我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
7 t6 G! _+ ]# q  g7 q- M1 V是我们小区  几十户
, ^! h& `1 |7 W% C1 x唯一的元老
9 q5 g5 y/ j  b6 I一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
( ]1 e1 A( b3 z/ b' W白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
% F+ q3 o% E! ~" x7 S' B! K如同女面朱熔基
8 p) J$ D: t6 H/ b3 C邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
# {6 G. e- w2 H+ q& l) f0 N! f$ q其笛声也悠扬
, H: Z$ H( M& w: s( B那是从隔壁传来的
' T+ v% U0 C; I6 n唯一的声响
3 u; K- ^! g( r3 O. o* h$ e那不知名的曲调
, V: g0 m) V  G) @9 j8 q7 E反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

$ x$ Z3 A) L- X* t* WLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
' B* s2 O: a0 c# vis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
6 h9 b. b+ s2 I' S1 F/ HHer light-footed movement
  H, G6 K" S9 j) M  K9 f0 ?& qis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
. s: f# L7 T3 `7 C% Aas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
! D& H+ v1 s. K* j( z9 {* b. }neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
! o7 J/ b5 i! K" @. f2 T% UNeighbour's handwriting
) V" ?7 |- H5 c2 b* r- |/ {1 r) Dis so vigorous as to be the old trees
! F0 N  V- `" O) G% I& A- l) sinterwined by dry vines.
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8 j$ b# v9 m. X! |- H( c+ fNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
9 l' d' a4 j# l4 z% }  z4 K( ~1 [Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
  \8 f) G, `1 Ethe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
/ z( H2 t5 I# ]! R! Aagain and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
' N1 l4 D3 w: N( i# n. Pis just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
) \* z* h- n# ^" I( E' o8 kis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
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+ t9 {  i: F' j2 w+ S& Thm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

% H/ T- ~1 T4 a; ]( Y# f5 j我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。