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老杨 · 发表于 2004-12-13 11:50

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Halloween
Yang

I think Halloween is the most interesting holiday in Canada after I had some experiences of Canada’s vocation.

connie · 发表于 2004-12-14 03:11

我怎么就看见一句话哩？

老杨 · 发表于 2004-12-14 22:58

Halloween
Yang

I think Halloween is the most interesting holiday in Canada after I had some experiences of Canada’s vocation.

After I came to Edmonton, I had celebrated Canada Day, Labour Day, Thanksgiving, Halloween and Remembrance Day. All of them are interesting for me and the most interesting holiday is Halloween.

My teacher told me, I must prepared candies and many children would come to my home asked for them. So I bought many candies form Zellers and Safeway. When I came home with the candies, my wife told me that the candies would not enough so I went to Safeway again and bought more candies.

My child was shy and didn’t spoke many English so I taught her how to shout “Trick or Treat”. She was perfect at shout “Trick or Treat” after two days training.

October 31st was Halloween, I got up very early that day. My wife cooked chicken which I would bring to class for potluck. My child was very happy because she already waited this day for a long time.

In the afternoon, we had a potluck in the class. Yuong Sook, a Korea girl, made some sushi looked very beautiful. Chun Yuan, a Chinese girl, cooked some bouilli tasted very delicious. Of cause my wife cooked the best food because they were clear off.

After lunch, we had a party in the student center. Many students prinked their face and wore some strange clothing. They were singing and dancing at their, what a happy day!

When we arrived home, the sky became dark. My child said, “Dad, may I go out and ask for candies?”
“Yes. Why not?” I said.

My child went out with a bag. My wife and I stayed at home to wait children. To my surprised, only three children went to my home and I left many candies.

One hour later, my child came back with a full bag. “Dad,” She said, “my bag is full. I have many candies now. What an interesting day!”
“You are right, my child.” I said, “Halloween is the most interesting holiday in Canada, I think”.

莫迭儿 · 发表于 2004-12-15 00:07

I think Halloween is the most interesting holiday in Canada after I had some experiences of Canada’s vocation.
----You repeat the same meaning here with the second paragraph .I think the first paragraph should be deleted.

After I came to Edmonton, I had celebrated Canada Day, Labour Day, Thanksgiving, Halloween and Remembrance Day. All of them are interesting for me and the most interesting holiday is Halloween.
----This paragraph sounds good to be the first paragraph.

My teacher told me, I must prepared candies and many children would come to my home asked for them. So I bought many candies formfrom Zellers and Safeway.

After lunch, we had a party in the student center. Many students prinked their face and wore some strange clothing. They were singing and dancing at theirthere ,what a happy day!

[ Last edited by 莫迭儿 on 2004-12-15 at 03:23 AM ]

connie · 发表于 2004-12-15 04:26

莫迭儿

Good job!!!!

OliveOil · 发表于 2004-12-19 08:39

Halloween
Yang

After I came to Edmonton, I have celebrated Canada Day, Labor Day, Thanksgiving, Halloween and Remembrance Day. All are interesting but the most interesting one is Halloween.

Halloween is a fun and “sweet” day for children. My daughter is a shy girl and doesn’t speak much English but she was as excited about the fun moments as all other kids. I showed her how to do “Trick or Treat”. She became perfect shouting out loud “Trick or Treat” after two days’ intensive training.

My teacher suggested I should prepare candies for the children who would knock on door by door asking for them on Halloween. I bought a lot at Zellers and Safeway. My wife then warned me that the amount of candies I bought would be far from enough. I had to go to Safeway again and bought some more.

October 31st was Halloween. My daughter was very happy that the day she had waited for a long time finally came. So was I, I guess, because I got up very early without the reminder of my loud alarm clock.

We had a potluck in the classroom at noon. My wife cooked chicken as my contribution.There were some beautiful shushi from Yuong Sook, a Korea girl; some tasty bouilli (what’s that?) from Chun Yuan, a Chinese girl... Of course the most delicious dish was from me because my wife cooked the best, which was easy to prove by the fact that nothing was left of the chicken.

After lunch, we had a party in the student center. Many students were singing and dancing with their prinked faces or masks and in weird customs. What a happy day!

