我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
0 }& n5 A1 h8 R! g5 k  \3 T* d一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
7 k, }1 i7 f) r+ Q# j$ ^4 Y1 N白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
2 |) h! ~: q/ `/ e# z( O1 ]似不识  岁月为何物

9 q  ?( A- N- e3 u+ D9 \头顶英国文学硕士的光环
3 k  @9 M  K$ a$ @9 K邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
0 d8 b! }+ a) `/ c6 d1 q& x+ x0 ~7 `其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
+ U& a: B& p/ F/ Y唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

- V' W3 a( {. u* x1 M" l9 DLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
# @3 }; @/ `  K1 L( ^/ B" qin our community ---
0 s+ a5 N) I$ d  Ytens of townhouse condos.

+ @* x4 g7 Q- _5 e! ?7 c/ `Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
4 d5 s% u2 i1 fmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
7 ^1 f! ^" C' }$ a2 Q  UShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
( R5 H& T" n, B* e2 j4 D# Z# ^# r) Uis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
8 g. _0 ~# @) K: P( Y& Xbefore driving her own car;
# `* }6 v% w7 o# R5 s4 ?2 fshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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6 o" }) F2 E' }; c( ]' o8 @With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
+ @. ~, B* ~+ c6 e( ^neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
! |- M" M6 ?! U, b: Z! zas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
+ Z' w" `8 b1 aNeighbour's handwriting
7 W% J/ {$ U6 L8 B( ]is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
  P3 M) v+ }; Y+ n% w1 B4 m1 w& DShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
+ M6 n, {# p" F; zWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
' X# e) m1 H! V" u6 |$ e! }the unknown tune is extolling
& Y! D! I% K4 othe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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. S% l: V, F* m* [: F土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
3 _$ V. }  ^, B5 G: [! _8 EJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
8 |! f6 d3 ^, jHer light-footed movement
+ g+ y' J/ V7 V- u. D7 wis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
0 k) w% x6 T3 u- l: d# s7 nis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

; L' B, M$ m# M' O我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。