我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
5 D8 a) ?+ \  t* v* a3 s是我们小区  几十户
* B* l0 V0 k, F7 L0 X- z唯一的元老
, p. l" K: m* f' K一住三十多年
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( `' M+ ]6 e5 M* f8 c$ r邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
2 K" u4 ^* J# a开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
5 E  Y1 C0 {" N如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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5 D8 j7 ^. H  X- b. O* u邻居酷喜中国文化
% ~  \* [4 y8 t2 a说她属土龙
' z) A% u' b5 Q6 Q! w其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
$ m" M8 @! s3 h+ m. H6 B+ j唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
" `0 y- u' x7 W) y; t反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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" L9 W/ x' J6 v英文版，欢迎指正：
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* Q" x) U7 I- T3 j/ N0 }Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
) h# t; t( b  o$ n( ?) \* Etens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
7 Y5 }- Z& D6 X4 z3 ]1 ymagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
5 H6 A# {8 _+ G" p' sis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
* J: b# V2 v' ^9 V/ gbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
+ d' O. N+ v: R4 g' L; Kas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
& ?6 T7 W& p8 H* F; X) E4 Has if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
( a" d6 O; ?# minterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
1 e/ N% ^, U5 i( E& fShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
, Y6 n4 i* v2 j" [. j4 O2 Uthat is the sole sound going into my ears
$ L$ E, H# S. ~2 e5 R3 ifrom the next side of my wall;
: W5 `1 D4 v& H7 b0 uthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
$ w0 h! {" O8 N. z8 I3 l! N/ vJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
0 H: Z! F, o! K% j5 ~- w* f% @* ~Her light-footed movement
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Her light-footed movement
, o; ]% }' d" D$ C, qis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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Justing

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hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。