我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
# {2 r  v% z% U# b& |是我们小区  几十户
8 ]. `6 R% x6 I- Z( Y唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
3 ~3 p5 t, {- j+ T1 V白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
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如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
0 N8 s$ @6 B7 ?8 c$ a则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
$ J) D. T$ O0 P说她属土龙
9 k3 E  T1 D2 c+ O+ t+ H" {1 V其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
1 x# y( e& s3 X! V" U/ c唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
6 D; a6 d. D  ~8 i. U. I& o2 {反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
& _% E5 e2 t9 r( A* b$ Btens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
9 G# R% \- _/ M; Tmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
% E' X9 H2 ]8 X0 tShe has white hairs and red faces.
% h9 L8 s7 z) P9 kHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

1 \/ H! B+ B2 [% n( T! [( M, v4 p9 nShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
% y9 R8 o" U9 N8 Fshe digs her back yard
( o" Y7 W  E: K- X% Q5 B6 \to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
* a; Y2 u) g  |5 Sneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
" Y9 y& N8 I- x. zas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
- x7 T9 A+ M' p) e1 p3 S% X% hinterwined by dry vines.
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" _# d% o9 g( V' _Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
2 J! i$ H' A& c7 CShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
' D- \0 |4 d& b3 ?  WWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
6 r4 E' `, \+ G4 }# {that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
5 k3 U  q/ [8 W5 n8 Uagain and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
6 F$ E9 J( l8 J- Y9 {Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
% H, l1 Q) d. {; y9 `+ g真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。