我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
( K7 a/ j) g& h1 L" `是我们小区  几十户
4 ~- n! }9 k* w; S# T/ Q唯一的元老
1 ]# y1 `8 y+ I9 b# o一住三十多年
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& r6 h2 J1 G: ^& U邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
- q6 N; n- s" M+ [6 F4 t7 D& Z白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

( ^$ W, S. E6 K  X头顶英国文学硕士的光环
9 N: g  m# u/ ~$ g邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
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则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
) ^1 m+ Z  A% G- R4 G2 T0 g说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
2 r2 \# C& F. f/ q' z. |那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
7 p8 ^( a1 r/ W  [my prestigous neighbour
. ~' f" F/ J& Uis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
, e7 l' a3 ~! Q3 h, x; }. btens of townhouse condos.
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; x$ [, L) p- W) ~2 QNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
/ Y2 w% z1 R' @Her light-footed movement
6 P+ S/ K1 X* z8 u1 D% f( \4 `is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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' a5 P' [7 E2 c  BWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
, A; s* k) U6 sneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
7 V  ~3 l: M8 X$ W+ eNeighbour's handwriting
$ _, R) T2 j/ Ois so vigorous as to be the old trees
) x4 W) k0 B6 d( ?interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
+ F6 b" G  J  v  X# U5 v, L( d8 zShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
3 b0 @! D$ w9 T( B- qthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

; Z$ m2 ]; V( P1 z- w* _' C土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
0 l. b9 W: Y% a8 pJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
/ j4 J( j" j1 w+ {2 G: n, r  ]另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
3 ~) b3 E# {  ]3 Z. d1 U修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

& Z: T- B( L2 C4 c' h4 G  P我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。