我尊贵的邻居(11)

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) z$ Y2 M3 U. D- u4 Q我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
+ F3 {0 ]4 T: M+ {7 |唯一的元老
一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
4 G5 C4 M( W) @白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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, \9 W5 C& n5 W) _头顶英国文学硕士的光环
- D3 `( M  c. l邻居气宇轩昂
, S% j0 z% \# w' x如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
( F6 a" W9 l& ~+ v# o则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
: d* y, Q3 {/ B: b3 T/ I0 a说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
- M* N  K7 t% D0 ?: d9 Z唯一的声响
& w7 n* g: g, u% `9 Z, m) c* C那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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& z) _& ]  h' T6 v英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
% _# j$ m4 b1 m" l5 G) w1 ais the only first owner of the unit properties
# l1 C+ C5 e  F8 uin our community ---
+ B$ i. H. m/ ^# Z; }% T3 g) V5 Ttens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
7 i4 t& H7 R3 r0 M" aShe has white hairs and red faces.
- D1 T6 h) \1 G  S1 AHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
- e: M0 b7 z+ p6 v, B! G# ^she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
; z9 N6 q1 l/ e, f. T# ^" bNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
: U$ U4 m, z8 C% |Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
3 A# G) b7 Q! H, Z, T% ^  zthat is the sole sound going into my ears
4 q0 j6 T+ ~3 S; ]# g' U8 |from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
6 T8 b4 K4 E5 H5 i. i  ~again and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
5 m) Y9 c- ?+ U- SHer light-footed movement
) I) Q# }9 E( O! j4 c% Q& Xis just like a flying swallow.
8 d3 i6 k; E. f修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。