我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川

0 ~! \5 m3 f7 A8 @8 w% H我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
0 X+ C  [: M3 Z1 g4 J3 z" @一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

4 e: b& m% A9 x5 g: k头顶英国文学硕士的光环
4 \) V8 {8 r1 @, `% ^; s7 r0 W邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
! P2 \  L* r: z) e4 B$ ^则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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, j# N4 r9 @# T邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
) S1 F1 c9 Q6 c其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
7 T% h$ j: Q9 y8 B0 C, q: H' d唯一的声响
  i# t1 q" I: _' ]* z+ W那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
( S3 w7 |+ l5 A% D2 o+ o$ x0 o  Dis the only first owner of the unit properties
& G6 L' ]2 p, B9 M! V6 Sin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

3 O8 O# _) l8 C4 S7 P/ B% x; M/ dNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
: E0 L$ u' o. Y' }7 w7 F  D% zShe has white hairs and red faces.
$ y0 V& Q: t& u% X7 X: k" nHer light-footed movement
1 o# g* b' c3 ~+ M6 l1 }is just like a flying swallow.

  t2 c# s5 D4 v- i7 IShe shovels the snow on her door lane
% ?6 V8 k; P6 F' Q2 Q7 Zbefore driving her own car;
8 Y8 X/ T; E6 L+ u  J" k( Kshe digs her back yard
3 `+ Y) i2 I; k: \' c2 u- mto plant flowers ---
* \9 O+ ^+ w( J& \; ]6 v8 Tas if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
* Q5 n6 C9 h7 F- zneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
& a) b6 }+ T" n5 \3 P/ I% \9 t9 HNeighbour's handwriting
1 {& n: @6 E! g8 }3 N5 Kis so vigorous as to be the old trees
% L$ v9 I9 S8 p8 ]$ k* yinterwined by dry vines.

5 h  P/ `6 i. Z2 o1 }Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
( S# d9 {5 g% _She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
2 _! b7 o2 I6 l0 w* {9 m- `$ g' Hthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
- ?. i* o  h8 ^- _again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
  ?: }1 S# d; T( u9 vJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

  H2 |6 G- J! F从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
* E4 b# ?! S! R1 n9 |6 kHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
2 G4 K5 Z9 ^, I+ ?5 n) Vis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
0 T0 T* I8 z5 ?& n0 K* h+ |hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

- Y% a; R* s. [/ X( ]我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。