我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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. m1 u+ T, w; n: t$ b0 {0 D我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

, {6 P3 }; m5 Q6 r# [( u8 A邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
) n7 b! n0 z" d白发红颜  不见皱纹
2 j1 @% F: u0 U+ k& Z2 p开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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" W: d0 Q5 g4 Q6 r5 m5 K' J8 v6 m头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
" q6 n1 `% _/ |& Y其笛声也悠扬
+ l0 A! Q9 M: Z8 L3 v那是从隔壁传来的
. [! {: y0 p4 U/ r! d8 m7 [唯一的声响
+ b0 W$ d/ E7 S6 z* i那不知名的曲调
; A: J/ [* K1 L反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
! S! ?) |* |+ }8 Tmy prestigous neighbour
6 F8 `& M6 ^- v2 f5 F4 A; J7 F1 \is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
  }# o7 v5 w- U% }2 N, J2 @tens of townhouse condos.
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1 L' y$ Z8 B8 g) s- O9 E4 y+ eNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
, d$ D7 h2 o& H, v% XShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
' D1 O8 n2 W) m  ?! F4 f$ Lneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
5 j3 s4 f7 t5 w4 h/ JNeighbour's handwriting
& ]1 D* X, |0 a+ n; }* ?is so vigorous as to be the old trees
' T  s- V/ O6 t+ [0 |interwined by dry vines.

  V! f1 I3 ~* `. Q* G+ ~8 lNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
& T1 I4 j9 p8 Z: bShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
% }' s5 r& O- p$ _* ~' n9 pthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
6 V7 P% V' m. g  B% U4 t1 bthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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7 `3 U9 f! q6 ]土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

. t# i: t4 x3 T4 H$ y! U从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
2 F4 s8 L' }4 b6 W5 K0 LHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。