我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
" A* X2 G3 T5 B! M) q0 H: F; A是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
2 }2 l' ?; n8 F. f白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
1 T8 W. M/ \* f1 ]% {  A邻居气宇轩昂
; B! e) I! A2 F: }如同女面朱熔基
  f. V% ?8 O! {0 k' d邻居的字
0 b  }' l6 p1 L9 E0 I' X2 Y则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
1 i: T3 }" ~, ?说她属土龙
, U; D9 ]; }* L+ h其笛声也悠扬
  E# i4 g8 i: R8 ?* u. `, s那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
' t% {8 w4 }5 w! R反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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5 P6 z8 \# h* S! YLiving here for more than thirty years,
0 S6 G2 n5 o& `6 b8 r7 A7 Kmy prestigous neighbour
. @/ {6 @* Z9 i* s9 ?6 Q/ wis the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
2 g. A) }1 J8 H0 X& V' K* MHer light-footed movement
9 y9 c2 f  n+ A5 V# w: x; |  y5 D7 ]is just like a flying swallow.

; k( F2 {7 {( H/ ]' ~; f  vShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
# d/ J* ?" }8 z  h2 F1 w6 nshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

" C! [# c: u9 x! c- j! a8 wWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
; f4 N( a% y7 {3 oShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
  R, b1 E$ y3 X4 E& h+ {  kWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
4 z% i; D+ w8 W! Lthat is the sole sound going into my ears
* V7 f# ?! i: b% ?from the next side of my wall;
6 t$ i2 j6 J8 i; b1 s+ o: Wthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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9 S4 Q5 v  f% B4 _( M& \% N土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
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Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
9 s& f: J7 n6 i8 j真的是太像朱镕基了！
! y5 D. w5 i2 c. \, Z+ ?hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。