In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
/ h0 r2 y7 K& A' p4 KFrom sunset til dawn
5 f" f. q( ^: X* X6 c& z3 sThrough darkness to light
, F& i1 J: u! rNourished with my soul
; z; j' n: c& ]0 ]0 q2 yDevoured my sorrow by thee
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1 {; b2 ?$ H' CIn the memory of my life
9 f/ m4 G5 ]  Z! _! B/ {You planted a dream
) j* J: T) g1 D7 U: R2 Z% |1 _Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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  ?1 h& b' b& D, x( V' K  ?In the garden of my heart
1 `: w5 M7 N$ C  Z/ YYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
: r5 U: U& ?( ^6 d* u' wThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
3 P1 y1 p6 p5 kDevoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

* f7 C: v7 U- y6 W+ E& J1 N* v' h写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
) Y# S& J: v6 V3 ?" g加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
- {" e; \" A" q0 |& O! C如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

! X. B2 D, u' ]' b$ J. R+ r. E五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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$ n3 V/ ~% `  s5 gSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

6 o/ f$ |; G3 j, w+ b4 k
Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
" n2 p& k* E; W5 s6 L& }thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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: n+ M) I+ H) n9 \- m) s) _: a诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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  J. s) B# a2 b$ g; Y! X) w% u$ c比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

2 O# ^0 ]  Y: y% Z0 [Don't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
, i9 d7 n7 `8 _/ [( C, |, dI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
" G' E. Z7 \1 d9 S4 cRight next to you.

+ J1 o' G& G; RDon't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
8 k9 X! q6 r) |* A/ K% V, q( JWild and free,
" d5 A2 X2 v( ~3 U$ G/ i8 Z% CFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
! e2 ?6 A: t: A- zEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.