In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

+ p' S3 S; d9 M6 Q. l: O  r8 gIn the garden of my heart
2 A! N! v! Z2 b; `6 H) X) x- |; d- _9 XYou planted a tree
2 S; l( v+ q  c% MFrom sunset til dawn
8 L) f" c5 R' e. H# d# c0 R5 a3 RThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

" ?" n; ~2 ^; Z$ RIn the memory of my life
You planted a dream
& B. z# m! I) \" y7 yShould the sky fall down on me
( [) F8 k8 ~) M1 e! U5 C) `May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
. K! p2 X# D# K0 tBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
6 y9 M& l9 V. PFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
: k% ^$ q) w# VNourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。

+ H+ Q" _! C: @6 F4 n- a加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
9 m* X6 d/ J( q6 L+ B  E% R' I加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

1 Y7 ]' ^" F0 P( d7 M  I五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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$ V8 A6 W% ^, sSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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6 p' y; V0 u) k$ `Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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, L) I% g9 J$ V& n- G- @  Y* b3 l: c诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
3 e+ E3 `# @  t% qthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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+ C9 O& H! H! n: ^# o比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
& ]; \" w) ]# c5 pFor I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
5 o) w) Z- E8 }) x6 P, y& DTo dance on the air.
2 Y: d* I- I! ?0 TIf I'm missed, find a flower,
' F& V- \+ D; ]% _0 F$ FI'll be there too,
+ U; I4 q6 ^" Q6 w2 ]" z* DSniffing it's fragrance
5 ^9 q+ ], S* p; b& M/ E5 O( HRight next to you.
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  d% H4 x% S' ?* E# mDon't be sad
$ b* b8 |( c9 zWhen you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
, c$ z3 ]# x) ?  w$ a& H: iFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
3 J, J" c6 ]4 E- ?+ A6 }) w- rTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
. S" k/ @1 g5 {Enjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.