我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川
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8 ?+ ]+ l  a7 ^# H$ N2 b) q0 v6 o0 n7 u我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
: J9 x, g4 c0 L! N, E一住三十多年

8 E* r+ j9 W& c邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
6 z5 W0 T' Z. Q- V2 J* `% y, s开车铲雪  挖土栽花
; ^* e. s$ o: R' ?) r4 _6 Z# @* D似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
; T+ t" q# r; ]邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
) i) j' u, ]9 ]) J$ T邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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% }+ p, y: ^8 S0 s/ F8 f4 v& r- @7 }邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
$ U+ B% m+ k; Y& B, Q: C那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
! L; K! d# ~( `0 |- g+ i反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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3 c+ A# }0 n5 ]6 R2 `英文版，欢迎指正：
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8 R6 `9 Q2 G9 F1 ^8 X6 oLiving here for more than thirty years,
. }- O" Z' G& d. O) N- K7 K* ?my prestigous neighbour
1 F. X6 f' P! e2 p1 jis the only first owner of the unit properties
% e4 f! P% y+ F8 [& I2 [, W" W8 E1 I' ?in our community ---
  Z8 w$ B9 Q& z) H4 w8 X" G# k# qtens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
- o8 ?, R4 o+ c4 b4 N. Q1 s4 mHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
# G# f% N, q& g! H8 g5 X3 Kbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
; i! X# s: F5 |8 A) o- I5 J. zto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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/ p9 L  Y: `, dWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
; e& q) G; Y3 y. d- H: {0 y7 }+ @neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
: D# e7 p9 R9 Y6 d/ W5 j/ yis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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' a$ e7 D; O3 B9 LNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
3 z8 N: o/ i. K. v( OShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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7 A5 k4 Z0 S* i9 B土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
( H  F! u2 o% E2 X  h, G) Lis just like a flying swallow.
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" z( v; M0 ?* r5 o: JHer light-footed movement
- T3 Q7 I9 |& k5 @+ P1 d& his just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。