我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川
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4 h# `# L6 K' R7 N4 s+ d& i! T  u+ n我尊贵的邻居
8 T% O) p2 ~# R0 _1 @8 W. A8 H是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

: R+ r' L! g; n- N$ u) k邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
) v+ v, }$ q: u: d5 N白发红颜  不见皱纹
% p8 |0 R% N- f/ `$ a( {! P8 b开车铲雪  挖土栽花
6 i5 d$ _4 T9 ?! ~7 f/ J& G& E2 z似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
/ y7 T- j- X1 ~8 L6 m邻居气宇轩昂
6 {- n0 ~/ V7 a5 o如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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8 M& r+ a1 T$ p5 u: t' v5 ~" h邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
0 h/ o. v1 V' `: l5 M7 k6 g那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

8 S. Q/ s4 u" uLiving here for more than thirty years,
) d+ ?* v2 _7 X  D. I5 }  Pmy prestigous neighbour
7 b" i% t- Z- cis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
) ~4 h) U! p, Q0 t8 amagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
' t  B  v1 [5 O" X# u6 nHer light-footed movement
. s4 m1 ]; u# _$ Q, Zis just like a flying swallow.
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; i7 K/ R- d5 ?$ z& w! XShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
. w1 G5 ^5 T+ N2 y/ F; u1 ashe digs her back yard
! `& D  ^( f( A2 }5 y, D) M* p0 c' }to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
$ r9 X& M/ _7 j% N! t3 tneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
% ]! g; A' F  ]4 Vas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
3 {4 C! p2 _* b6 O/ I$ |. f% N! @interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
( v9 E8 d" q9 n  |" F7 T1 L: Y  oWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
7 f' e5 W. u5 B8 t7 X% ythe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

3 o2 g' g0 ^* L% ~3 \  ^. k土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

. I$ |# V+ y6 R从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
8 E  ]& O* D, m# f$ Q; z另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
& X1 X" ^5 I6 j- U5 W  ]- j9 iHer light-footed movement
: b/ n* ]3 }- X7 N# M6 fis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
& h4 v) f- `. e8 J; _* K9 I9 Ehm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。