我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
  O  i5 t1 |- R0 \( j! h是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
( F' {- a' ^% w0 V一住三十多年
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) i0 ~! Z2 c2 ]3 I9 T, r$ Y$ A邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

3 ?2 e5 r' D5 S' w6 F; k头顶英国文学硕士的光环
1 W0 X7 \/ G* `0 M3 m" Y/ e邻居气宇轩昂
# D& c$ ~8 {, m3 e如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

0 c" }$ p4 d1 q& ]) H" s邻居酷喜中国文化
1 J# Q) t' N) _, C说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
  W1 k/ m( k+ O2 E4 f1 K) M那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
( Y+ V( j1 l( u, d; K! e' gmy prestigous neighbour
2 C, ?- d( W; C) c" `9 r! u, u$ K* Kis the only first owner of the unit properties
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tens of townhouse condos.
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+ X5 O- L" v8 t4 n2 F# HNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
( ?/ V1 E0 `, p- W- cis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
% }4 W$ `& G# f9 \to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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, d/ L& N; }' E0 @' e( B5 ^3 CWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
# u( O! ?6 N7 }6 oneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
! K  [( o( ?) }/ K0 s( kNeighbour's handwriting
* _" C9 x/ u% }is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

5 `& e2 m6 x7 [( |Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
% T. E. u. |: |4 G" \; N- \' `# s4 UShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
- u+ X; e$ z0 @0 V5 pthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
  ~  r) p* b/ H+ u: p8 T% J9 b, rJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

- @. I  ^4 K) d# Y. e# \& V从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
/ Q- K* @9 H" J另外，翻译改动一处：
# G" ^% d. I& u1 W* FHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
3 o, m8 W$ O8 |) J" {修改为：
. D5 J& [" D( I' v1 Z% d: zHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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" I# D* {/ ~3 T; K- J5 c真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。