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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
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From sunset til dawn3 q# E5 q. `3 p% t5 B
Through darkness to light6 t, U; d9 a3 ], i- I
Nourished with my soul
1 x1 b2 E; f+ G0 G; x5 ~: c! qDevoured my sorrow by thee/ {7 l* T8 k/ ~& [( C

) P( j. l- K$ q3 VIn the memory of my life
6 S% G4 q; k7 h, WYou planted a dream# I! Z& j8 M7 I5 D. c
Should the sky fall down on me
, R. o) {% r' y: z# ^) \0 A: s0 xMay promises fade in the sea; v1 l/ {  T, z6 e
Sewing back every broken pieces
1 J0 X$ \- H4 I6 A* q4 L% eBursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
3 N/ N/ t& Q- N听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
4 I: B/ n, s6 G8 rYou planted a tree4 k" {8 M  R6 W: U; E
From sunset til dawn9 A  W) J: o& `+ p, w
Through darkness to light
7 p, S. G0 [1 p0 C" ?3 p* C$ o) n9 o& ONourished with my soul
5 ^0 z5 @+ _  d  U0 |9 n: e6 xDevoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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6 Z2 g0 B* ~, ~0 k写得真好。9 Z! B7 Z& F7 Y+ C! v( ~! y( `. n

3 R* i: J6 P: A& e" u( {9 E+ ?) T7 B加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
( {1 h" }; z5 H( D# ]眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
, c' ~6 T; |& l: B% J写得真好。+ O; x" H" N6 {# G9 l  q* A
加精加精!

6 S6 l( p0 T5 y) b# a, {' z我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
! N* H" ?$ D1 q6 }0 j( D7 C* b如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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4 b" L1 Q3 z. m1 H0 e/ N5 ~+ DSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表2 n/ I# \+ s1 E/ A8 q1 i
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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- v) I+ ?8 h" R# l# ]  XSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.* |, P% h. s* z/ p+ m2 _: L' D
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".5 O! h( g9 \3 T7 W) ~
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。" T$ c" g  P0 h  k2 O

+ c0 Z3 V2 N# i: `Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表1 h0 Q9 y/ D1 v
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。% q2 q) W' `; o/ Y

8 D# O1 L" w. Z0 U( r% P' \+ OShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表% E7 f. w( S0 ~
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。/ O6 P; m. ?  R2 x+ S/ Q

4 A" l; `  h" a3 C0 YShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊,有很多经典的例子。! p' W$ `: R+ }* O: ?* b: @7 {

) o  t2 W" C; \" q比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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2 M" n% P3 C( H- }: r% WDon't weep at my grave$ f- r6 g# n- u
For I am not there,. u0 M7 {; B) i; w
I've a date with a butterfly% h; h0 p2 _. B5 w8 z- I
To dance on the air.# Z, X6 I) {) T1 Z) Z5 M
If I'm missed, find a flower,, i; i, F  u) R% H" t; G: P
I'll be there too,
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Right next to you.* f) h6 f; T% ~

9 @* M+ l8 G  }7 iDon't be sad) H/ N- }+ M( K$ ]( ]
When you remember me,
  }, j" g' S2 |, n: I! {+ n9 WFor I'm singing in the sunshine,' `8 _; |  E8 m5 N- Q
Wild and free,) }* O- c3 N- G2 p& [9 t3 G
Flirting with the lighting,5 |% P) E; G0 i7 O8 ^
Playing tag with the wind,' \$ M7 Z% v' _' w4 u; Q/ ~
Chasing the thunder
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' v7 z: T: ?4 f- H9 [; K- VSoaring with the eagle,
# \# @6 f% z6 m" FSwimming in the sea,6 c  q) e$ K3 U. Z; w
Enjoying all of nature
* g) w5 e9 P, n! qWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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