我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
$ I) N& {6 X' e, W2 C! b是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
/ e& v! O8 P6 }白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
8 W* m% {. a# s7 x邻居气宇轩昂
  Y6 X; C9 |- f% f/ B如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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& I8 P& t2 }- F2 h邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
( Q2 P- N0 @5 Z' N4 D& c- `4 [其笛声也悠扬
" Z8 Z7 S1 N% j6 ^4 n, z那是从隔壁传来的
9 f: N7 y0 @# O" A' M唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
4 p) o) n3 Z' |* S# h9 A反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

% Q& N' d( c/ W9 aLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
# a2 I) z' j7 c: Hin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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+ Q! f8 d+ \  M/ ^* R4 ]  g4 INeighbour is more than eighty years old,
4 O8 s3 X: V  C7 w2 P/ Lmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
1 Q& W2 C: v6 j2 i/ c/ N" LHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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" d& k! [4 ?; |She shovels the snow on her door lane
7 i. O2 `, L7 ?' Bbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
+ j* W# z# V9 xas if she did not know what years mean.
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& f& j. W& r) L% S, lWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
/ B( B8 b1 b: [neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
% G7 a( N, i( b7 q6 d; @( ]is so vigorous as to be the old trees
& b8 J& v' ^# K- finterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
# j, `0 a5 y. C* xfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

/ O6 g% G% S- G! E' B土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

+ ?' Q% d6 {; z5 I8 m; x. q从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
Her light-footed movement
% e" J; F3 ]+ N3 @is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
9 O+ X0 m5 R) [hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。