In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
* ?8 `  E$ l/ o; z. @6 b+ n. N
; _* I- `. \; [0 J! _% f6 O: iIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
, F8 q" o$ B1 N5 oDevoured my sorrow by thee
$ C+ r7 z) _1 u% F4 e
In the memory of my life
8 X' o8 f, A3 B* _9 Z& n, x1 w5 ^1 zYou planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
: E  ~- T# n! u) w/ J, I' @+ H% ~May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
) `* Z9 j- D* @0 }- K9 Z3 y, Z$ kBursting the love out of me
, P# F2 y; H2 L& c1 h4 `+ {* \' X( j
[mu]http://penguin.spss.sd59.bc.ca/~mqiu/images/without.mp3[/mu]

云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
: J5 y# Q& c0 ^听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
8 g$ @# N% @- o# g& E& r
& L* W. q8 r' d' E6 j4 DIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
; w1 `) t  ~  C" K! MFrom sunset til dawn
  I; \/ D  t' k  E  ~# `# QThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
- G) ^! E6 ^9 g. M/ J8 e7 ^Devoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

2 A' t$ Y* W2 W8 U4 a写得真好。
5 r, u5 d: T8 D, y. [6 M, h
加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
/ O2 U0 X- m# Q1 i. J$ Y3 L眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
. j! f" [$ R+ n) K! a2 |' ?写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

# h* v6 c) J) d4 U/ A* ?五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
+ n3 U- P! m! q) p( C  _) @
1 V/ w4 l; M" w  G' USewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

+ _% |# J; T6 E. H! D
5 z% A" q3 V. ?1 \; zThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
: c$ @% f: t) i- ]: E8 z
# r  D5 X7 {, s5 Z, }2 E+ a+ c1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

% ?. q" T* c' I7 b1 b2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

; B6 N1 P. ~) Y8 ]Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
/ q; N: j1 \8 I8 N1 ithee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
7 T: F' R2 S" x7 _9 @( M
Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

( e/ u; R2 u) x诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

' G  U. m- o4 M" W! f* u- C: R
& _4 _0 w$ y9 B5 p# \5 K5 i% {有啊，有很多经典的例子。

比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
# j* b9 J4 _& k; r8 v" Q
3 I5 F0 ?) r; [" F5 N, X- ], cDon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
3 I( ]# J/ G9 w! H" c' WI've a date with a butterfly
2 I9 W2 G5 p$ C9 MTo dance on the air.
8 H* [, `' ?" a6 iIf I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
( c, m7 p) L+ @& hRight next to you.

Don't be sad
When you remember me,
1 {% d7 m" Q- ?( EFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
+ o! ?3 f' F, E; cWild and free,
' W+ Z7 R" a1 }5 g0 ^. ?2 y8 ^* O6 HFlirting with the lighting,
. M3 N  V/ L4 i0 `# _Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
% d! e' w3 Y' u1 z7 y" sSwimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
! B+ _* U+ G0 V* j! I( \9 jWhile I'm waiting for thee.