我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
3 Y  z4 O0 a" J: p! J; P9 P是我们小区  几十户
1 h4 G9 f# v: t) [0 g+ T# r唯一的元老
+ l% G1 p% M0 Y) T! j  V一住三十多年

3 [2 y9 D7 p- K" g" L) Z  R4 S0 |邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
# y# z1 m- w5 Z3 y* V; ^6 H开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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, C( I4 h5 n7 q& [  ~  l, U+ c头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
" f" d, ]5 J+ y! {如同女面朱熔基
8 z' ]2 ]) S( \% g1 T0 z. E7 p邻居的字
$ {( [2 h" `; c3 X8 o: {则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
- C& \$ o3 l2 Z( |那是从隔壁传来的
* `% z# }) I# B) m- ^$ Y5 X唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
3 J8 I* _* z. J2 e( Y% q% Etens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
3 t5 p& {2 w# JShe has white hairs and red faces.
4 d1 Z* o  x2 }: eHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
# {! c, `. Z8 m3 nbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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% d; S$ ~; ]) E+ _With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
- T3 a& b% @+ {/ Gas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
+ Y! {5 J. E' j7 V, YNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
5 F2 S! |, w% [Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
+ ]' a' T& Y. O* A  R: O. h: r. uthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
" l' L1 z0 v  ]1 X6 A/ Uagain and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
1 y3 T& F0 Z  r1 H2 `Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
) O5 f! l- M, K+ P& t! a3 ^2 J$ Ais just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


8 @3 b  W5 t4 n+ \2 K真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。