我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
" V, }! x, {! @: m/ {/ f; L3 T是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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( ], L1 n2 _, ?3 U邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
+ Y- ?  d( K9 i: K白发红颜  不见皱纹
2 z% @( m5 O) d/ z/ l6 x$ D, H开车铲雪  挖土栽花
( e) T  x$ F+ m; `) ]* ?似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
  G  q* O  C' [& _+ ~7 U1 ~邻居的字
* t5 h2 a- u" N' e' v则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
) _! C+ C4 ?" [. `' F) Q: p% E其笛声也悠扬
3 ], k7 n  h8 h* W那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
" ?7 X- v! v* W1 a  l反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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2 g& L/ x9 J+ i  H* z* C( U英文版，欢迎指正：

+ {3 z. @% H- A& S' V" F0 yLiving here for more than thirty years,
% Y; h8 O  e8 r$ f, ~" |my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
8 p+ R6 w3 W7 G  Ptens of townhouse condos.

: u; m! Q) E/ p/ v& o9 RNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
  G8 Q* b4 o" Q6 N9 \8 s( v9 wmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
' F6 c4 k& Y5 O  x8 t+ SHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
* Y( J. u% x, F1 U$ H* sbefore driving her own car;
- h+ S8 v! l# R) [she digs her back yard
* @9 N7 r! h: z: |& v3 u( qto plant flowers ---
& |7 |4 m8 y# d5 e! Eas if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
9 |) F/ L- {5 y/ f* das if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
8 M. ^8 z: R4 t5 l0 E8 N! UNeighbour's handwriting
1 s% k) X& P! C9 |2 b7 l6 }is so vigorous as to be the old trees
2 ]2 L/ W5 z* Q% h* S( finterwined by dry vines.

4 u* X) [5 Q, k  E( PNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
; ?$ s- Q7 [2 ^8 o. f$ cShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
8 |+ K% @3 W( [/ _8 sWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
. m8 Q0 v- {7 \8 F  K$ zthat is the sole sound going into my ears
) B$ L) @) @/ ]& Zfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

6 x6 p7 g6 b8 T4 B' S/ w6 J, O) Y; l0 N土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
9 S+ J' K' P% c/ u) X8 G% O% d, O. P3 xJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

, K8 s: ]* M5 V从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
+ N. O2 o" B0 n0 O! f3 D另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
& m' s5 ?, D3 Uis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
, `* X* U7 g3 A( G# }0 Mis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
# Z8 ]% h$ |, b( j) Y! s真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

- S9 G* n1 B$ q3 M我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。