我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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5 ]" K) _/ L9 J; }6 `1 J5 L5 R5 D8 Y我尊贵的邻居
4 {! K6 j+ S8 t是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
; l* C9 j% i9 |! t: @5 w) I' G一住三十多年

邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
* m! e* X! }4 [8 l" N  T开车铲雪  挖土栽花
) x+ q7 n* d! F7 G7 R似不识  岁月为何物

# y, x/ n, p! ?头顶英国文学硕士的光环
: u+ v4 I/ |$ ]* s: H# h0 _邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
/ G' y& L* t0 u说她属土龙
2 Y* L; D$ R+ W* r" s% ?  M, \其笛声也悠扬
  a) K( W$ Z" j6 F8 A那是从隔壁传来的
' l  `  x2 i3 h( G) C( M2 H唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
' w% b/ T" o# x! wis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
3 L# t2 p! |) ]$ P* h' k7 ~She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
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; K8 m% @, A# W' G: fShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
1 u* g8 y4 s6 `# Q% o/ U+ b4 tas if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
1 R" S) @4 q# uneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

' _" H2 ]- Z0 b7 D2 _+ S$ QNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
- J$ h" D' m0 T1 ]2 h6 e% e' {" nShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
# J4 w1 f# e1 V3 g' z, A& E( Dagain and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
3 I  w6 l- m+ ^7 i8 C0 `Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

% I2 x2 W( i/ u. J: ?, k  Y* _从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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( ^% g$ D4 m' W3 oHer light-footed movement
0 N! J* ]* _; K6 M' O  U" his just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

% @% X' U) z4 o/ R& E7 G* u我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。