我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
  a, i: [* k: v5 n5 q! T3 O- ^白发红颜  不见皱纹
0 X: ~, p0 y6 i) K" c7 \开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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0 f+ n& b/ Y# \0 v$ v) g) r1 q5 k" O头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
2 M8 m) M6 z0 {5 C( ]7 w  d说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
" Y; U! v! e: \0 G那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
" N  r1 u0 T, ~6 U- |6 H反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

( E. ?* w6 Y( |% C9 _% ]英文版，欢迎指正：
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) j, x* h8 D9 }: [Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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# S" i2 c, ?! s' g2 t  {in our community ---
( ^2 z5 g/ v+ }7 B8 _! n3 @tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
+ Q: L9 ]8 b3 `: z# bmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
4 l* m0 T% n3 B$ G1 N0 d0 M. Ubefore driving her own car;
. E7 \: H: r7 \8 S( r% p- nshe digs her back yard
& Q: |! Z) g8 l3 o7 ]2 Vto plant flowers ---
  v& C" V0 R& l" t( n. J5 {as if she did not know what years mean.

0 {& P+ s6 Y$ g' W0 ?2 M. `With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
. \* ~! M3 x  Z5 cneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
9 B' q  w" L/ V& pas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
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interwined by dry vines.
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5 U3 M8 `5 y6 P) }Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
. I/ ]3 q1 g2 D) |$ H9 bShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
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0 G  {. e- @$ t2 m/ i3 K. Nagain and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
3 k/ {8 Q' I( S0 }另外，翻译改动一处：
2 k( D4 D" G+ ~& M, SHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
; ^. ?- H( y' B修改为：
Her light-footed movement
9 R2 D' x1 w6 t+ H7 ois just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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, ^$ A. Y+ N9 h, l* [1 U真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
# U4 W, k. n8 u( \) R! S! N( W真的是太像朱镕基了！
" a% \7 z+ }" G2 Shm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。