In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
8 l4 I3 O1 F- M7 o1 Z* J. a& lDevoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
% x4 U2 K  p6 ?: b4 [You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
( ?" W' {" ~8 e7 j4 }# |- g, ESewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
. Y* @/ P: X# F" yYou planted a tree
! G1 H0 x2 h5 }8 V4 m/ JFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

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4 C' S1 g. N! E% j眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

1 t' U/ ~8 i/ X7 q8 G7 L写得真好。

0 v# A' i, F! R/ X! `8 P6 p加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
" U( ]+ |2 E8 I: z' ~. V, J" `加精加精！

% B9 l% @. n- A1 A我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
' o0 P2 K/ M2 {  ^: n如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

' M6 V4 ^  O) R) E* a- DSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
7 n; j: f5 Q; r2 \Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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( g3 t. J1 |1 o' I0 m" M1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

) C. M/ H8 _- \8 L2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

6 [2 R* g" m4 [) c9 i+ dShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
) u" J2 ]3 n& l6 gthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

/ D: N# a5 O/ e诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
, `) [- c' X2 r4 D3 Fthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

9 D$ R% Q  s( f, u# {Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

9 m+ F! B* z* p; z2 O有啊，有很多经典的例子。

0 v* m$ i2 N. U  B7 l比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

" v$ q- _5 ^: `' F! CDon't weep at my grave
+ N0 Y1 L$ D1 y- _For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
1 H3 m& e: X7 @4 ~6 I, T: zTo dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
8 p2 _- @8 D* _! b8 X6 i' e& R6 P4 JI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
+ Z7 b& B! e. O* K0 ?& y/ k4 CRight next to you.
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Don't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
* g5 D* b$ E# q1 o6 H3 c& aChasing the thunder
Time and again,
1 p& t. K7 j& mSoaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
- }; _# X% q' B& k: L9 Z8 VEnjoying all of nature
) R. m* x! X6 L% X! \While I'm waiting for thee.