我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
) Z! P: E) d4 B( j: O3 a: y$ T* e是我们小区  几十户
) n8 l* v- v- ^. w9 S, l唯一的元老
一住三十多年

8 f* Z: P- u$ d& o& i邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
1 b( H$ e3 O7 n" z' r开车铲雪  挖土栽花
4 q. a* n6 n/ ?5 Y似不识  岁月为何物
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% m, {# C  y5 f, F4 M7 u  g  {" Q2 _头顶英国文学硕士的光环
% u9 b5 z: F- b4 S, k- q邻居气宇轩昂
0 r, ^  f# ~( b( Z如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
. w& T- h' o! W* {; h) U, e9 Q则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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; R. m( ]+ d4 k# P/ p) g# S  s邻居酷喜中国文化
2 g9 D! }; j' Q3 q6 M! F6 ~" Z4 }说她属土龙
8 k3 W/ z9 d& w; l2 j" c- f其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
7 y: e: w! A' A5 l* R2 k那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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Living here for more than thirty years,
* J/ W$ d8 v$ G& a# Umy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
3 J) Q! n& v: P8 t8 \. stens of townhouse condos.

: c9 N; I, s/ ?' s) `- k; d! qNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
( c5 `+ D. H0 @1 mmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
" d% G5 E: C1 Z# s/ Z' p2 s# THer light-footed movement
, ^2 g3 ^8 T$ \+ w: b3 t# dis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
6 R2 Q" V: i. ]$ I6 J7 S; g, d) Jbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
" e+ v) K% \" zto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

8 Z$ h  W+ A7 m: R& CWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
: _5 K& n1 K: c. R2 e) `0 sneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
* N$ F5 X2 p& e2 I5 uas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
* u0 C9 L+ w! vWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
' g/ }+ _9 e  o# Afrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
. H# u8 y( p" Z- G  Iagain and again.

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& i2 L' ?% Y. A% i& S& m2 d4 s  J土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

1 J- U5 X0 P* p. M从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
2 _* B) |, Z5 Z! i2 k# YHer light-footed movement
5 a/ P0 v6 ]- g. D6 dis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
' y. @8 ]$ r- @Her light-footed movement
6 k& o2 L. L6 v. b" {1 lis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。