我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
7 ?. ]0 U5 d. g6 r. i, g+ N是我们小区  几十户
, o8 Z* K# G' \+ z唯一的元老
一住三十多年

7 g9 |' P/ T5 I邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
( B! h- \0 X) B8 A7 s% X, n白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
; R; ?! f* k+ g8 A$ Z如同女面朱熔基
" }" N( _( ^5 \/ i- y% h* }+ f邻居的字
6 M8 w# t+ Q; H! G则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
3 q& L# Z7 P7 a0 C0 B其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
2 G, i5 b- e0 i: l. I唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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6 M4 f( b' X( ?7 U& T) C! _Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
. z8 W* ^4 a1 K- rmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
* s4 n+ G9 Z/ l4 H9 D0 sShe has white hairs and red faces.
8 K* G6 X) R; @) K: `3 b2 y" _Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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6 _, Z, O9 Y' s6 ZShe shovels the snow on her door lane
  t9 d. k$ a; m' b5 Hbefore driving her own car;
6 N8 N3 x; m% }% J0 H) y9 d3 Bshe digs her back yard
9 K7 K3 g! e. v0 U4 I: R4 @" \9 w' Mto plant flowers ---
$ a$ P4 k5 C+ R$ y+ Xas if she did not know what years mean.
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4 ~; A% t, k7 KWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
1 W3 z/ z; g7 ]7 jis so vigorous as to be the old trees
. ]+ |! X! u9 h8 B: x' d6 Hinterwined by dry vines.
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& I+ C+ D5 F1 {% ZNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
% O3 z) I  ]0 }4 u0 A  oWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
0 `/ E  D! F8 D! ?that is the sole sound going into my ears
, R2 \7 b; R% T9 z$ Cfrom the next side of my wall;
* w+ b7 Q6 v7 G3 u& [the unknown tune is extolling
: S, s$ O7 |6 [0 {' M0 l6 J% v7 ~the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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* ]$ v- ]1 p# u% R土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

+ ]: d0 U; Q7 y+ ~( m从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
. p* Z# o5 U; iHer light-footed movement
3 E* k/ \$ t* z4 L6 sis just like a flying swallow.
1 D  H$ J+ M2 \+ v( P5 c3 u6 H修改为：
% m- j% s& }# t" m/ hHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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7 s3 s, c0 {3 \) P! w: z4 c" i真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。