我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
2 E0 [% M9 \" p/ i是我们小区  几十户
  y, d; ~; `% W7 l. |. f) V+ T唯一的元老
; t* o- I. C! B: ~一住三十多年

! q' u5 V) k. N0 F! k邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
! N9 [4 L" ]: `/ ^白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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5 }* `5 U2 a7 y5 D5 L头顶英国文学硕士的光环
. ^# G# w2 e2 V/ Q3 c邻居气宇轩昂
" }0 c7 l6 D1 e9 C6 p& _% q如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

$ C: d- a) p2 G! V3 i邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
8 z( ~/ l8 S6 l0 J1 I% f其笛声也悠扬
: H9 G1 Y* L1 `7 b5 y. Z( @那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
( \! p* u. O# G& ?: fin our community ---
/ H: b5 ]* N9 H9 D/ Ptens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
( R. M! D: ^0 K( U; C# {: n; n& XHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

" l8 m% P( m$ u1 RShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
- J2 c) q  q+ f3 T- ~( nshe digs her back yard
; w& }9 g' ?! ^. }0 ito plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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( [  T/ W# C1 h; X: _" D9 P. AWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
1 D3 h% L) T/ G; @" C. \( G6 `neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
# V5 z( [0 b# _$ xNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
6 Z1 D. N! k1 x9 MShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
3 c5 L1 s3 a3 p7 p; v8 cWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
) R, G+ R- m! O( jthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
/ q# I2 V1 k/ ?& a& v8 y9 g3 o另外，翻译改动一处：
  b2 G" l1 o) h4 hHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
# a! e" a8 t) ]' Ois just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
. L; s1 z4 j3 c$ v1 ?% a# y& ^  Vhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。