In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
. F7 M: O  d4 ?& ~! i2 ?7 ~From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
1 U' R' F& |/ n4 j$ cNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

4 V" c! O$ c8 o+ x) b$ e) CIn the memory of my life
* J) R) z- r4 q! P5 s5 pYou planted a dream
1 V9 C5 Z) B% j% eShould the sky fall down on me
$ _7 s6 ?* ~  C  F$ e7 y8 YMay promises fade in the sea
6 w% k- `& E+ i$ p* fSewing back every broken pieces
  h( h! g1 ]8 c% ]Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
6 K1 ^) b9 |0 A( {2 z# AThrough darkness to light
! }5 y; y; |* SNourished with my soul
& `8 _% i% s- }& @Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

写得真好。
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Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

9 a* s4 J1 n/ L. W/ [9 x五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
: l- X  q* a4 KShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

; [' A- ~; Z+ S, xThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

6 y: q% o. L2 @- k, M' T1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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! Y* b/ b# G! W2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
$ M1 Q* U1 I1 N; g8 K, Xthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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; N2 k- S, z4 X7 AShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
( @! y4 X2 L6 @* |5 F3 [thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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2 `- z! S0 {9 W. o. i: VShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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2 I' `% {7 u# i* p3 b4 [Don't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
0 s: S, b4 v7 S7 E- @If I'm missed, find a flower,
4 ?2 p. e& }1 h2 m' JI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.
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: y5 x* a" Z1 t6 kDon't be sad
0 z% N, P& ]* j7 W8 fWhen you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
; y3 b- f1 t1 |0 ]Wild and free,
$ E" c) r8 r' A- F  @. }4 jFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
  q- Y% y- b, j6 m% D0 V& DTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
$ c* R( H2 ^' M; i6 jSwimming in the sea,
& s/ x: r) U( x  Y2 X  {0 C7 T$ ]Enjoying all of nature
' x3 L6 N/ o, d0 H# p3 \While I'm waiting for thee.