我尊贵的邻居(11)

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井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
2 `9 b- _( c% F& o. k% ~: q是我们小区  几十户
* z( y0 z+ l: j唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
5 ^; M6 ]) g8 S5 H白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
; k3 }1 v, ]7 `5 R似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
$ E. _' t  z  L  j( s9 N& v5 P  n邻居气宇轩昂
& R8 t( H$ j8 r: A7 }! t! Q% ?8 A: c如同女面朱熔基
2 X, O! F7 x6 H5 e7 g邻居的字
+ b; {! O; ?. g. P# z则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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( w0 y0 @! q" {) r英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
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she digs her back yard
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as if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
2 H/ T, l1 a1 H; Y* W& z1 Wneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
) Y; v5 A: Q+ w7 E5 \Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
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) ?. ], n( q6 qNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
" A# I# Z0 ~5 b1 \She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
2 }% I  {$ x) Jthat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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- s" S0 E3 }0 X/ _, F土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
. B! n0 X& |$ IJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

1 u- _9 q5 D  @0 ], A3 \从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
1 k( t, e5 @+ h! h+ Sis just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
4 Q! `2 d# K' @, iis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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, _5 x7 ]/ B6 m6 C$ c1 l5 U; c1 G真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
7 A" J; U7 L- ]3 h4 u- v真的是太像朱镕基了！
+ |- o9 C( \! b: W" ]5 `& chm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。