我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

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是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
% Y4 t. E9 _9 [一住三十多年

) {0 R3 f2 y4 x邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
  J- U  ~* M: N" j开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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) q& X2 ], w6 U6 r头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
/ u$ T1 \3 W' W1 t如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
" H7 B, z8 U9 e- `4 l  a* u则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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! E5 f1 S4 R* `8 E$ t# {邻居酷喜中国文化
- H' M% P( k/ z, y说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
! T: ~. Y3 v' O; b) r* b7 g那是从隔壁传来的
6 H! g6 l0 i- z2 I# n" r- e唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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1 l3 D9 [, Y. e6 U2 B7 ^- P1 RLiving here for more than thirty years,
' q! L8 N4 _) H7 p! }my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
8 u! c1 W0 u$ T$ Btens of townhouse condos.
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- J, ^' T  ?& s' f3 r! ONeighbour is more than eighty years old,
+ i9 w- z6 q) D1 smagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
; u% Y1 @" f1 T0 n# Obefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
6 z3 [3 a, v( n& Z1 L0 L6 uas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
6 u7 x/ z% q: H; ]* Fneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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) K- }' t9 p* H& ?! u$ ~Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
8 g9 o2 Y& Q8 q5 Q* Ofrom the next side of my wall;
" |. l) ]0 Z! N8 Kthe unknown tune is extolling
2 a1 V3 D4 I; M$ b+ j+ ithe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
( R! t4 Y* W: T/ T$ A6 G) H4 Z, qJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
; f) c1 L2 k, `+ l另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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+ E) \4 M6 n. L- o& v' y2 r# nHer light-footed movement
  z* M% P6 Q) n* _3 c4 [) v# eis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
; W2 p: J  X- |% q! c8 D+ j真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。