我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
* a8 o% s5 K/ R, q) Y是我们小区  几十户
, W6 \9 \7 |/ n8 C" x" ]! ?  o唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
% n5 O6 \3 ]% c& J如同女面朱熔基
! q; A( E  X& V; q2 ^. V4 b邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

  Q, W9 T3 n( [邻居酷喜中国文化
: A$ a/ `* ?- U, r/ S, j$ w说她属土龙
5 _$ U# Q! I4 A5 g- r0 B/ ^其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
( D. M9 h, P3 f4 U! S, P5 B( @magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
7 Q" J8 k4 Y2 G; dHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
; C; U& _% f, l, j9 {* o5 y- Ebefore driving her own car;
: F6 ~  q0 b- U9 Z& b0 d6 k) ^. Lshe digs her back yard
2 g; X9 i6 b4 c$ }to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
3 K- i* m+ _" H! y) {- |* j# his so vigorous as to be the old trees
$ \9 g$ l- u. W$ p3 Zinterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
* L0 b/ }9 H5 `+ d! P" rShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
6 l. b9 p: i3 q- ~Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
6 h9 ]0 W& O0 b+ j% G" K7 S. \8 t! M/ bfrom the next side of my wall;
2 ]) R; a4 \+ z8 U- U$ j' e- zthe unknown tune is extolling
  V. l  K* J7 M; S2 j; Vthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
& o- Y% g8 R$ g$ iHer light-footed movement
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修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
& _8 U: j, b; B* T: j: B- |hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。