我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
: ^3 c: P8 L1 N是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
6 D- n$ ?  C' q, X$ ^4 D一住三十多年

) ~/ X5 H0 r% |邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
) j; t) M8 A: ]+ N2 N4 z/ V+ T白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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4 A  j8 @( p# t头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
. q: e8 x: G" j- K  u如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
) O7 r  m* o9 b- M- i1 O2 [" X% d则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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+ h; `3 x) a$ W: J6 K8 }2 m, K邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
/ D5 [  x8 h# C0 }- L5 ]那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
9 J3 i: ~0 u- r( Z( w" {% \那不知名的曲调
$ P; s& _* R1 L8 |( ?2 E: K反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

. C& b. k6 n3 G. @: g英文版，欢迎指正：

5 b  l1 h& m0 B+ C4 I/ Y4 }Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
' w3 v6 F' \3 x- H* wis the only first owner of the unit properties
, K/ q5 K  o/ V3 M( [in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

. i, q% Z; n  O" |* KShe shovels the snow on her door lane
% W% y& V9 @! R/ A9 N# R  {' ^before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
* W; M9 o( j, G+ L3 `. O$ Cto plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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/ f) X' Y2 ?& G$ U$ t) uWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
3 G1 Q, v/ c4 i8 O* `' J, C$ R1 D9 Jneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
" ?6 I- \2 p% u% \) C3 BNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
( P+ m5 E: m( t: E9 W- I: c3 vinterwined by dry vines.
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' y" c2 F% z  g7 [, L+ kNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
5 e, e7 w1 i: N, i% m! f( iShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
* V3 }/ y; e( k1 b; _! KWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
* }) Q$ s/ @4 U  K) L/ D" othat is the sole sound going into my ears
2 N4 p7 p2 w0 o$ [8 ]from the next side of my wall;
) {6 ?8 Z4 `5 m, a0 S0 Bthe unknown tune is extolling
9 q2 k5 ?) Z4 o; Zthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
: i) C1 _6 s$ b# d- l" wagain and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
  i8 k* g' o8 d8 Q4 T5 C9 {7 CJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

/ p- T4 V& o, E; N: l从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
) [! Y9 m  ^/ Z0 MHer light-footed movement
, d& P  l+ ~& `  D4 t1 b% m  mis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
- o: I  ]% |% Chm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。