我尊贵的邻居(11)

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' s' U  f8 s/ y我尊贵的邻居
5 c8 s/ U& `/ N* o$ t是我们小区  几十户
4 W7 ]9 H- E6 ^5 N' Y6 G: Q' I唯一的元老
9 e+ j- O1 i' J一住三十多年

8 A' d. t5 H% |5 k! S! M邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
& W- C' k/ v. r# x( @( W开车铲雪  挖土栽花
2 g+ x+ }- I: {( h  T6 x似不识  岁月为何物
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2 g5 e; {0 R$ d+ i  U$ {头顶英国文学硕士的光环
. h% }) @; p: {$ N& F邻居气宇轩昂
/ N3 C% H  d2 p8 ^) f如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
1 a% V% q1 B0 h  \' p1 B3 P+ o反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

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这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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- p4 Z5 s! b; v6 _英文版，欢迎指正：
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6 c- h- J! F& a+ Y1 L* S, n0 ]Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
, F* Y3 |4 R6 i/ @% t9 F% Cis the only first owner of the unit properties
2 ]' A. G' m4 ^. ]& G7 M& |in our community ---
  o9 C' G! m3 q  G- ]' v7 Ktens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
3 a1 f' n5 L* J0 o, S6 B1 [; _5 J$ ]is just like a flying swallow.
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: v+ Q) S& I* B  {She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
8 m1 y. T3 m- a: f0 |  D/ Cshe digs her back yard
/ z+ Z3 x7 L1 k/ s7 }to plant flowers ---
. v1 a  c- _% ~3 `( F3 Bas if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
# h! d0 G! l% r( m& `5 V. |3 f3 s9 Qas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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) T  |: y/ c% I" _Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
  f0 G. x+ M) a2 ]She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
1 S! }, n% X+ X  K7 Hthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
1 ]" r) l$ |0 ?( ?( _$ d: o4 hagain and again.

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5 F/ `$ J) |1 X2 X2 W+ u+ E土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
1 ^& c, M4 b5 |+ Q2 I  y. D$ i2 JJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

- A0 n1 Y! t1 r; K& d9 Y从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
' m& b4 U6 \* A) x; G另外，翻译改动一处：
& q0 l" y# N! Y, jHer light-footed movement
5 @& F: a2 h" k3 g: g% N' mis just like a flying swallow.
4 i6 ^6 d7 C$ \# N+ C$ p修改为：
* L: F5 c+ t7 w4 ]Her light-footed movement
, t4 p$ Y/ p. c1 l7 bis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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' `- E: e( F. s真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

4 ^" s% E( X! i5 D4 z7 V' a2 p我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。