我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
% n4 P( M& W/ H6 P  |' C' t是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
+ x: b' \# m) \* X4 Y4 m一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
5 w* l3 n7 P; N& E: F5 y( m白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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, h& H# w- K  u4 e  r; H头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
: E: E! Y' Y. _  R/ ~邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
5 M9 F% E& h( n/ H唯一的声响
/ K2 e* b8 o) U5 U那不知名的曲调
. V0 E# H7 |# d9 Y反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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* h2 z- w/ U+ w# S5 h0 n4 b4 |Living here for more than thirty years,
. v' \) u6 G  t6 _my prestigous neighbour
2 m; i) |8 m7 }# ]) P: {is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
/ s) T: q/ G. v, o- Etens of townhouse condos.

3 c3 L* _+ k* S$ ANeighbour is more than eighty years old,
: k! y& Z  _0 }' Y7 q% W- ~0 z9 xmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
0 ^- K; n/ d+ ~/ F( ?( mHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
6 J4 }6 d/ k6 _& I. a% X: }! Gbefore driving her own car;
4 j4 m. S. j5 pshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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; \' ~( W: f8 X/ w8 \' eWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
. B7 A& G# X7 M" @as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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2 ^* y" u) S* D7 w9 kNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
, J* F9 a) d: J% r' EShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
' o9 a: x* O% S6 e& D1 R7 h' ?7 @Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
$ r9 M/ h9 [8 C1 i1 {2 {from the next side of my wall;
5 R: D& s5 i& ^; l6 V5 ^the unknown tune is extolling
5 u3 }6 B& O) ^+ {2 a" X3 gthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
( n3 V# D* {5 r6 n9 ?. [again and again.

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+ o0 q% V6 f+ p% Q土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
2 c, h/ ?0 @" q另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
% D- G6 N) S& ~4 C, n6 ?/ VHer light-footed movement
! q( k& G8 m, S" I; y& s4 _is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
: q% x5 s# t3 Y, ]- L' l$ B6 shm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

3 |' \) n; P, p4 y我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。