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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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- @3 C, x1 k" Z; ]2 c! X) LIn the garden of my heart
5 z* R( ]$ K& ?. oYou planted a tree
* G- r1 T- e2 A4 ^& h0 p1 q+ gFrom sunset til dawn
  o3 m8 K# X, O( gThrough darkness to light
* p9 G  f: g1 ?' P6 F4 oNourished with my soul1 E2 U! \+ }& l2 |7 S- v
Devoured my sorrow by thee, }# K& s+ `( E: E. v6 j

. H, W  t- t( j# ^In the memory of my life
6 B: q1 n. Z8 V" ]You planted a dream
: J5 O- j8 ~2 y/ G) ?Should the sky fall down on me! F2 k3 h% {4 _
May promises fade in the sea* y8 ~6 _/ o3 T5 `
Sewing back every broken pieces/ m/ g9 [& g  _3 \9 W. x4 j
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表" v; L) C. M7 t7 U* H
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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7 m, z* b9 C6 B9 ^In the garden of my heart. E0 p. |# |- G$ U+ r
You planted a tree
9 ?" j7 |1 i. L/ jFrom sunset til dawn) D, p: h  E4 h! w6 b
Through darkness to light
. E  M6 @; S3 L# z# r$ @  DNourished with my soul6 v9 f! {$ Y. n; i: l+ `% E
Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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6 G8 B# C; R' T写得真好。
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- E8 U9 n0 B1 e7 O- O加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
2 b" `8 }+ K" {$ E0 e4 V眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?3 u0 _% g2 X4 M. w. y- V0 T
写得真好。3 s2 r3 q$ a$ h0 [+ ^- R, [# u
加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表/ y& {' c( c1 f6 T5 a1 A7 u
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.7 k% T* t9 {, u+ i1 O( y$ a/ I
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表' \) w5 E0 S. u4 W. I4 P- \
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.3 S6 L; _2 b8 G6 ]0 s& u
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.2 \! A4 k' ]$ s8 p6 ~1 d
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".# h- G/ D4 k! {& j" k

4 d0 o9 I" @: u. B! h2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。% ], _9 @! Z1 s3 I9 w) Q
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
- y, J# {  |! O# _/ Hthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。# w3 k, G+ Y, L' |" g& L. z, d
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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/ ~! r; K, n7 F* i& @诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表; W* a! L- e& L0 v
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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& H+ y2 {" `& d+ ^( O% K6 F有啊,有很多经典的例子。' h4 h. Y6 O; B* U

% m+ H  f! |8 l  t0 G比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》3 h; ^9 N3 F" u& ?* l- X

7 g5 v3 [8 y& H; M7 j0 y+ bDon't weep at my grave
0 Z$ W3 Y, o- F9 \% A, N5 T/ ?For I am not there,2 g6 y& j( {5 j1 n1 O" }2 i
I've a date with a butterfly
4 g; s$ N3 x% n, k4 a6 X2 H& ETo dance on the air.8 S3 m+ O( x# g2 T9 b+ U
If I'm missed, find a flower,6 s- u$ G) o/ B. L6 `
I'll be there too,
) f5 u9 F8 C2 ]* O' mSniffing it's fragrance* S! U2 ?- @* X- P: n
Right next to you.2 v" J3 m- S# z3 e, Z

5 `- a& d' P# i2 G: i7 `Don't be sad# W* w$ K! r5 w' C  |: N2 _
When you remember me,
5 G( Y' h$ j# {9 h1 JFor I'm singing in the sunshine,3 T- Z5 {) N# e
Wild and free,
" g6 F6 ^* Z. yFlirting with the lighting,
% {! C4 ?: c& S0 D) E. aPlaying tag with the wind,4 G( X, I2 k6 y' g0 S7 s7 W
Chasing the thunder
6 S% b) o/ x) K- V8 vTime and again,
% C1 o6 {* z  |5 w& Q# qSoaring with the eagle,
! q* V$ f( o) ?! WSwimming in the sea,
& T. p8 x( R2 y9 W. TEnjoying all of nature- ~) M+ S& d  R$ I) K/ u
While I'm waiting for thee.
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