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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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5 v" B' X! \1 V% s3 |In the garden of my heart0 e! m1 o) T0 Y
You planted a tree8 u. ^( O) [) P
From sunset til dawn
* i- p( E. y" o7 F/ z$ g, CThrough darkness to light1 n) ]. s) F! u0 g9 p$ X" j3 R
Nourished with my soul
0 H+ N! L; V% k2 [Devoured my sorrow by thee
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% R; v0 N! g" y; I8 e; NIn the memory of my life3 z. v3 F' a$ n; v7 `: I
You planted a dream2 d2 b! D3 ?! h, F% ^+ t& p9 V
Should the sky fall down on me
% d9 {: x: r- M. dMay promises fade in the sea
+ L$ \2 o# z) v+ G3 k8 X9 P0 D) Y9 o0 MSewing back every broken pieces' p6 ?6 Z2 n7 z7 k) c1 r
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表# ~) _, r% ~, }* q
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
7 V) p) ^4 ]/ Y2 {3 k2 ]You planted a tree
2 @  j7 d: `' m& r4 _; CFrom sunset til dawn
$ b/ ~4 H! s0 rThrough darkness to light
# d: {1 q8 G* m" e8 aNourished with my soul
9 D4 {; _  P8 W: DDevoured my so ...
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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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写得真好。
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
% Q0 X5 L7 u( K* I2 q眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?/ h1 R1 f; o  \" C
写得真好。
4 f) S- H, _! T* \加精加精!

# ^) V6 g& J9 k3 b9 I& H. y9 G我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
3 X$ \$ g. K' y4 `, Q如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.* ?, E/ d+ a1 j+ Z# C, m

* @" O* P, R* z4 y7 HSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表" B$ _/ |; n# C+ B7 }6 V
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.; ?' ?9 R/ E4 Q9 T1 j
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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# f2 Y* a6 e4 W- n& k: xThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.5 w7 _- o/ h+ F  l* \! t7 d1 ?0 d1 ~
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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" {( A* j5 C, ~1 E' s5 I) r5 N5 z2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。: `9 o' [9 A% A
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
/ ?7 P0 J* g4 t$ f& t( ]* sthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。5 n( Z6 h! T$ m2 C* Y

; G. g% m$ G$ W4 _# DShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
3 F0 b3 H3 W: u6 M& p* m/ f+ \thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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  S' M- v7 C' u有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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  O/ B5 z* J/ r+ E  b比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》2 L" C+ w3 s( L5 F! u0 k7 v
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Don't weep at my grave2 f+ a" F1 X3 m% W" Z: k
For I am not there,0 m' x. c/ h. R, O. i0 c
I've a date with a butterfly
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If I'm missed, find a flower," J+ h* z/ Q# Z9 T+ c& Q8 M
I'll be there too,% D" G: v% Q) X8 K  }
Sniffing it's fragrance
6 Z3 |4 Z1 @8 v6 `' f, dRight next to you.
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Don't be sad
7 r3 x! D" ]( B7 x/ V/ k# \" EWhen you remember me,7 g2 i% |9 V3 X! \& k5 B5 I
For I'm singing in the sunshine,8 D* n- M5 f* m0 W; I) y2 x
Wild and free,
" H2 P8 N9 W! ]Flirting with the lighting,
6 w3 M, a0 e% e7 _, z7 \' z$ PPlaying tag with the wind,! m% v% _$ v  C2 `6 V* P) P
Chasing the thunder
8 E2 V# U5 r# P3 R% nTime and again,/ D! j# p: T3 c5 G6 C: x
Soaring with the eagle,3 m) O6 @, _4 p# N
Swimming in the sea,* c/ K- |- p. S* _
Enjoying all of nature
% U! U/ g" J' P3 ]While I'm waiting for thee.
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