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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!( E1 N2 r9 o3 l
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In the garden of my heart! ~! K  j" A6 w# v7 ^, p% ^. v
You planted a tree4 f$ `6 b* u6 {' H
From sunset til dawn0 G9 F4 i, w- L% R, }6 L
Through darkness to light
' D6 p  u: V0 u* C. p6 Z# uNourished with my soul
6 C& V4 F1 V1 U! J# TDevoured my sorrow by thee5 _4 E0 i9 l* B. {9 X* o% ~
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In the memory of my life
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Should the sky fall down on me1 H3 z( ]/ [8 n' j
May promises fade in the sea
8 Q1 B+ ~# p) B, \" uSewing back every broken pieces
# D% z- Y# }8 p% C/ zBursting the love out of me$ }! A9 T5 }- e4 P7 L0 R

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表& q9 H1 l$ c8 y) r* y% f2 O
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!$ j% M# w+ T, j  Z) \

: M& e( `5 E1 ?3 z; ?In the garden of my heart
, t9 j2 P/ E  ?: |2 x+ G9 `You planted a tree
+ w+ D2 s3 x1 Q4 t+ m2 Q, kFrom sunset til dawn
6 p5 |! V+ I9 f1 @. W9 IThrough darkness to light' i+ ]  C' R. x- E" n6 B
Nourished with my soul0 `7 H0 i1 Z- ?) h/ U8 D. i# d
Devoured my so ...
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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?! E, w7 \8 N$ f% ]

: i) Q4 W8 j) n3 T2 V5 Y' B0 g写得真好。$ c5 L2 p$ x+ ^7 P. @
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表3 p9 j4 d  K' T8 M
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?0 H# w* ^3 H" z- R7 s
写得真好。" _  w* x5 `$ ^  M
加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
! H* R1 G2 Y- x如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

  c7 R1 B; N# B4 X五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表: P* k( o" u$ C
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.+ O/ G# H' L3 T/ Z7 k

* z$ x; B# n0 G# g) B* gSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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  a! G5 L: d: m- j/ Q7 P1 jThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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* q+ c8 B! ]- c# m/ V) p6 N9 _3 x1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".! G/ U! V6 v  A$ F1 L
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表( Z6 _  A( Y* I/ C" \
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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8 f+ [8 G% [- q/ z* Z0 j* g诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
, b# d; E. R# x' o8 ?9 Zthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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7 L5 y: W6 o( N: OShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊,有很多经典的例子。) z. {- n1 {: R1 a/ C* v8 l$ |# V
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave- I" G9 E& f% r' }6 \. \$ l
For I am not there,
. b+ {" T' D- l# H3 hI've a date with a butterfly2 a$ P7 e0 \5 P5 O! ]
To dance on the air.
# \$ G, p% [7 K( J5 e7 c- {; j+ ~If I'm missed, find a flower,
: J3 o& P3 n6 `3 `* UI'll be there too,6 y4 Z( n6 G# E& |
Sniffing it's fragrance3 |$ Z$ e* A/ D8 i3 O3 H7 x. V
Right next to you.
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3 X! h6 G1 V: V6 fDon't be sad
$ P7 z/ {0 z  ~* `8 M/ UWhen you remember me,7 P" @; \4 f) f/ Y2 N8 y' D
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
% E8 @2 W* T7 t' G* `, A& I5 a4 e/ GWild and free,2 y' S! K0 K9 h
Flirting with the lighting,
8 R6 t) o$ W1 Y) p9 Q& K" p) OPlaying tag with the wind,
; ]% B: c0 }7 _7 V; E( OChasing the thunder
% c. E# ]! s$ A8 Q! c4 sTime and again,
& d4 \, Z' B9 R; I0 t6 \2 }- z: SSoaring with the eagle,( Q* V7 i1 J2 c8 B+ \8 w
Swimming in the sea,9 n$ }* a# W0 S
Enjoying all of nature' E# B. v) A. |! C
While I'm waiting for thee.
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