我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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$ N; A! F2 F% e" B, b7 ~  K- M, G我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
: D, s, ^) m: r6 M# F9 W( {3 r一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

4 ~0 m3 x% [2 U1 e2 ]头顶英国文学硕士的光环
! s% l$ u$ V6 y6 \( H, w  l0 T$ c; R邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
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则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

5 z( p$ Z* u0 {- U, M" H! P1 S邻居酷喜中国文化
, ~' \8 J9 k5 z5 v  ?6 l, k说她属土龙
, _2 [: a! p; _- d; R$ B* S$ N其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
0 S; D2 z- y+ z  Q& p8 u, l+ `唯一的声响
5 _- L& D6 X5 G6 g( W! A6 I! {2 I那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

+ A! H! I* B8 I' PLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
+ w8 P# s8 ~1 f/ \, Xtens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
/ x9 b* `. g: ?( O8 A, jShe has white hairs and red faces.
6 Z3 L# t( S& {6 `) @; ~; ZHer light-footed movement
; `6 J) \; n( T7 |. h) T. U* gis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
, N9 }9 r1 X/ P- L$ ]she digs her back yard
2 r, y2 p$ K& \; z9 jto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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- d, e9 d0 b( h+ MWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
- E8 V! H$ x3 Zneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
8 D4 ^, F# h9 K! DShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
# U  }1 [( u1 U8 VWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
( e  F) n- M; z) V* Xthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
9 i. b) q  l! f3 f$ Iagain and again.

Justing

8 [7 {! G( g+ ]/ N  h$ \土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
! s: u. X3 A& M/ u另外，翻译改动一处：
9 E5 [$ E( {( q$ G0 p8 m( CHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
3 `! [+ ~: G- n3 |; @% x* s真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

! y& g3 i) n: I6 ], ?我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。