我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
+ c# X6 B* J! ?) a是我们小区  几十户
7 A  R$ L( U6 t& S7 l5 l唯一的元老
2 @" \$ x" B4 V. B2 }% l# \& \一住三十多年
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6 s: A6 d  w4 p+ Q$ e. H邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
5 {3 y# e2 c# ]开车铲雪  挖土栽花
% Q7 S8 W* r8 _似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
! B: i9 L# Z. b$ U+ V; a9 L0 a如同女面朱熔基
! {7 j; \( T" l7 [. `; @9 V邻居的字
7 Q  u5 r$ b# N, O: Q+ X" X则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
4 i" h3 x8 i7 K+ l8 {8 D$ ~0 d) N* @说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
6 d. ~2 l7 p8 X5 U$ N反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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5 a0 e: E( [5 H  G5 I英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
+ a$ @/ q! k5 t4 xmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
8 s5 i3 z3 L- h# P* A! q2 Zin our community ---
; x* g' `7 {  N( d+ k) @  Xtens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
6 {: a) c/ B. p) z) Y+ smagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
4 u' k' p: d/ b) o2 w8 rShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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% ^/ \- Y- v3 A8 HShe shovels the snow on her door lane
& c4 V1 {% Y! Tbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
0 ~! M1 P5 \  \. b! g5 v4 }8 R8 ras if she did not know what years mean.
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+ H& A( @5 f9 [  M2 I- M, TWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
: [- J7 H& S0 Y8 n, G. w8 mNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
, ]  ]: i1 c/ n, E2 s/ B0 V: i# |interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
' ?$ w9 i6 c( gfrom the next side of my wall;
; `# [' {% M, P, ^' O' \1 t) Ythe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
+ ?5 l( S+ ]- AJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

7 R' X4 I# g  E1 r7 b% Y$ W0 Z. ?# D从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
) P0 x* ?# ^+ ]1 BHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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4 Q( J. {1 o7 X( O1 w* C- XHer light-footed movement
, |( ]; \' Z- W) I6 R* E/ }0 I* ois just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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9 y/ z& |) W  V: G真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。