我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
5 P8 H, ?$ j/ x7 C一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
: `1 Q  ~* y, {白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
# C# c1 V/ j5 y. s1 V5 |6 z8 C似不识  岁月为何物

& ]: ]" w6 X  b) ^头顶英国文学硕士的光环
6 t! B+ c2 w6 @% J8 {# t6 @# e3 s邻居气宇轩昂
2 h$ Q; e  F  w* k+ q9 d如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
( @/ P7 n* o2 y2 ~1 N- P) N则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
& i! q, F4 K/ i, U& V* w& C说她属土龙
1 A: i5 N) s; B0 ]+ K其笛声也悠扬
. M2 k$ Y8 @- L9 Q6 e+ c; J那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
/ y( V* t2 l. w反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

3 j) J5 [! W" G  U% K英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
. W' y9 k: H" l' N+ cis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
+ ]9 {" p% a) w, Ttens of townhouse condos.

8 T! a9 u9 V% {1 V6 k6 m% Q2 |Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
; k% J5 \" d1 V  Q7 Y3 MShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
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; [6 v+ D/ }" u  ?6 XShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
7 X# W/ q) ?; d& f" L* jneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
: y9 k" h! K# g6 {1 D8 Yas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
  X2 a6 C) Y" p  ?+ MNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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! t4 z. J) M) w, X2 o7 }Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
% l2 N% B# _% E% \; `' ~# fthat is the sole sound going into my ears
# u* X2 f( |. t5 X3 U+ J. ~from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
; ^3 A- _' W( g$ M- U& Fthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
; }9 u2 ~: d3 J" zagain and again.

Justing

$ }8 I9 |, _+ w6 x5 }& m; O3 F土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

% T' P+ f$ f. S) r/ h从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
; V, H: L, W( ?" J  j% q* Z' _Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
0 H' B" L7 ?5 ^1 @; d0 q修改为：
Her light-footed movement
' Z/ v6 G7 a0 ^6 Gis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
9 N, K7 e( \  T0 e8 B: g( q真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

0 L! ?) X+ @/ s3 |/ f+ s我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。