我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
6 h: m0 c: G; f唯一的元老
* f* u$ E. S' \" }3 x* ~一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
0 k; J  \* b  ]/ X白发红颜  不见皱纹
, M2 B4 Q1 A# @开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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7 P/ M7 `6 @& P/ g$ X' @头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
0 l- Q4 I4 ~! I- K则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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0 N* M" ?6 X. L. `, D, {邻居酷喜中国文化
  e. V9 M. b( V) e: ~, f说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
. s4 P+ E6 h' _/ [/ R那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：

+ X. r9 u( a( ?' PLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
+ R( g# X1 H/ h: V7 U: Pis the only first owner of the unit properties
. _+ Q  v6 d- `) |in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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1 f% J! w/ K# A5 {' B1 H. \Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
4 k0 m3 o* h6 Bmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
! z# [) B% L' W  T. p) cShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
. x4 Z6 [5 ~3 G; Z3 R$ Jis just like a flying swallow.
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1 ?; O& `4 N5 M) X" AShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
7 I8 H3 A  D- B+ j# X; jshe digs her back yard
: ~  b9 N/ T9 Y5 Fto plant flowers ---
1 o3 a% B; H7 ]! @/ i8 J# j- Sas if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
, N, h# O% h" u7 aNeighbour's handwriting
. y/ w* f5 V0 s. v0 \1 C# tis so vigorous as to be the old trees
. V+ {2 z5 [; s4 [5 Xinterwined by dry vines.
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  w7 J& f' m1 O! b" ]* hNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
6 c6 l$ T) t$ I# }1 y# UWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
0 Q3 |+ {' p0 j9 [. fthat is the sole sound going into my ears
6 c0 i* M5 ^1 H% H/ x& Zfrom the next side of my wall;
3 w" {4 ^1 H9 O% j) i; B; ^! _the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
: B, b: {5 \7 H$ H6 G/ L6 a" x9 c: \again and again.

Justing

& w( c; b! U% m9 \1 h土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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/ x8 y8 i8 Q+ n, j  s5 f2 Q4 e; q真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

: Y) _: ]  F; p+ A* l$ n  ^/ {% E, _我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。