我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
, U) ~3 K6 m  Q+ k. `白发红颜  不见皱纹
% J7 [( }# O$ z4 {' V. p开车铲雪  挖土栽花
7 M/ [3 P' F2 z. y2 A  b似不识  岁月为何物
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( u6 N2 b* |( J4 t9 D5 X头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
. F, ^' j8 m9 U9 o( V3 S邻居的字
1 c5 z# w/ a. |- \- y# G8 l, x/ s" V1 c则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
* A! d1 y' e+ Z; \; N) z说她属土龙
" |% v, O1 R$ U0 J' C) ^1 ^  k7 ]其笛声也悠扬
0 h/ }" Q( L) u- E那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
2 X6 C; y9 S( H# }/ D1 Y5 ^my prestigous neighbour
" \) K5 I. L# d5 ~is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
# q" _8 D2 Y0 A, |tens of townhouse condos.
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: b$ Q4 e- \9 YNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
9 y* ?6 V* U; h" n+ @: H9 \magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
- N7 K  d# p- G' M- b+ g+ dShe has white hairs and red faces.
- M9 m& a& w& B3 m3 Q, hHer light-footed movement
; `7 b# _- _( H7 Gis just like a flying swallow.

& ^. Z. t6 W* U- D" R5 AShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
  M' O' I* Q% e: H! Pas if she did not know what years mean.

! [/ n- R: v  w( n) TWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
' `! v$ B# _; @* A2 y9 b7 H0 zneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
: Y! x  R1 q- a# Z0 L( Yis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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3 Y( u! |# m" `. n, jNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
+ n+ j2 g) i& H& z2 O) y- ythe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
& r6 q9 x5 H+ @; RHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

( \( L  p! w" A! s: ?我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。