我尊贵的邻居(11)

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+ ~1 q' P3 [% L! m' r0 S) X) G我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
) |. y9 A' H. V2 Q一住三十多年
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; x9 ^: P" |* g邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
1 w( @1 {- A- t4 {似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
% Q) N1 e8 a. ^% x如同女面朱熔基
, c7 ^, u/ N4 Y/ b) F邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

. M' J; X# s- o  V. c邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
1 b5 }7 A: I, x9 [那是从隔壁传来的
3 F/ A& v: G8 {6 w唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
, `" ]; S8 p) h反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
9 X4 V7 Z) L% a! R$ g7 ~is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
) f( O# G& Q8 gtens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
0 G' L- {5 c5 a+ @: M7 Xmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
; u& L- F4 d' b8 h5 lis just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
. s3 \8 {6 Y! }- t+ T7 }/ e( C7 `as if she did not know what years mean.

1 O) l6 t# n$ @8 l5 O1 }% Z. LWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
! W" c% ~; W& V7 f- |; C8 xas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
0 u4 Y( }/ u  J" i' H3 ANeighbour's handwriting
; v: m3 V0 a( T/ S2 @, y2 F4 Wis so vigorous as to be the old trees
( S5 Z. q) m( K, J! {0 iinterwined by dry vines.

& ^/ R: E6 k) K1 F. j* }+ `Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
* q; L- D- n4 f* Q0 SShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
4 h$ p4 S( t3 O) w( w) N. wWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
/ D4 A/ O( V/ X" @5 E. S, ~that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
' L9 D! u" ~" B& gthe unknown tune is extolling
* e7 ]4 `' E9 ]/ R8 V) e7 Cthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
$ S; G& z5 X# t; {Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
3 Y8 r! c0 p! J6 m5 rHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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" [# p+ T9 m! [9 `9 W$ b0 d5 F真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。