我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

& v" A" _% Y" x( Z& [我尊贵的邻居
  Z4 Y6 U( D# ^/ _4 s. d+ z; k是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
. b, O4 C& t1 l白发红颜  不见皱纹
; _5 A9 F  q9 D' f3 Y开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
0 \) e2 j( h" o5 \2 M5 L, p$ J# I1 C邻居的字
& o2 w, P" M1 W, x; I/ O0 l7 n- B* F则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
: ?. s, ^8 `3 f( S. ]# K. Z; g# ~说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
5 {' d9 S# ~. r% m6 F5 }  Q1 @那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
% H- D$ g$ G* n! |那不知名的曲调
: j' K, J' u& S5 M反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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- O$ o, k* M& x/ L) lLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
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in our community ---
4 P1 G$ F) t+ s; otens of townhouse condos.
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) G% ]. h2 _4 _3 v  S% ZNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
9 A/ P1 O' p+ ~/ FHer light-footed movement
; ~3 }: f  Y8 Q. f: pis just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
$ V, a6 Z+ ~- q2 r, x; _before driving her own car;
$ w; w& z9 u+ L& J3 r, zshe digs her back yard
1 P% p9 a% s1 Z% \, b5 gto plant flowers ---
  N2 o$ Y. x" {! N% @as if she did not know what years mean.
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. e* M" l) u+ Q5 H3 U  `With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
: v% r' F4 h  j9 gas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
9 b0 W. ^) K% h" `! r, m5 i! T% Zis so vigorous as to be the old trees
8 p! S# Z2 t# _9 x" Uinterwined by dry vines.
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4 P# a; }& X4 v- Q2 H9 O! SNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
+ ~* b0 V: H7 V: N+ }$ F$ q7 u- JShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
4 n% e: s7 Z2 H  A3 c/ \Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
' y+ z% N: s! |9 N- h7 R" \from the next side of my wall;
9 t& _9 }1 c3 m& ]- _the unknown tune is extolling
; T4 _  }9 u' `2 k) o. [' _8 lthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

. a; e+ d# @- ~# j1 d3 F6 `' d土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
. E0 d7 }' R- y2 `另外，翻译改动一处：
4 P% Y% m+ ^" }, X+ a$ HHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


8 N$ X, {7 u! \$ B2 ?' A真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
9 G: J) t- P3 _hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。