我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

- K. D9 _' j8 w4 O% i  _我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
* _, F  B7 @+ P% f唯一的元老
一住三十多年

! t! P* c& B. s/ t$ C' v邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
! d2 A9 l- o6 ^2 o0 R8 T& ]  Z白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
1 u2 x1 P6 K8 q5 v6 Z; J2 ^5 v3 z似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
* z- b1 x) o* G* A如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

4 j) {6 k( z. }2 ~邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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7 \9 R! o3 o5 k英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
* _# ?  ?- ?2 ~' c8 ?& D% Y! Otens of townhouse condos.
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4 z3 f9 g% R* O. T5 }5 t( n: ~Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
' f& M6 p: {, n- q8 p) e0 y4 Kmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
! n( n* G, H% f1 f. G* BShe has white hairs and red faces.
/ z8 K7 x9 y: n; A! t' j3 ^1 CHer light-footed movement
( V( k) x5 `' r1 h$ C* Ais just like a flying swallow.

' @0 f  c% l: n* OShe shovels the snow on her door lane
- b' S) V& D2 G+ E- u( \1 Tbefore driving her own car;
8 W. o6 l' B( i! `# t" S1 Y+ }" e% Oshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
. C: ^& i+ T9 u% Y' \neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
1 y$ J1 _$ n) D8 Z: I, l* U( ONeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
+ A+ b! k& `# l* e: O; i2 F4 binterwined by dry vines.

5 q  n. b+ V& }2 z4 a  C* Z9 ]Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
" ]. z+ p9 |2 x; H) v+ UWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
8 b) x* N9 m% @+ zthat is the sole sound going into my ears
# V! ]; G, }7 Hfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
; G! b, F2 x7 M7 k+ u$ d2 TJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
2 {6 G/ Z1 E1 J+ y/ q  His just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
+ M4 n! G4 b$ V7 [7 ^1 lHer light-footed movement
1 J( w5 p: N5 i* `0 `  h$ Y( mis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


( h2 k0 v: o9 a& I; _) r) o真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
+ F7 J3 a0 k, D- G6 [, `1 shm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

5 B% v  X5 `' z% B我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。