When we arrived home, it was already dark. My daughter asked: “Dad, can I go Trick-or-treat?”
“Sure. Why not?”.

She rushed out right away with a big bag. My wife and I stayed home to wait for other “trick or treat” children. To my surprise, only three stopped by and I had many candies left.

One hour later, my daughter came back with her full bag: “Daddy, Daddy, look, my bag is full. I have lots of candies now…What an interesting day!”
“You are right, kiddo. Halloween is the most interesting holiday in Canada, I think”.

老杨 · 发表于 2004-12-19 11:12

bouilli 是红烧肉，从金山词霸里面查的。

老杨 · 发表于 2005-1-3 11:36

Halloween

Yang

After I came to Edmonton, I celebrated Canada Day, Labor Day, Thanksgiving, Halloween and Remembrance Day. All of them are interesting for me, but the most interesting holiday is Halloween.
My teacher told me I must prepared candies, and many children would come to my home and ask for them. So, I bought many candies form Zellers and Safeway. When I came home with the candies, my wife told me that there were not enough, so I went to Safeway again and bought more candies.
My child was shy and didn’t speak mach English, so I taught her how to shout “Trick or Treat”. She was perfect at shouting “Trick or Treat” after two days of training.
October 31st was Halloween. I got up very early that day. My wife cooked chicken which I was going to bring to class for a potluck. My child was very happy because she had already waited for this day for a long time.
In the afternoon, we had a potluck in the class. Yuong Sook, a Korean girl, made some sushi which looked very beautiful. Chun Yuan, a Chinese girl, cooked some bouilli which tasted very delicious. Of course my wife cooked the best food because they were clear off.
After lunch, we had a party in the student center. Many students put make up on their faces and wore some strange clothing. They were singing and dancing there. What a happy day!
When we arrived home, the sky became dark. My child said, “Dad, may I go out and ask for candies?”
“Yes. Why not?” I said.
My child went out with a bag. My wife and I stayed at home to wait for the children. To my surprise, only three children came to my home, and I was left with many candies.
One hour later, my child came back with a full bag. “Dad,” She said, “My bag is full. I have many candies now. What an interesting day!”
“You are right, my child.” I said, “Halloween is the most interesting holiday in Canada, I think.”

木兰 · 发表于 2005-1-3 12:11

Halloween

Yang

After I settled down in Edmonton, I celebrated Canada Day, Labor Day, Thanksgiving, Halloween and Remembrance Day. All of them arevery interesting to me, but I have to say that the most enjoyable holiday is Halloween.
My teacher told me I should prepare candies, and many children would come to my home and ask for them. So, I bought many candies from Zellers and Safeway. When I got back home with the candies, my wife told me that there were not enough, so I went to Safeway again and bought more.
My child was shy and didn’t speak much English, so I taught her how to shout “Trick or Treat”. After two days of training, she is perfect at shouting “Trick or Treat” .
October 31st is Halloween. I got up very early that day. My wife prepared chicken which I was going to bring to class for a potluck. My child was very happy because she had already been waitingfor this day for a long time.
In the afternoon, we had a potluck in the class. Yuong Sook, a Korean girl, made some sushi which looked very beautiful. Chun Yuan, a Chinese girl, cooked some bouilli which tasted very delicious. Of course my wife cooked the best food because they were all cleared off all gone.
After lunch, we had a party in the student center. Many students put make up on their faces and wore some strange clothingcostume. They were singing and dancing there. What a happy day!
When we gothome, it turned dark. My child said, “Dad, may I go out and ask for candies?”
“Yes. Why not?” I said.
My child went out with a bag. I stayed at homewith my wife, waiting for neighbours' kids. To my surprise, only three children came to my home, and I was left with many unclaimedcandies. And, one hour later, my child came back with a full bag. “Dad,” She said, “My bag is full. I have many candies now. What an interesting day!”
“You are right, my child.” I said, “Halloween is the most interesting holiday in Canada, I think.”

[ Last edited by LookAround on 2005-1-3 at 01:46 PM ]

风潇潇水潇潇 · 发表于 2005-1-5 23:33

老杨！good job!

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