我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川
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! b& N& x) G& _. w5 H8 O我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
1 @1 G" W% J2 [! d" ?一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
. R# a9 y4 L1 I4 w- \+ f& ~开车铲雪  挖土栽花
# \. y' Z2 R* k) R/ A% a+ w似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
4 M9 z1 ?- n; S; e/ j  Z; o& y: k邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
* f) y, Y6 m' O则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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" d. ^& E, T4 h& }* U邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
, e7 E( w/ _8 F9 c其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
; B* u% R7 A) z那不知名的曲调
  q4 b0 }9 C; _0 h1 |: [6 `反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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: P6 A" c' \) R7 o英文版，欢迎指正：

9 h1 \3 Q9 {0 K6 k3 |Living here for more than thirty years,
) ~1 {) b7 j, D; c- }my prestigous neighbour
, ^6 W+ s5 \% l" K6 r9 d& n: m, Yis the only first owner of the unit properties
2 R/ ~' t' t+ g$ h) H' \3 B& ]2 Vin our community ---
7 Z( Z$ q  D7 @- j+ S& ctens of townhouse condos.

# b7 j# i& |+ [Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
! \! `5 U4 m+ ]+ \: I. O2 C' ymagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
1 J. H" b5 ?: j# ^5 Q4 t8 i! GHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
3 E9 b/ V) t& ^: b0 hbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
7 D* @% q" n, A* Q$ `/ Rto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
+ J  \, ^/ ]4 h0 C( I' W6 \+ l' }neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
$ g% |; H) ]3 y: F0 Zas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
- V- e/ R1 x5 S9 z/ h& J* w. His so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
+ z0 w. M1 c4 ?3 r' f' O, n4 ^that is the sole sound going into my ears
8 I, Q& {& R8 S9 Ufrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
# V6 a# j0 T3 w: b7 d. V3 D2 B6 ?the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
+ p& S( R7 n3 m* Zagain and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

. P! }& X5 X/ c& T) o; c从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
  e7 s4 b5 A% S6 q2 J& {: z; Tis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
' v1 M  s; a+ V0 I( E& M+ z8 V( V+ vHer light-footed movement
& g5 b: v1 L7 H2 ~6 ^+ _  I: p) sis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
3 P5 P/ M, k4 l6 ~& t  W& Z  \hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。