
7 E( M2 }3 m) H! |2 [0 `from the next side of my wall;
- I. F& D2 F$ X8 C4 U8 D" z! Pthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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# c: P3 q% M" ?* s7 t土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
1 x% D; d2 q/ n) ?9 p& Z另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
: Q" a; C1 }% B6 F- p) _5 K. I修改为：
Her light-footed movement
- L' w3 J" U5 w: j  }is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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* |4 w2 V3 G' v0 g" @- b* f真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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8 _& [3 ~/ k, s' F0 K真的是太像朱镕基了！
. q. `; X# K$ q# A6 G1 Mhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。