我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
: v$ L' ?, {: G  G& H+ y是我们小区  几十户
& S. ]2 C2 X5 Z7 p" {2 B$ T  g5 ]唯一的元老
+ R/ \( D2 O% Y6 v- _) f一住三十多年

& H' l' T7 {: A6 Y. k邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
: J; f3 v1 H* H  l- N) ^似不识  岁月为何物

3 o1 t5 b$ ~+ Z头顶英国文学硕士的光环
4 f$ [$ y9 i" z邻居气宇轩昂
) F$ w; T: `6 z& w' c+ c; c3 A如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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3 H: q) K! r* H) x# F( S& r3 C邻居酷喜中国文化
+ v  J& d0 N4 G( W" B说她属土龙
$ `3 W! o( j9 k: j! y2 x. W其笛声也悠扬
- h& ]6 [/ F4 N. I! w2 V3 d, n那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
  m# B- A9 i7 g. F6 f& G那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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5 u. }5 |1 F/ N" W/ i英文版，欢迎指正：
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2 K) c- C. ^1 E% T- ^9 GLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
' p8 r; F% A& R) D- A3 Vin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

, F9 s6 Q2 {6 XNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
4 {& l! `( u* G5 X. Rmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
; u, W0 n; D! b- _0 O$ RShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

0 n4 o1 f7 V7 }! Z0 \She shovels the snow on her door lane
' x* i! P5 n; g/ I; ^# Sbefore driving her own car;
/ K$ }( S$ N: K. V' e! d" Gshe digs her back yard
# E# J. b7 M& d# Mto plant flowers ---
: b+ g; P+ r- T+ j+ l2 Z6 Kas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
) ?+ x, a4 [$ |/ A- ^5 dneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
5 `) W- z& K$ e: o. KNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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( R, q, I6 x- N) R. I$ a6 ?Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
- v1 e. d. O, ?, n6 UShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
8 K4 w2 U4 F8 v! K6 m  hWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
( _4 o: U9 B$ Z  Mthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
9 _3 d( H+ d/ }' Nagain and again.

Justing

% A/ [4 P) p/ d2 t5 b# x# C! U土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
5 I  m- Z: o( ]另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
3 @/ W$ n/ n: z修改为：
Her light-footed movement
1 J3 c8 C% ^* C# t0 i# Qis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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Justing

6# Justing
# b) ]! s- a5 u真的是太像朱镕基了！
7 U, \0 E5 m% E" D% T$ u  }. @% }hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

' w. o& A4 |9 @1 e我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。