我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
. M: g) X, L5 i; d* n' }1 R唯一的元老
3 @( R1 w" }+ @一住三十多年
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+ _# r( P0 T* u- f! ]% S* i6 }邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
3 s( h" h7 G! [1 H/ K. {4 M$ e, o邻居气宇轩昂
% n3 _; w' i( n/ L9 `' |2 ]6 A7 d如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

* F, ^8 W; G7 E$ m- G; e邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
) G' Z7 b# J. u* u2 G% Q唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

; k3 B9 X/ p" v" E英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
/ ~! x! ^4 A6 M* c7 Amy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
7 ~0 P: X9 m) U6 H5 y0 D/ Dtens of townhouse condos.
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& }5 n! }8 ?. A( G4 t  GNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
& B3 g6 q3 H% a, k! @: dShe has white hairs and red faces.
% n1 ?  q6 R0 N0 a5 Z: jHer light-footed movement
' k) s: k8 u0 O9 Z# Kis just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
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she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
: U( G9 N9 C+ h2 Qneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
4 \' S4 q: |- j* {: wNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
% y7 b9 K& v7 Q4 a2 A  k# ~$ K- R9 O. xShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
$ ~1 ?3 B4 ~! m" r) I# Kthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
  }7 c+ T# j6 z4 ~6 V0 H( Wthe unknown tune is extolling
) b7 f: [$ B" T4 Qthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
. s# I' M1 W, }7 H" nagain and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
' e% U- Y+ F" Z- d  N6 S2 l; `5 oJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
- `/ ^9 V2 w* M  i. N9 i# E4 Ais just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


+ [2 I# Q8 o% m1 o- L真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
, [( x. e+ c; N4 W8 T/ P) S真的是太像朱镕基了！
4 Q( J. h5 I6 u5 H# E8 Xhm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。